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2004-04-14
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Ano>Anonymous
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wow! that was amazing writing you did there. class=SpellE>i love the in-depth style you use. I also like the
interaction between the characters. amazing! i
really like the last part of this chapter. anyways, awesome story and please
update soon.
Finally, and update for you! Thank you for enjoying my
‘in-depth style(long winded, cough)’ and I hope you
continue to read this!
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acern
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2004-03-23
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7
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Anonymous
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Wow. It's all I can say. This is the best fic I've ever
read. In all seriousness. Is this the last chapter? You are the best author I
have read.
Sweeeeeeeet. Let me class=SpellE>glomp you for that. Or give you another chapter. Whatever
you prefer ^.^
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=192284">Lacewing
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2004-03-14
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7
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Signed
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e! Is there going to be more? I hope so! Got some stuff
solved, but way more problems on the way!
Yes, more stuff we have here, because…angst is good. (evil
laughter)
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=192284">Lacewing
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2004-03-13
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2
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Signed
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Hakuryuu means litterately
'white dragon' it's more of a descriptiion used as
a name.. like if he had been a dog he would be
called 'dog' likely.
Jeep or Jippu is also a lagitimate
name. Only hakkai calls him white dragon, most the
rest of the guys call him jeep.. or 'the parrot' or
'the rat with wings' and many other interesting pet names.
I found the link somewhere else and jfallfallowed along, hoping for a good
story, so far it's excellent. I love the charactorizations,
and frankly don't let some of the so called purists who have little real clue
about the langrage they are sticking so close to dictate how you write the
story! (unless you're done, then don't let them dictatte
future stories!)
anyway off to finish the current chap I'm on then
off to chap three.. likely tomorrow cause I'm about
to fall asleep..
Well lovely story I really like it. Baibai
You’re very right about the Hakuryuu thing, thank you! style='font-family:Wingdings;mso-ascii-font-family:"Times New Roman";
mso-hansi-font-family:"Times New Roman";mso-char-type:symbol;mso-symbol-font-family:
Wingdings'>J
We have much more silly characterizations ahead, like drunk
Hakkai!
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=521715"> class=SpellE>Fogwolf
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2004-03-07
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7
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Signed
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Now THAT was a crude chapter!
I must say that One thing I like a lot about your story is the Pulp Fiction
style you use!! Love the swearing of the guys and the way the class=SpellE>reffers about some, erm,
things! I know the story is very angsty but the way
they relate the events when you full use the POV
way is just too funny.
I loved the surrealistic (like magic-realism hahaha class=GramE>)scene with Hakkai and Kanzeon drinking. And I also loved
the ending of your last chapter (7) with the Goku thing.
Other last thing, I support the idea of Dreams
Coast about: "they could get
more love from Goku and/or Hakkai!" it could get very interesting too.
You're wonderfull, please keep going!
Lol class=GramE>, and keep going we shall! I just can’t leave Sanzo alone.
And my gripe is Sanzo and Goku are sweet together… but no sex, damn it!
Goku’s not meant for sex!! (cuddles him protectively) Angst IS funny-
especially when its not you.
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japangirlcmw
(japangirlcmw@webtv.net)
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2004-03-07
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7
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Anonymous
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you know, with each chapter, im class=SpellE>lovin this story more and more...I LOVE SANZO ANGST class=SpellE>lol...please update soon!
Awesome!
More Sanzo angst you say? Oh, I think I can do that! Just
for you, babe!
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priss
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2004-02-19
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1
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Anonymous
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Yeah you finally updated! This story is really good (minus
sanzo being paired w/ anyone) but this is one of
those hard to find good sanzo center class=SpellE>fics! great job and continue the story please!
Story is continuing in that uncessary
dramatic arc…like the prequels for star wars. Lol.
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Dreams Coast
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2004-02-18
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7
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Anonymous
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I can't believe what an outstanding writer you are.
Everything about this, draws me into it. I can't
stop reading...The emotional highs and lows, curvs
and twists were perfect. Sanzo certainly wouldn't be happy with the
"morning after". I think you also made a very good justification
almost, to the pairing. Both of them need love. Badly, and some might argue
"they could get more love from Goku and/or Hakkai!" The class=GramE>amount, isn't what it's about. It's the way they love,
perfect for each other. I love this, and I think you should continue it. I
had been waiting for so long for the update, and it was wwortworth the wait.
Ever a fan-
~Dreams Coast.
Here we go, the morning after and what I hope would be how
Sanzo really would react! Sanzo does need the loving, poor thing, especially
after being written by me.
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kitiara_uth_matar
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2004-02-17
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7
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Anonymous
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ohh... way too many sex scenes
here...
AND MORE ON THE WAY! (myahhahaha)
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=434556"> class=SpellE>KarotsaMused
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2004-02-16
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7
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The length was -worth- it ... that was intense!
Hakkai having a drink with Kanzeon Bosatsu...*giggle* was wonderfully absurd.
And the last four paragraphs were absolutely incredible, just utterly worth
it all. I loved the whole thing.
More drunk Hakkai and awesome Goku please! I hope I
fulfill your expectations!
