Never No Answer | By : animegher Category: Gensomaden Saiyuki > General Views: 8695 -:- Recommendations : 0 -:- Currently Reading : 0 |
Disclaimer: I do not own Gensomaden Saiyuki, nor any of the characters from it. I do not make any money from the writing of this story. |
Okay, I am SOOOOO happy I saved
this from evil fanfiction.net freedom nazis!!
Everyone’s reviews were lovingly saved and appreciated, so I want to take a
moment pay my respects before we get on to act two.
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2004-04-14
7
Ano>AnonymousJ
Dreams Coast
2003-12-29
1
Anonymous
Your story is amazing, very impresive,
and attention to detail is very good too. You are one of the few people that
don't feel there's any rush when writing, and takes' their time explaining
everything they want to explain before moving on. You don't rush it, you don't say "How can I make this shorter and
better?" You're writing is unique via that it is long, but not at all
boring, or hard on the eyes. Many long but very good story's
are ruined merely by how they're set up, i.e. not enough paragraph indents,
and very very little dialoug.
I can't wait to see what happens, the story has caught my attention and I'm
keeping a close cat eye on this one. I would also like to just note that your
updates are very very sn> slow. But if this is the work
you produce, I can't wait to see what happens next.
And yet I am always thinking how can I
make this shorter and better…though for some reason it only gets longer…
(cough) for as long of chapters as I write, you always write equally long
reviews, so thank you as well! My updates are pretty scattered since I work
on different fics at different times, depending on
the mood. I’m feeling Saiyuki right now though. J
Pimpking
2003-12-13
5
Anonymous
Gez. Your story is really good,
the plot and the POV of each character es wonderfull. also I like the
details, and the way you let "free" the information about what
happened...
I think is one of the best story around here.
m two little things:
1. I dont't think Sanzo is so bastard, maiby he s going to "change" after this? X3
2. Man, your uppdates are too SLOW...
Eh he…(read above about slow
updates) Sanzo will get much more… human! Thank you for providing
constructive criticism though.
priss
2003-12-10
1
Anonymous
Wahh! When are you going to
update? This is really the only promising sanzo
centered fic around! I think its good cuz its so suspenseful! Please update when you can!
Updating, updating. I need someone to constantly be
whipping me to write more.
SHF
(crystal_yagami@hotmail.com)
2003-11-26
5
Anonymous
I like the way you bring out the actual story. You slowly
give more information out, making me wanna read more. Your descri[tions are so vivid. Their thoughts seem so real. GREAT!
waiting to see the next chapter
Thank you, that’s what I aim for!
Here we go, more chapters for everyone!
japangirlcmw (japangirlcmw@webtv.net)
2003-11-26
5
Anonymous
OMG! SANZO ANGST! Hee hee i
love angst, lol. Is there gonna be any yaoi? Just wonderin, cuz Gojyo+Sanzo is my fave,, lol.
I love this story so much!! Please update as soon as you can!
-Carley: The ultimate anime otaku
Lol, thank you for sticking
around for the yaoi. Now we will have yaoi-licious chapters ahead after my fairly unnecessarily
long introduction.
HentaiTenshi
2003-11-25
5
Signed
Oh man! A friend recommended this fic to me a few weeks
ago! I love it so far! Keep up the good work and please update again soon! I
can't wait to see what happens!
Oh, I’m so happy there’s word of mouth about my fic! Tell
your friend thank you for recommending me!
Nirvana Angel (ftyler@magma.ca)
2003-11-22
3
Anonymous
I love its fic so much! Words can't describe! I noticed
something in chapter 2 though, when Gojyo was giving CPR. Hakkai said that
you probably broke one of his ribs. I'm taking my CPR course right now, and a
person in our class has performed CPR on a person for a real life experience.
She had said that you have to break the ribs to get proper acess to pumping the heart. Without breaking the bone and
cardiledge, you'd by trying to pump the actuall ribs. Ribs are there to hold the lungs and
protect the heart, so Gojyo did do the right thing. >< just the student
in me, sorry. I love this fic loads though, I think it's the best Saiyuki fic
I've read so far. keep it up!
Oh…so…maybe I was sneaking in realism? (weak cough) Thank
you though, I do look up that sort of crazy thing because well, I’ve never
seen CPR preformed before so I’m pretty sure it’s not written exactly right.
Thank you for reviewing!
Hades
2003-11-21
5
Anonymous
WOW!! update soon! PLEASE
Your story is very well writen, I like the plot,
how you describe the characters... etc.
I’m so sorry that I don’t update as fast as people would
like, but…I have no free time L Here’s more updates despite
it all, since you went through the trouble of reviewing!
KarotsaMused
2003-11-01
5
Signed
what can I say besides...wow? No matter how you complain
I've got to tell you this piece is so strictly in character it makes my eyes
burn. No undue fluff, (thank GOODNESS) no sugar for the sake of a happy
ending. I'm addicted, completely and totally hooked!
