rate_review Reviews

Another good chapter! More character development with Mokoto (the bit in the bookstore was amusing) and Kitsune. Always a plus!

I like the way your showing Kitsune's big sister side as well.

Like the start of this chapter with Keitaro waking up with Naru and Kitsune lying on top of him. That was amusing.

I gotta say, Motoko's writing really adds a nice touch to this chapter, the way it reflects what's going on in her mind and her mood and all.

I'm actually kinda interested in seeing what's going with Motoko's friends as well.

Can't wait to see what happens next!

Just finished chapter 11, and I wanted to say before continuing that this is awesome.
The characters feel perfect and there's still Love Hina's defining romantic difficulties; though Keitaro isn't worked up about his promise yet.
I would easily say this is The best Love Hina fanfic I've read so far, and certainly great overall.

I hope for many more chapters!
Which is probably why reviewing now, I'm holding off inevitable disappoint that there's a last chapter!

I can't wait to see what happens in Chapter 18. I will re-post this when I get logged in again. So please update soon.

Glad to see things are starting to progress with the whole Keitaro/Motoko thing. Really liked the bit with Keitaro pacing back and forth while going crazy trying to muster up the courage to go stand up to Motoko. Was kinda hoping for something fun like the dual in the manga (never saw the anime) where Keitaro beat her by accidentally catching the blade, but still, this is interesting. Keitaro definitely has to find a way to earn her respect though, otherwise I don't see their relationship truly getting better anytime soon.

I also like the scene's with Motoko taking her first attempts at writing stories. Wonder(hoping) if she'll start writing the romance stories like in the manga?

Can't wait to see what happens next!

I can't wait to see what happens in Chapter 18. I will re-post this when I get logged in again. So please update soon.

I have been enjoying this fic, though it is very slow to develop for something with `Harem' as a code. With that in mind, it worries me that you started another fic. I hope you continue to focus on Tug-of-War.

Good chapter, though terrible spelling.

pak40

Interesting chapter. First mention of Mitsumi in the story. Can't wait to see her in the story!

Funny, I completely forgot that Tsuruko was married.

Like what you've done with Mokoto's back story. Gonna be fun seeing the character interactions between her and Keitaro later on.

Keep up the good work!

Tsuruko having a happy married life is pretty rare. Motoko lusting after someone who isn't Keitaro in a lemon. Even more rare. Refreshing to see.