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=341634">Blades of Ice
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2004-02-15
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7
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Sorry about the length? Pfft, I
love it! I don't enjoy it when authors make thier
chapters only a few pages long. This was great. I'm glad Gojyo decided to, class=SpellE>erm, listen to what Kanzeon said. (I love class=SpellE>GojyoxSanzo ^_^)
Gojyo is the only one who could ever successfully nail
Sanzo, in my humble opinion. I think this new chapter might be a little too
short, but we must pace ourselves. :D
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Jan (DJBrown@aol.com)
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2004-02-15
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7
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Anonymous
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You know everytime I have tried
to submit a review to you, something squirrelly happens on this page...I have
been trying to tell you how wonderful this series is...how well you have kept
within characterization...and how tantalizing the flashbacks have been giving
us glimpses into what happened...It has been tremendous...I found myself
checking almost daily for Chapter 7 (I found your series when you had already
completed through Chapter 6, thank god or I would be bald at this point...)
Thank you for a wonderful story! There are just so many wonderful scenes you
have given us...and I love a long well-written story...so length is not a
problem...>g< I will probably go back and reread the entire story to
date again..I have already read it at least 3
times...great stuff! Wonderful! Angsty! and class=SpellE>lordy those two can be stubborn! Update soon, please! I
will be eagerly awaiting the next chapter! ^_^
Thank you for going through the trouble of reviewing me!!
(very appreciative) I can’t believe you reread it that much,
I can barely do that without starting to correct things. But, I can’t go
through and redo everything, because we need to write more, more, more! Thank
you for reviewing me and inspiring me to write!
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addictedtomarbles
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2004-02-15
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7
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Anonymous
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Oh man its good! It's all good!
Score!! Hopefully more Sanzo-rific
goodness for you in the next chapter.
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile?use?userid=231846"> class=SpellE>Fish1
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2004-02-11
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6
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good story...I noticed that your chapter titles are from
"damaged" you have good taste in music my friend. ;) update soon.
Yes, yes, all my chapters are titled after song lyrics.
BTW- you get the prize for actually recognizing them!!
(applauds you)
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=51251">Lucifiel
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2004-02-05
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6
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My God. This is without a doubt the best Saiyuki fic I
have ever read, and I have read them all. Please continue. I have cash.
::waves cash::
Quickly, mail me cash! I was thinking about starting a
food drive on my f/spa/span>, but I can buy something
other than top ramen with money.
Lol, anyhoo-
continuing for you, free of charge!
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=521715"> class=SpellE>Fogwolf
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2004-01-16
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6
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Very good story!! You really have skill for writing so
huge story! I love the way you put the POV of every
character, and YES you put Hakkai chacarter very
well... Soo please don't stop including his class=SpellE>POV part.
I agree with the "elegant" comment about the mansion picture.
I wonder what going to happen with the godess
request... please update soon
We have the smut. Uh-huh. We have the smut. And Hakkai’s class=SpellE>POV is coming up again, very soon!
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Pimpking
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2004-01-12
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6
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Anonymous
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Awesome!! Congratulations!
You keep going with interesting stuff with the plot. Very elegant your way of
"showing" what happened in that creepy mansion(I'm
talking about that terrible picture) I liked it, cause it was graphic but not
grotescque if you know what I mean. ^^
Please keep going and... I'm hoping here for not waiting to long.
(feelings bad about how grotesque it got in chapter 7)
hope the italics took off some of the brunt, but either way thank you for
reading so far AND thinking I’m an elegant writer.
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zion
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2004-01-08
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6
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Anonymous
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This is one of the best stories I've read lately. Hope to
see a few more chapters up soon. Wonderful work! =^^=
Thaaaaaank you! Yes, I plan more
chapters now in that REALLY unnecessary fangirl
way.
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Dreams Coast
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2004-01-03
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6
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Anonymous
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My GOD your an amazing writer. I
haven't been so captivated from a piece of work like this since I read
"the Old man and the Sea", and "The Red Cross". I'm very
impressed with the fic on a whole, and the way you handle each class=SpellE>obstical that every author faces with such grace and
ease. You wrote each character perfectly, especially the interaction between
Sanzo and Gojyo. And the way the God/goddess of Mercy berated Hakkai and
Gojyo, made me feel ashamed and guilty just by the way you wrote it. I can't
wait to read the next chapter, and I hope you update this one just as quickly
as you promise. You're an amazing author, and I can't tell you how pleased I
am that I've found this fic to come back to. Thank you, for giving us all
something to read that provokes thought, intrigues us, and makes us think to
believe. I await your next chapter eagerly, dream in peace, trust love,
believe.
PS- I'm rooting for GojyoXSanzo...
Huggles you. I’m so glad to have
such an avid fan that takes the time to review. I just wanted to write a
story that correctly portrayed Saiyuki, since that seems to be severely
lacking in fic land. I’m so happy you like it so much and will keep writing
for you!
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=249629">pink class=SpellE>bunny1
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2004-01-03
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6
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I love this fic! *huggles it and
anime gher* Your characters seem so in class=SpellE>chara even when you put them iis sis situation, and you
weave the story so well - slowly bringing what happened in the past into the
present dialogue/actions. I think you have to be pretty talented to do that -
to be able to not give things away sooner than you want and also not leave
the reader feeling like they're missing something or the story isn't exciting
and too mysterious. The chara's emotions seem very
realistic as well. The anger/resentment/denial/guilt/etc. everyone feels.
They aren't centered around one emotion and stick to
just *that*, they feel lots of things.
