Great story, I'm looking forward to reading what comes next!
Honestly speaking, i devoured the Story.
I loved the slow beginning of it, then the increasing story telling speed and the biggest plus you got is that it is a story for telling a story and not a story for a quick wank.
The introduction in the first two chapter were already quite nice and well written, though the mystical secret which is between Zanna, Itzen and Evan is slighly bugging me. I do hope you can write a good explanation to it. Since it is slighly to fast for a guy, who never thought about pokephilia, to change to the point to which he has sex with one and then the sister of such pokemon at the next day. It's been barely 12h from seeing her to the point he got into the bed with her. Though you set a rash limit by saying they has to decide till end of the weekend, i hoped you would give them a bit more time and a bit more detail story.
In the end i am quite looking forward to see how you will continue the story.
What interrest me right now is what for a time plan you set for yourself?How long did you wrote for the first 5 chapter? When do you think you will release the next one as i am checking the site every day in hope for a new chapter.
Greets whitie