Lol, you can’t see me going
‘score’ on the other side of the computer. ‘addicted.’ Thank you for using
that word. Huggles you for reviewing.
kiche-ivy
2003-10-26
5
Signed
You are an amazing writter. GojyoxSanzo is my favorite pairing but I can never find
good fics with them together. Yours is by far the
best that I've seen thus far. Keep up the wonderful work!
Why AREN’T there more Gojyo/Sanzo fics?
I don’t understand it myself, which is why I write this. Thank you for
reviewing!
Antigone
(pandorasbite@hotmail.com)
2003-10-26
1
Anonymous
as much as i really like the
plot of this fic, you've got the characters all wrong. I understand that
Sanzo doesn't really like his life but he does care about the group. they are
more like brothers as they travel, especially Hakkai who is more likely to
hurt himself before he ever hurt Sanzo or the others. They save him from
selfself and care about him a lot. Sanzo is the center of the group- like an
adopted father to Goku who he cares for like his master cared for him, and
brother to Gojyo who he bickers with, and he makes sure that Hakkai doesn't
fall into depression and when he does they take care of him. I havent seen all of the eps yet
but thats what ive gotten out of it so far. I understand that its just a fic but Hakkai and Sanzo are so out of
character that I couldn't leave it alone. I really do like the plot of your
fic though so im gonna read it anyway since im kinda used to fics being ooc. You do write
really well though.
Ouch…my ass.
Thank you for the grain of salt at the end though.
chiefraz
2003-10-25
1
Signed
I wish I could write like you. Your portrayal of Sanzo is
right on the money. Angry, frightened and letting his ego destroy him. Good work, can't wait for the next chapter.
Yay, thank you! That’s the best
compliment of all! Thank YOU for reviewing.
MsC
2003-10-22
5
Anonymous
Sanzo POV predictably fabulous.
A beta would pick up those continuity and other errors but I don't care
because they truly don't spoil my enjoyment of the fic as they would with a
less fascinating piece. I'm also enjoying the way the action is being worked
in. Now please update soon!
I do have one beta-er, and
always looking for more! (poke) Thank you for reviewing though and I hope to
update faster now that its summer!
Nanatsusaya
2003-10-16
1
Signed
Damn you and your penchant for appealing to our guilty fangirl pleasures!
...Please, please, please be my fic-slave? :D?
Oooo, fic-slave. I like the
sound of that…. (perverted fangirl grin)
Hagane
2003-10-14
5
Signed
wow. it's been awhile since i
actually read something *this* good. there's really only one word to describe
it. sugoii. *-*
the descriptions weren't in excess and the character portrayals were spot-on.
man, you're one gifted writer you know that? *looks at author in admiration*
the way you presented sanzo was incredible-damn
accurate if you ask me. i can't help feeling that
this fic might just fit into the flow of the actual saiyuki
series...it's just so damn good!
so...in response, and appreciation i hope, could
you update? soon? onegai?
Eeee(screams like catholic school girl) thank you! My appreciation to you- no quick tie-up after chapter 7, no, full
blown on act two! Thank you for the sugoi!
Jane (mikami1@inwind.it)
2003-10-12
4
Anonymous
The fict is great! It's long but
not boring, and very well written. But I found some errors in it... First the
author says the youkai who took Sanzo has a pair of new shoes, but then it
leaves footprint with bare clawed feet; then at first Gojyo and Hakkai in the
mansion can't get Sanzo's robes because they are nowhere to be found, then
Gojyo in his and Sanzo's room get a packet of cigarettes from Sanzo's robes
(?) and then back again at the mansion Gojyo and Hakkai find Sanzo's robes
but they are in shreds and so they leave them there; Moreover, if Sanzo left
his gun back at the bank where he was fighting before he ended up in the
river, how could Gojyo find it in the mansion with the grip stained with
blood? Finally, Gojyo is not the strongest of the team, Goku is! Goku is much
stronger than anyone else! However the fict is more
than worth to be read, hope it will be uploaded soon
Thank you for pointing out the errors, that was very
helpful and I corrected immediately! And –well- Goku soooo
gets his kick-ass moments, and more ahead for our favorite monkey boy!
Anya
Malfoy
2003-10-11
5
Signed
I've fallen in love with you, it's just so perfect, so
very, very perfect
I’ve fallen in loith ith you too. Let me write more for
you, my dear.
Tricia (tricia@juxtaposefantasy.com)
2003-10-10
5
Anonymous
wow, another great chapter. I look forward to updates to
this fic every time I come to the site. Great story. Great writing. Keep it
up.
Well… too bad it can’t be on fanfiction.net, eh?
mlisubaru
2003-10-09
1
Anonymous
I just love how in character you keep everyone! This story
is progressing really well! I can't WAIT for the next chapter to come out!
Thank you for reviewing! Characterization is what I strive
for… along with a plot(cough)
wyn87ash
(wynband@yahoo.com)&n
4
Anonymous
Yeah, another chapter. I found this story after two
chapters were written and really enjoyed it; I'm glad you're updating it and
hope you can update again soon. It must take you a while to write; the
chapters are so long.