I also love your story titles! "Start talkin'
trash and I'll come with my Smith and Wesson" heh class=GramE>..I don't know why but I really like that, as well
as your other ones. They seem to fit the story and don't sound stupid or
cornball...like with 'I Hate Him', I liked those titles too. ^_^ And, on
another note, I like Never No Answer more than I Hate Him, it just feels like
you've polished up your writing skills a bit on I Hate Him, and then wrote
this one. Not that I don't like I Hate Him, I do, just that I liked this one
more and you're getting better at writing I think. But I guess that's normal,
huh? Get better with practice...
I think you’re totally right! I’m even more confident
about this new chapter, its true that the more you write, the better you get.
Practice, practice. I also am doing a sequel to ‘I Hate Him’(or
should that be underlined?) now, so… damn those plot bunnies.
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Renuka
(firsfc@hotmail.com)
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2004-01-01
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Anonymous
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it's quite an interesting story although it is class=SpellE>slighty too depressing for my tastes. I really like the
fact that there might be at least a little gojyo n class=SpellE>sanzo in the future, i think
they make an interesting couple judging by the way they never get along.
It gets wacky silly? Gojyo and Sanzo will never get along?
I hope to ease up a bit of depression now with Sanzo getting to be class=SpellE>kickass again so please don’t start hating it!
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Ranger
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2004-01-01
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6
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Anonymous
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I am glad to see you updated this story; I have been
checking back to read the update as soon as it was posted. If Sanzo's blood
was used in the painting, why was he still alive,
and what did burning the painting do? I can't wait to see where you take this
story. I was so caught up in what was happening I didn't notice any spelling
or grammer errors, so I can't help you there. Great
story.
Sanzo is our tough cookie. He ALWAYS survives(though
that’s no excuse. Let’s just say that’s why this is a fanfic
and not professional). Here’s the wacky turn of events, just for you!
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chiefraz
(chiefraz@aol.com)
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2004-01-01
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6
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Anonymous
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Wow! It was worth the wait. Considering what the Goddess
has asked Goyjo to do, I can't wait for the class=SpellE>the next installment.
Oh ho ho, and it will only get
worse J
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Dreams Coast
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2003-12-29
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1
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Anonymous
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Your story is amazing, very impresive,
and attention to detail is very good too. You are one of the few people that
don't feel there's any rush when writing, and takes' their time explaining
everything they want to explain before moving on. You don't rush class=GramE>it, you don't say "How can I make this shorter and
better?" You're writing is unique via that it is long, but not at all
boring, or hard on the eyes. Many long but very good story's
are ruined merely by how they're set up, i.e. not enough paragraph indents,
and very very little dialoug.
I can't wait to see what happens, the story has caught my attention and I'm
keeping a close cat eye on this one. I would also like to just note that your
updates are very very sn> slow. But if this is the work
you produce, I can't wait to see what happens next.
And yet I am always thinking how can I
make this shorter and better…though for some reason it only gets longer…
(cough) for as long of chapters as I write, you always write equally long
reviews, so thank you as well! My updates are pretty scattered since I work
on different fics at different times, depending on
the mood. I’m feeling Saiyuki right now though. style='mso-char-type:symbol;mso-symbol-font-family:Wingdings'>J
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Pimpking
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2003-12-13
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5
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Anonymous
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Gez. Your story is really good,
the plot and the POV of each character clSpelSpellE>es wonderfull. also I like the
details, and the way you let "free" the information about what
happened...
I think is one of the best story around here.
m two little things:
1. I dont't think Sanzo is so bastard, class=SpellE>maiby he s going to "change" after this? X3
2. Man, your uppdates are too SLOW...
Eh he…(read above about slow
updates) Sanzo will get much more… human! Thank you for providing
constructive criticism though.
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priss
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2003-12-10
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1
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Anonymous
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Wahh! When are you going to
update? This is really the only promising sanzo
centered fic around! I think its good cuz class=GramE>its so suspenseful! Please update when you can!
Updating, updating. I need someone to constantly be
whipping me to write more.
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SHF
(crystal_yagami@hotmail.com)
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2003-11-26
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5
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Anonymous
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I like the way you bring out the actual story. You slowly
give more information out, making me wanna read more. Your class=SpellE>descri[ class=SpellE>tions are so vivid. Their thoughts seem so real. GREAT!
waiting to see the next chapter
Thank you, that’s what I aim for!
Here we go, more chapters for everyone!
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japangirlcmw (japangirlcmw@webtv.net)
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2003-11-26
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5
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Anonymous
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OMG! SANZO ANGST! class=SpellE>Hee hee i
love angst, lol. Is there gonna be any class=SpellE>yaoi? Just wonderin, class=SpellE>cuz Gojyo+Sanzo is my class=SpellE>fave,, lol.
I love this story so much!! Please update as soon as you can!
-Carley: The ultimate anime otaku
Lol, thank you for sticking
around for the yaoi. Now we will have class=SpellE>yaoi-licious chapters ahead after my fairly unnecessarily
long introduction.
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=219410"> class=SpellE>HentaiTenshi
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2003-11-25
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5
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Oh man! A friend recommended this fic to me a few weeks
ago! I love it so far! Keep up the good work and please update again soon! I
can't wait to see what happens!
Oh, I’m so happy there’s word of mouth about my fic! Tell
your friend thank you for recommending me!
