schedule
February 7, 2022 at 12:00 AM
could describe the sex scenes quite a bit more, tbh
could use other pokemon as well, as other human women he could fuck.
have him catch more pokemon.
just because lucario and gardevoir are used more often doesn't mean you have to cut them out completely, just have them take turns with other pokemon, that's all.
maybe you could have him take a trainer or two under his wing, an apprentice of sorts or something?
honestly story feels more like a summarisation/narration, rather than an in depth story.
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schedule
February 23, 2014 at 12:00 AM
your story has much potential, but you do not properly use it. By summarising, as you have done so far, you bypass a lot of oppertunities. please do slow down a bit and use the time to make some descriptions and dialog, too. there is no need to rush through the story.