rate_review Reviews

Another good story. I especially liked the part where Mizore, Kurumu, and Tsukune had dinner together. Can't wait to read the next part!

Hey Scotty its been a while! Like I said I've been busy but I finally got the chance to read a couple of chapters. I thought what you did with Cocoa was really smokin hot. I wish that there could have been more between her and tsukune but I see the reason why you went the way you did.

As for your next chapter I'll simply say that Kurumu + Mizore = one steamy story, that's was really fun to read!

Chapter 7 was short but sweet, a nice change of pace. What I like most about Tsukune + Ykari is how he is able to talk openly and honestly with Yukari about their situation.

This was another great chapter, the attempted peeping by Mizore's mother was a nice added touch. I had hoped that you might use the situation with Kokoa to pass on in Moka's feelings for Tsukune. Kokoa may not like it but she does know how much her "real" big sister love's him.

Believe me I understand your plight when it comes to writing threesomes. I just wrote my first Multi partner scenes and I had four people to contend with! Believe me it's not easy to write that many characters into a scene and not make it seem like you're leaving one of them or the other out of the action for too long.

This I think was your best chapter yet! A true masterpiece! Now I think I'll take a few minutes to master my peace. ;p Jk

Chapter 10 was purely good story telling and I enjoyed reading it.

Damn. Moka is a bitch nowadays.

Second review.

Interesting plot twist here where outer Moka is starting to seriously worry over the outcome. If Kurumu_and Mizore have the best chance right now if Moka forces the issue as long as the two make clear to Tsukune that he can continue to date both. The threesome last chapter should have shown that the pairs willingness to share.

Some predictions for Lilith's Mirror.
1) When the mirror reveals the true form of Yukari she will revert to being a 13 year old and be horrified as she is no longer old enough to sleep with Tsukune be she will go after him anyways to generate the kiddie porn line from the anime.
2) When the two Moka's are separated inner Moka will not want to be rejoined as its chance to win Tsukune in her own right.
3) I expect that Ruby will at last declare to Tsukune and ask to join the harem.
The ongoing weaking of the ward brings up long term questions of how does the author handle episode 13 where Tsukune confronts Moka's father over the lost Rosario.

Good chapter!

You continue to impress.

On a side note, Moka is getting very annoying. Personally I agree with your OT3 couple.

Either way, excellent work.

Just found this, very well written. I like the growth of the characters such as Tsukune becoming more confident. The pairing of Kurumu and Mizore was hot and a common one amoung fanfiction I thought yours was well done. I am looking forward to see if there is a threesome of Tsukunu, Kurumu and Mizore. Moka, both of them, have decide what they want as I figure the ultimatium is going to back fire.

Looking forward to more!