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Nirvana Angel (ftyler@magma.ca)
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2003-11-22
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3
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Anonymous
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I love its fic so much! Words can't describe! I noticed
something in chapter 2 though, when Gojyo was giving CPR. Hakkai said that
you probably broke one of his ribs. I'm taking my CPR course right now, and a
person in our class has performed CPR on a person for a real life experience.
She had said that you have to break the ribs to get proper class=SpellE>acess to pumping the heart. Without breaking the bone and
cardiledge, you'd by trying to pump the class=SpellE>actuall ribs. Ribs are there to hold the lungs and
protect the heart, so Gojyo did do the right thing. >< just the student
in me, sorry. I love this fic loads though, I think it's the best Saiyuki fic
I've read so far. keep it up!
Oh…so…maybe I was sneaking in realism? (weak cough) Thank
you though, I do look up that sort of crazy thing because well, I’ve never
seen CPR preformed before so I’m pretty sure it’s not written exactly right.
Thank you for reviewing!
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Hades
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2003-11-21
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5
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Anonymous
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WOW!! update soon! PLEASE
Your story is very well writen, I like the plot,
how you describe the characters... etc.
I’m so sorry that I don’t update as fast as people would
like, but…I have no free time L Here’s more updates despite
it all, since you went through the trouble of reviewing!
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=434556"> class=SpellE>KarotsaMused
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2003-11-01
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5
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what can I say besides...wow? No matter how you complain
I've got to tell you this piece is so strictly in character it makes my eyes
burn. No undue fluff, (thank GOODNESS) no sugar for the sake of a happy
ending. I'm addicted, completely and totally hooked!
Lol, you can’t see me going
‘score’ on the other side of the computer. ‘addicted.’ Thank you for using
that word. Huggles you for reviewing.
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=476735"> class=SpellE>kiche-ivy
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2003-10-26
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5
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You are an amazing writter. class=SpellE>GojyoxSanzo is my favorite pairing but I can never find
good fics with them together. Yours is by far the
best that I've seen thus far. Keep up the wonderful work!
Why AREN’T there more Gojyo/Sanzo fics?
I don’t understand it myself, which is why I write this. Thank you for
reviewing!
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Antigone
(pandorasbite@hotmail.com)
>
>
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2003-10-26
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1
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Anonymous
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as much as i really like the
plot of this fic, you've got the characters all wrong. I understand that
Sanzo doesn't really like his life but he does care about the group. they are
more like brothers as they travel, especially Hakkai who is more likely to
hurt himself before he ever hurt Sanzo or the others. They save him from
selfself and care about him a lot. Sanzo is the center of the group- like an
adopted father to Goku who he cares for like his master cared for him, and
brother to Gojyo who he bickers with, and he makes sure that Hakkai doesn't
fall into depression and when he does they take care of him. I class=SpellE>havent seen all of the eps yet
but thats what class=SpellE>ive gotten out of it so far. I understand that class=GramE>its just a fic but Hakkai and Sanzo are so out of
character that I couldn't leave it alone. I really do like the plot of your
fic though so im gonna read it anyway since class=SpellE>im kinda used to class=SpellE>fics being ooc. You do write
really well though.
Ouch…my ass.
Thank you for the grain of salt at the end though.
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=444976"> class=SpellE>chiefraz
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2003-10-25
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I wish I could write like you. Your portrayal of Sanzo is
right on the money. Angry, frightened and letting his ego destroy him. Good class=GramE>work, can't wait for the next chapter.
Yay, thank you! That’s the best
compliment of all! Thank YOU for reviewing.
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MsC
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2003-10-22
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5
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Anonymous
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Sanzo POV predictably fabulous.
A beta would pick up those continuity and other errors but I don't care
because they truly don't spoil my enjoyment of the fic as they would with a
less fascinating piece. I'm also enjoying the way the action is being worked
in. Now please update soon!
I do have one beta-er, and
always looking for more! (poke) Thank you for reviewing though and I hope to
update faster now that its summer!
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=342419"> class=SpellE>Nanatsusaya
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2003-10-16
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1
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Damn you and your penchant for appealing to our guilty class=SpellE>fangirl pleasures!
...Please, please, please be my fic-slave? :D?
Oooo, fic-slave. I like the
sound of that…. (perverted fangirl grin)
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=232555"> class=SpellE>Hagane
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2003-10-14
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5
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wow. it's been awhile since i
actually read something *this* good. there's really only one word to describe
it. sugoii. *-*
the descriptions weren't in excess and the character portrayals were spot-on.
man, you're one gifted writer you know that? *looks at author in admiration*
the way you presented sanzo was incredible-damn
accurate if you ask me. i can't help feeling that
this fic might just fit into the flow of the actual saiyuki
series...it's just so damn good!
so...in response, and appreciation i hope, could
you update? soon? onegai?
Eeee class=GramE>(screams like catholic school girl) thank you! My class=GramE>appreciation to you- no quick tie-up after chapter 7, no, full
blown on act two! Thank you for the sugoi!
