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Put it so that decisions Kitsune made to use him become huge mistake and awake him dominant side her ending up been him pet bitch(collar, leash.. full run all out) but keep it hidden from rest.
Could make it gradual or maybe some blackmail or something that makes Keitaro go over the edge since I kinda think that his not aware whats happening besides few others maybe.

well for first chapter looks ok. it gives background when did this all started and how did Kitsunes website developed. It was smart move to put all that before he came in dorm because that way you removed the problem that he didn't notice some stuff(lets face it Su is not exactly subtle in her actions)
I just hope Kitsune website is underground one so not everyone can recognize people from the Hinata Sou - Dorm.

Allyna that's kinda not bad idea in all honesty.
It could be made so that after that little vote request Kitsune just simply try to go back to usual things of doing, but here is the fun thing, what if the request is a bit more personal on more then just on sexual level or at least from Keitaro point of view. After the request is over he could maybe start questioning things why is that something that was "good for him"(in his opinion at least, any type of attention I guess) suddenly and brutally just stop and she lost any interest in him.
maybe make so people after seen it decided that they didn't like it as they thought they would and kitsune drop it. He could just not be ok with it and by that act start's making problems for Kitsune business when he start's to investigate things in dorm or find some cameras.

Once he realize he was played out like a fool and his feeling just drop in grinder then tossed to side corner in the name of profit... it would give logical point of view of why he could awake his change in character with determination to humiliate her.
Also you could it make so that there is some others request to do something with Keitaro but by that time he knows of Kitsune business so he just denies her and in process of her constantly trying to pull off the request he draws her in the mind game or cat and mouse ( you did say that cameras works in entire dorm so plenty of nice opportunity to make some of Allyna's ideas [pet bitch(collar, leash... full run all out)+ leather, latex?? :D ] to put in the effect. that would also put a lot of new viewers on her site so you have logical path why she would of not at first be to thrill with idea but still go with it for sake of profit or something else.
In time that would change I guess while they get to know each other in new "strange relationship" that would evolve in time.

Not sure how would implement other characters and not go in harem theme witch is something i would really not see... way to common and don't give suspense how would main character deal with different character encounters.

PC:Sorry for the long review... I just thought I could give some ingestion for possible things in the story since you mention you wanted some thoughts about it , Didn't plan to make it this long. Hope you don't mind and sorry about bad English...

Great start I can't wait to read more

i hope Kitsune involves the other girls

no NTR please

I would really love to see Shinobu and Motoko go at each other like in another story but only with Shinobu learning from Motoko to please herself. It is only a thought.

Really good story....very sexy and all that.
This chapter actually brings to mind something I'd like in a 'Love Hina' story, and that's the kind of things Keitaro gets up to when he thinks no one is watching...I mean he is basically a giant pervert so you can't tell me he's not always sniffing panties or using the girls shoes as a fleshlight or something.

I also hope you continue this with some domming from the bottom...you know mix up the femdom formula a bit, rather than having the standard easily manipulated Keitaro that you usually use. Also a scene with Naru at a gloryhole would be cool...just saying.

Please keep up the good work.

Yo,

I like the first chapter so far.

Please also add:

Kanako
Sara
Nyamo
Narus sister
Haruka
Motokos sister
Su's sister

I hope you update soon.

Isn't a bad idea although the word cunny over and over gets kind of repetitive. As for the story, if you do write more then it's a simple question of whether you want to write Keitaro doing things to Kitsune or Kitsune doing things to Keitaro.

Well I already know I'd LOVE to see more of this one. And I certainly love the idea of Kitsune being his pet for the weekend.