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for Before the Storm

by swirlingdoubt

schedule June 14, 2021 at 12:00 AM

I read this submission a few years ago and absolutely adored it. Sometimes when I enjoy a fic and come back to it years later, I find it doesn't live up to my memory of it -- but in fact, my reading comprehension has improved enough that I can appreciate it even more!

The imagery you use to describe the island in particular paints an exquisite picture, and your incorporation of Mewtwo's preparations for the events of the film and his backstory all come together beautifully. Those fleeting allusions to Mewtwo's lost memories are heartbreaking, and the thought that he might recover them through subconscious, telepathic dialogue from Nurse Joy (maybe that's from the drama CD? but I wouldn't know!) is INSPIRED.

Hot, thrilling, stunning execution, 10/10. Thank you for sharing! :)

person Daveb
schedule August 4, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Fantastic story!! Deep characterisation. And the sex stuff was staggeringly well written

 

Hope he warms up to Joy. The bit about wanting to impregnate her was promising. Hope you continue soon

person JayDee
schedule July 8, 2018 at 12:00 AM

I liked the use of switching in and out of visions/memories between the two and how it shows they’re getting samples of each other’s memories. It’s a good build up that shows the control that Mewtwo has over Joy’s situation and how easily he could kill her as in the bath.

I think Mewtwo pretty much nailed the relationship of  how some folks seemed to use Pokemon with “Morality is irrelevant. I caught you and so you belong to me. I can do anything I please with you. Isn’t that how Pokemon and humans relate?”

Oh and “Humans are more perverse than I could ever be.” Sounds like a challenge :p

I thought the fucking was hot, with some fairly original mental images introduced by lines like “Mewtwo was masturbating himself with psychic energy” and Joy’s realistic gag reaction to him trying to go too deep. Creative use of the telekinesis to move and control as well. I think my favourite bits were when Joy was  getting screwed bent over the console, or later on when he used his power to feel her orgasm with her.

I was able to enjoy it for the themes and interactions even with a vaguer/half forgotten memory of the source materials – my mental images of some of the surroundings might be a bit out, but that’s all.

Also I think you’ve fallen prey to the same oversight I make of checking the story for errors or spelling and typos (I still miss many of mine!) but forgetting to check the author’s notes, so there’s just a couple I spotted you might want to fix!

In Author’s note – you have descripitions for descriptions

In additional warnings - non-consentual for non-consensual

I haven’t spelled checked this review so naturally there’s probably typos in it. Regarding the author’s note - My familiarity of the Pokemon universe comes from the original Game Boy games of the 90s, and the cartoons from around the turn of the millennium/a little later, which were popular when I was at college. I felt sure I could muddle through. Naming convention wise, I always thought Musashi sounded better than Jessie but that’s not relevant to this review.

One last thought on the additional warning, for the part where Joy twice asks Mewtwo to stop and he ignores her, well, it feels like it’s a bit just past bordering rape.  

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