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Jane (mikami1@inwind.it)
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2003-10-12
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4
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Anonymous
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The fict is great! It's long but
not boring, and very well written. But I found some errors in it... First the
author says the youkai who took Sanzo has a pair of new shoes, but then it
leaves footprint with bare clawed feet; then at first Gojyo and Hakkai in the
mansion can't get Sanzo's robes because they are nowhere to be found, then
Gojyo in his and Sanzo's room get a packet of cigarettes from Sanzo's robes
(?) and then back again at the mansion Gojyo and Hakkai find Sanzo's robes
but they are in shreds and so they leave them there; Moreover, if Sanzo left
his gun back at the bank where he was fighting before he ended up in the
river, how could Gojyo find it in the mansion with the grip stained with
blood? Finally, Gojyo is not the strongest of the team, Goku is! Goku is much
stronger than anyone else! However the fict is more
than worth to be read, hope it will be uploaded soon
Thank you for pointing out the errors, that was very
helpful and I corrected immediately! And –well- Goku soooo
gets his kick-ass moments, and more ahead for our favorite monkey boy!
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=74925">Anya
Malfoy
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2003-10-11
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5
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I've fallen in love with you, it's just so perfect, so
very, very perfect
I’ve fallen in loith ith you too. Let me write more for
you, my dear.
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Tricia (tricia@juxtaposefantasy.com)
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2003-10-10
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5
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Anonymous
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wow, another great chapter. I look forward to updates to
this fic every time I come to the site. Great story. Great writing. Keep it
up.
Well… too bad it can’t be on fanfiction.net, eh?
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mlisubaru
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2003-10-09
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1
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Anonymous
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I just love how in character you keep everyone! This story
is progressing really well! I can't WAIT for the next chapter to come out!
Thank you for reviewing! Characterization is what I strive
for… along with a plot(cough)
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wyn87ash
(wynband@yahoo.com)&n
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2003-10-06
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4
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Anonymous
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The story is really excellent. I have been reading quite a
number of stories by different authors, and I find your style truly unique.
It has a very emotional side to it, yet it does not burden the readers with
any emotions that become too personal and drive the story off point. The
suspense in the story keeps building, never stops, thus providing an amazing
on-the-edge-of-the-seat experience for the reader.
You're truly an excellent author. I hope you will continue your fabulous
work. Such work is truly hard to find, when one searches hopelessly for a
good story or two to read in an endless sea of one-time short stories.
I'm looking forward to reading the continuation of this story, as well as any
more stories that you might be writing in the future.
Ooooo! Thank you! ( class=SpellE>huggles) You’re going to love this then, because I’m
going to continue this to the excessive point!! Sanzo’s just too fun and you
gave me too nice of review to quit!
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sze
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2003-10-05
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4
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Anonymous
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I love the way you portrayed all the characters! How long
are you going to keep Sanzo in the dark?? He needs to take revenge! :)
Looking forward to your next chapter!
The whole point of this new arc…is to write Sanzo with a
shot-gun.
Any more and the plot bunnies will kill me. But he has his
day. Night. Year.
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=33494">Rosalyn Angel
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2003-09-29
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4
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Signed
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This story is absolutely stunning.
Amittedly Hakkai, to me, is the hardest character
to write, but I think you did a fine job. You nailed the other characters
right on; I was amazed. x_x and the DETAIL, class=SpellE>yo, the DETAIL! I just ... I love it. It took me a while
to read, but it was worth using 50-60 pages to print it out.
The horror of what happened to Sanzo was protrayed
really well. I'm wondering, though, how he'll take it when, if, he remembers.
x_x
*poke poke* I LOVED CHAPTER THREE! ^_^ It was so...
so Gojyo. ^_^ How you wrote his view on Sanzo- it was just PERFECT.
I'm wondering about that cursed forest. x_X going to learn more about it? And who was that youkhat hat fled from the room
they found Sanzo in in the mansion?
Need more. X_X NEED. Am seriously considering
adding this to my favorites list. ^_^ And since I only have, like, eight
stories on there and I've been on FF.Net for two and a half years, that is a
very good thing. ^_^
Can't wait for more!
-RA, out
Lol, Hakkai was the character I
was most frightened to write, because he’s just so cool. I didn’t want to
ruin him! I can’t believe you printed this out either, that’s the biggest
compliment ever! Thank you for reviewing and…and…here’s to more Gojyo viewing
Sanzo! (oh that sounds dirty)
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Anime_Thimble
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2003-09-18
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4
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Anonymous
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No, you didn't butcher Hakkai at all,
I thought you got his character right. However, I am really unhappy that this
fic is so good, it kept me up half the night reading
it in one go!
Please update soon, I want to know if Sanzo remembers and what happens when
he does.
^-^
Aw, I’m making someone lose sleep. That shouldn’t make me
so happy, but it does. Thank you for reviewing, so here’s an update!
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Anime_Thimble
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2003-09-16
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1
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Anonymous
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Yay! How good does this fan-fi loo look! I'm gonna go read it right away!
Oh, it’s packed full of fan-service, baby!
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terrorcotta
(terrorcotta@yahoo.com)
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2003-09-15
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4
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Anonymous
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This is going pretty well! I think it's going to be HUGE
by the time we start to see the end, tho. Maybe too
long. Perhaps you should move the plot along a bit faster now that all the
plot points are in place. Just a suggestion. I like it overall.
No end in sight, but now at chapter 8
things are finally moving! Thank you though, I did want to speed up
and you told me so!
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alex
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2003-09-08
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4
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Anonymous
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I thought you wrote hakkai well.
Any way this story is good but also sad poor sanzo!
Anyway its one of the best stories on here. Please continue to update!
Yay, thank you for the ‘best’!
Here’s some more Sanzo for you, with eventually his revenge! style='mso-spacerun:yes'>
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Donna
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2003-08-31
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Anonymous
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Yeah, another chapter. I found this story after two
chapters were written and really enjoyed it; I'm glad you're updating it and
hope you can update again soon. It must take you a while to write; the
chapters are so long.
I especially enjoy how each chapter is set mainly in the point of view of one
of the group. I think you have captured their characteristics and inner
voices very well. I think you did a good job with Hakkai, and you shouldn't
be afraid to write from his point of view again. The way Hakkai was acting, I
could almost see this being SxH as well :)
Nod, nod. Thank you for recognizing that I writng
ng
chapters, thusly…it takes time to update. But, that’s still not a very good
excuse. Thank you for noticing my POV play as well,
it’s so nice to have an active reader. Lol, and I
see you sensed my underlying Hakkai and Sanzo as well (shhh,
that’s our lil secret)
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class=SpellE>dalpin crage
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2003-08-21
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3
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Signed
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Wow! This fic is friggin'
awesome. The plot moves beautifully while the characterization is accurate
and precise! Also, it helps a lot that the pairing is Sanzo/ class=SpellE>Gyojo. /p>
/p>
Thank you!! Here’s to moving right along with good
characterization and more reviews!
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Nekochan
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2003-07-24
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3
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Anonymous
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Wow waited long for this update, i
kind of like it...do hakkai next. I'm confident you
will do an excellent job
MHakkHakkai is promised, trust me! Thanks for the comment!
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Tricia (tricia@juxtaposefantasy.com)
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2003-07-21
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3
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Anonymous
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Well, I thoroughly enjoyed "I Hate Him" and I'm
enjoying this just as much. As soon as you finished the Weiss fic, I checked
Saiyuki for updates everyday. Great story and you did a fine job with Gojyo.
I seriously doubt you'll have a problem with Hakkai. Keep up the good work!
Yay, it’s so nice to have a fan
go through all my fics. Thank you for cheering me
on for Hakkai, and here is an update after such a
long break.
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priss
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2003-07-15
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3
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Anonymous
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Wow you finally ted!ted! I think your representing them
fine as for Hakkai he can be nice but remmber he
does have a dark side I sure it still present. I think this is a sad but good
Sanzo centered fic. so keep writing I want to know what happens.
Hakkai will have his day, oh yes he shall. Thank you!
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Ms.C (haigh@ntlworld.com)
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2003-07-14
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3
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Anonymous
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I adored Gojyo's descriptions of Sanzo. 53 class=GramE>is far too uncommon. If Gojyo were bi then this is the way
he'd think about Sanzo. I admit to being very interested in seeing your take
on Hakkai - I think he's the hardest of the Ikkou
to write...
Thank you, I’m so happy you think I’m doing a good job
with Gojyo(he IS supposed to be the other main
character but I’m not so sure this comes out.). and Hakkai IS hard, but thank
you for supporting me.
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sf
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2003-07-13
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3
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Anonymous
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Great story, and excellent dissection
of Gojyo's thought processes. Unfortunately, I think you're dragging it a bit
too long -- you're starting to get repetitive. You might like to up the pace
a little.
Otherwise, still holding on and waiting for the next chappy
^_^.
I do feel repetitive , but I
wanted everyone’s take on it ^^; after seven chapters, things finally get
moving!
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=51251">Lucifiel
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2003-07-01
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2
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Signed
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OI! Update or I'll cry!
::point::
Please don’t cry! See, I updated!
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=407109"> class=SpellE>Luci shadow
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2003-06-30
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2
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O_o what happened to Sanzo?!
(I'm not stupid, I know what probably happened to him, but I just want you to
write it! ^.^ )
are you gonna write one chapter for each character point of view? that'll be
great, 'cause you're good at getting into their minds.
I can't wait to read more! ^_^
Lol, thank you and here’s some
more Sanzo for you.
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=21019">simmysim
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2003-06-24
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2
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Signed
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Your story is amazing. I have never read a Saiyuki story
that has such an honest, wonderful, interesting and TRUE portrayal of all the
characters. I find Goku to be the best-- how you write him doesn't ADD any
new characteristics, it just builds on the ones he
shows in the show and manga. I love your grasp on all of them. I love how you
can make each character seem like REAL people. You don't exaggerate faults or
strengths.
I love the pacing of this as well-- it wouldn't work unless you made each
chapter as long as you do, and it's just a joy to read. You're handling the
pain that this situation would bring very well, too. A lot of people seem to
forget that these people are (not in a literal sense [and oddly enough,
especially Sanzo]) human. The TORTURE they make them go through, just because
they think they won't show emotion any other way makes me queasy. ^^; But
you're doing this SO well. I'm loving the Gojyo and
Sanzo interaction. ^.-
There is ONE little, teeny itsy bisty part I
thought sounded a little odd: "They had yelled at him before for eating
with his mouth full before. Sanzo had shot at Goku once for talking to him
with food in his mouth before." The "before's"
make it sound a tad repetitive.
I can't wait for the next part: it feels like the actual series, and it's
like a dream come true to see one of my favorite couples actually going
through getting together. I'm so glad I found this fanfic
so fast! It gave me hope for this fandom. ^_^
Oh, thank you for such the long review and pointing that
part out as well. I went back and corrected it, thank you! I’m so glad you
find my portrayals to be correct, that’s all I want to here. Gojyo and Sanzo
forever!
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=51251">Lucifiel
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2003-06-08
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1
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Signed
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*Very* good Sanzo writing! You got him just right. I love
this story.
Thank you for reviewing all the way from the beginning!
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windy chaw (yr2526@hotmail.com)
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2003-06-03
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1
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Anonymous
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wel...i
dont think i need to tell
you how wonderful of your work so i just beg class=SpellE>ya to write it more...please? I wanna know who is doing
'anything' to my belove sanzo- class=GramE>sama(even class=SpellE>i dont know what is it)^^!
Here is more, but please feel free to tell me about my
work(comment whore)
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Birman
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2003-05-28
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1
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Anonymous
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Yet another addictive piece to tighten the class=SpellE>stanglehold on my grades. Why, oh, why did it have to
stop so suddenly?
Oh,stopstopping suddenly…any more(weak
cough). Now study hard so you can read your smut!
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merisp; sp;
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2003-05-04
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2
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Anonymous
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Ah... it took me forever to find a Saiyuki fic in here
worth reading. But this one was very much worth the search.
Everyone is written very much in character, so that's a plus. I know Hakuryuu
can be a pain in the ass to type, but at the same time its class=SpellE>sorta distracting to read 'jeep' all the time. It makes class=SpellE>sence from Sanzo's point of view (He dosn't
seam like the kind of guy who would go out of his way to remember the name of
Hakkai's pet), but from everyone elses point of
view it seams rather odd.
Might I suggested just typing it in once and using cut and paste for the rest
of the times that it's nessesary to use the name?
Other then that, great job. I look forward to reading another chapter of
this.
You’re totally right about the Hakuryuu thing, and thank
you for reviewing and mentioning that. Here’s another chapter for you.
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=342527"> class=SpellE>Gaelle
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2003-04-15
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2
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OO
Ow!
Poor Sanzo!
But what really happen to him?
I guess what...t...
Your story is really great and I would like really to read the following!
sanzo is great to being Sanzo (héhé)
but... ... what have you done to him! *squeals*
And Gojyo is cute with him!
A really great story! ^-^
Oh, thank you for the squeal, that lets me know it’s good!
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=95324">Ginzai
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2003-02-22
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2
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Signed
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Ah, Saiyuki.. Such a fun series,
and with a dirth of good fanfic.
Glad to see that you're working to fill the void. ^_-
Having read chapters 1 and 2, it will be hard to wait for the rest! I
especially like how you characterize so well not only Sanzo, but Goku as
well, and I can't wait to see Hakkai and Gojyo's chapters (assuming that you
will continue the story as you have for the first too) - as well as learn
more about what happened that night. I've got my suspiscions,
but it will be better read than imagined.
All in all, this is shaping up to be a wonderful fic. Can't wait for more!
^_^
Lol, I try(why
AREN’T there more good Saiyuki fics?). Thank you
for the review and here’s more for you!
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FH
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2003-02-22
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2
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Anonymous
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O.O.now THIS is a class=SpellE>fanfic. A lot of crap has been going through the Saiyuki
section lately, but fanfics like this one are my
only reasons for coming back.
It has perfect characterization, which in Saiyuki fanfiction,
is incredibly important and easily forgotten. This plot is spellbinding and
your chapters fly by, despite their length. (THANK YOU, btw, for making them
so long. ^^;)
I've only got theiestiest grips where there is a sentance
I would word differently, but those are wiped from my mind as soon as I keep
reading. =P
Also, there are many authors here who fail to realise
that through the humor, Saiyuki has a serious plot. All of those script- class=SpellE>stle humor fics get boring
really fast, so I thank you for writing an angst/drama fanfic.
I enjoy many fanfics, but this one I *love*-- I
*live* for writing like this.y'know?
Oh, thank you so very much, I live for thought-out reviews
like yours. I’m so honored that you pick this fic out of everything in
Saiyuki fandom! Thank you!
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=116896">Fall
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2003-02-20
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2
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like the first chapter, this one has got me asking
questions. and i'm still in the dark about what
happened to Sanzo. please continue soon =)
Lol, continue we shall! Thank
you for reviewing.
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Ishida
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2003-02-20
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2
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Anonymous
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Wow. Just. wow. There are times that the wording or
spelling could use a touch up, but that's petty. Just. wow. *blinks* class=SpellE>Jeeze, I hope you write more soon. Its
running in my head. such clear imagery. If I wasn't already involved in
drawing WAY too many things. wow. Tsa. class=SpellE>Sanzou's my favourite
Character. *cough* My hampster is named Sanzo. class=SpellE>Haha. waiting for the next part!
(whimpers) fan aruld uld be so inspiring…but I suppose
writing is just as good. Thank you for the review, both you and class=SpellE>lil Hamtaro Sanzo.
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thandie
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2003-02-20
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2
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Anonymous
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oh my, one can't say your fics
are not detailed.i was yearning for some twist in
the plot, but still i'm left in the dark!! I'm
dying over this fic, it's bad for the health, u know?
I'll keep checkin everyday for updates, keep on the
god work!
Lol, wow, I never heard of a fic
that could hurt(so complimented). Here are some
updates, though it’s no longer on fanfiction.net
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href="http://wwnficnfiction.net/profile.php?userid=94225">Lady class=SpellE>Gackt
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2003-02-12
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1
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Signed
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Ooh wow, you really started a Saiyuki fic! This is so
exciting ^_^. Awesome in fact! And an awesome start,
too. Seems you really would be a natural for Goyjo
and Sanzo ;). I'm looking forward to seeing what had happened to Sanzo that's
gotten the group so shook up. And I thought Sanzo's capture, with the river,
cold and snow, was done really nicely.
Don't even know which fic to anticipate for more!!
Lol, thank you for reviewing the
first chapter as well as all my other fics! Gojyo
and Sanzo did flow very naturally, so here’s to more of them!
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Berlitz
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2003-02-10
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1
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Anonymous
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Oh dear.... *scrolls down a little* there's no more? But
there has to be more!!! *Begs and shakes author* there must be, there
absolutely must be!!
I admit I was happy to find something by you in the Saiyuki section - having
read your work in the Weiß Kreuz
section...
Ann, tn, that was long. If that's a subtle hint of any sorts, maybe this
could be long too?
Ah, well. Great writing, as per the usual. Keep it up.
Please.
Thank you for always reviewing Weiss and this as well! I
wish it could have stayed on fanfiction.net but…well…it’s here now. Thank you!
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Monique
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2003-02-08
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1
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Anonymous
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More I read... more I like.... You are a very good writer!
In the story there is a very good description of the characters, not
stereotyped but real persons with their feelings: one of the best Sanzo I
ever read (as sf's one... ^_^); a very good class=SpellE>Hakkay, not only smiles ; maybe
a little too much tension between Sanzo and Gojyo.
I'm waiting for the next chapters, I think they'll be very interesting...
Please update as soon as you can!!
Oh, there’s never such a thing as too much tension!! Thank
you for reviewing, and hopefully this stays interesting for you.
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Ms.C
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2003-02-08
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1
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Anonymous
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You are the number one writer of the bitchy class=SpellE>uke. I am so glad you found Sanzo to play with - he
certainly gives Aya a run for his money. Also I don't get to read much
Gojyo/Sanzo and it's a personal preferance so class=SpellE>thankyou!
Lol, I love the bitchy class=SpellE>uke, thank you so much for that compliment. Thank you, class=GramE>that made me giggle and feel so happy-proud at the same
time.
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=116896">Fall
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2003-02-06
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1
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Signed
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yes, this is a good fic with a good plot. glad class=SpellE>i found this among the others ^_^
Thank you for reviewing right from the beginning!
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=143890">Kanzeon
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2003-02-05
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1
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Signed
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Mmm, I anticipate much
Sanzo-abuse . . .
Watch out for missing words and spelling errors though--they look out of
place in an otherwise well-characterised fic.
I try to beta but…it just never seems to work. Thank you
for reviewing!
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ALEX
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2003-02-05
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1
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Anonymous
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I THINK THIS IS A GOOD STORY SO FAR. I HOPE YOU UPDATE
SOON!
Oh, capital letters, I know I made an impact! Thank you
for reviewing all the way from the beginning!
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lux
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2003-02-05
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1
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Anonymous
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wow, one of the most intriguing fics
i have ever read about saiyuki
on ff.net. i really loved
it, i hope you're fast in your updates, cause now class=SpellE>i'm stuck in the ...a...a wonderful sanzo,
i must say; and i agree
with the previous reviewer: a reliable hakkai at
last! And gojyo being so secretive...nice, nice
fic!
Thank you so much! I wish ff.net would have let me stay,
but alas, I’m too dirty. And I wasn’t fast enough in my updates either, but
here’s to more.
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XiaoLi
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2003-02-05
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1
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Anonymous
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have i also mentioned that class=SpellE>i love you for NOT repeatedly making Hakkai bleat like a
goat, and not using the terms "baka class=SpellE>saru", "ero
kappa" and "urusei" over and over
and over?
Thank you for reviewing, and it’s my personal pet peeve as
well. These guys are real people, not comic relief!
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href="http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=251938"> class=SpellE>Shaoli
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2003-02-05
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1
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i've no taste for class=SpellE>shonen ai, but something about
this made me want to click the link and read.
and you're damn good. Sanzo at his very best, testy and bitter and angry.
Every single Saiyuki fanfic fight scene class=SpellE>i've run into so far has been an absolute bore, but this
one had me at the edge of my seat.
i'm glad i didn't notice
the huge word count on this fic initially, because even though they nlly
lly
put me off, lazy as i am, i
didn't even /notice/ it was longer than most, and i'd
gladly read your writing for many, many chapters. You got took us into
Sanzo's head and didn't let loose for even a second. It was intense. It was
beautiful.
You've just got some careless typos and other errors, and this annoying quirk
of using "anyways", which i believe to be
slang, when it should be "anyway".
This piece of work kicks ass. Just one more thing: why does such a good
writer have such a stupid penname?
Dude…don’t josh the nickname or I
get my Mexican counter-parts that gave it to me cut you up. That was almost
too harsh. But thank you for the review, I’m glad
you enjoyed my Sanzo. And I love fight scenes, so I’m uber
happy you thought it was good.
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Tricia (tricia@juxtaposefantasy.com)
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2003-02-05
1
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Anonymous
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Great writing. You do a great job portraying Sanzo. I
can't wait to read about the rest. Please keep it up!
You were the first reviewer on ff.net! THANK YOU!
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