I especially enjoy how each chapter is set mainly in the point of view of one
of the group. I think you have captured their characteristics and inner
voices very well. I think you did a good job with Hakkai, and you shouldn't
be afraid to write from his point of view again. The way Hakkai was acting, I
could almost see this being SxH as well :)
Nod, nod. Thank you for recognizing that I writng
ng
chapters, thusly…it takes time to update. But, that’s still not a very good
excuse. Thank you for noticing my POV play as well,
it’s so nice to have an active reader. Lol, and I
see you sensed my underlying Hakkai and Sanzo as well (shhh,
that’s our lil secret)
dalpin crage
2003-08-21
Signed
Wow! This fic is friggin'
awesome. The plot moves beautifully while the characterization is accurate
and precise! Also, it helps a lot that the pairing is Sanzo/Gyojo. /p>
/p>
Thank you!! Here’s to moving right along with good
characterization and more reviews!
Nekochan
2003-07-24
3
Anonymous
Wow waited long for this update, i
kind of like it...do hakkai next. I'm confident you
will do an excellent job
MHakkHakkai is promised, trust me! Thanks for the comment!
Tricia (tricia@juxtaposefantasy.com)
2003-07-21
3
Anonymous
Well, I thoroughly enjoyed "I Hate Him" and I'm
enjoying this just as much. As soon as you finished the Weiss fic, I checked
Saiyuki for updates everyday. Great story and you did a fine job with Gojyo.
I seriously doubt you'll have a problem with Hakkai. Keep up the good work!
Yay, it’s so nice to have a fan
go through all my fics. Thank you for cheering me
on for Hakkai, and here is an update after such a
long break.
priss
2003-07-15
3
Anonymous
Wow you finally ted!ted! I think your representing them
fine as for Hakkai he can be nice but remmber he
does have a dark side I sure it still present. I think this is a sad but good
Sanzo centered fic. so keep writing I want to know what happens.
Hakkai will have his day, oh yes he shall. Thank you!
Ms.C (haigh@ntlworld.com)
2003-07-14
3
Anonymous
I adored Gojyo's descriptions of Sanzo. 53 is far too uncommon. If Gojyo were bi then this is the way
he'd think about Sanzo. I admit to being very interested in seeing your take
on Hakkai - I think he's the hardest of the Ikkou
to write...
Thank you, I’m so happy you think I’m doing a good job
with Gojyo(he IS supposed to be the other main
character but I’m not so sure this comes out.). and Hakkai IS hard, but thank
you for supporting me.
sf
2003-07-13
3
Anonymous
Great story, and excellent dissection
of Gojyo's thought processes. Unfortunately, I think you're dragging it a bit
too long -- you're starting to get repetitive. You might like to up the pace
a little.
Otherwise, still holding on and waiting for the next chappy
^_^.
I do feel repetitive , but I
wanted everyone’s take on it ^^; after seven chapters, things finally get
moving!
Lucifiel
2003-07-01
2
Signed
OI! Update or I'll cry!
::point::
Please don’t cry! See, I updated!
Luci shadow
2003-06-30
2
Signed
O_o what happened to Sanzo?!
(I'm not stupid, I know what probably happened to him, but I just want you to
write it! ^.^ )
are you gonna write one chapter for each character point of view? that'll be
great, 'cause you're good at getting into their minds.
I can't wait to read more! ^_^
Lol, thank you and here’s some
more Sanzo for you.
simmysim
2003-06-24
2
Signed
Your story is amazing. I have never read a Saiyuki story
that has such an honest, wonderful, interesting and TRUE portrayal of all the
characters. I find Goku to be the best-- how you write him doesn't ADD any
new characteristics, it just builds on the ones he
shows in the show and manga. I love your grasp on all of them. I love how you
can make each character seem like REAL people. You don't exaggerate faults or
strengths.
I love the pacing of this as well-- it wouldn't work unless you made each
chapter as long as you do, and it's just a joy to read. You're handling the
pain that this situation would bring very well, too. A lot of people seem to
forget that these people are (not in a literal sense [and oddly enough,
especially Sanzo]) human. The TORTURE they make them go through, just because
they think they won't show emotion any other way makes me queasy. ^^; But
you're doing this SO well. I'm loving the Gojyo and
Sanzo interaction. ^.-
There is ONE little, teeny itsy bisty part I
thought sounded a little odd: "They had yelled at him before for eating
with his mouth full before. Sanzo had shot at Goku once for talking to him
with food in his mouth before." The "before's"
make it sound a tad repetitive.
I can't wait for the next part: it feels like the actual series, and it's
like a dream come true to see one of my favorite couples actually going
through getting together. I'm so glad I found this fanfic
so fast! It gave me hope for this fandom. ^_^
Oh, thank you for such the long review and pointing that
part out as well. I went back and corrected it, thank you! I’m so glad you
find my portrayals to be correct, that’s all I want to here. Gojyo and Sanzo
forever!
Lucifiel
2003-06-08
1
Signed
*Very* good Sanzo writing! You got him just right. I love
this story.
Thank you for reviewing all the way from the beginning!
windy chaw (yr2526@hotmail.com)
2003-06-03
1
Anonymous
wel...i
dont think i need to tell
you how wonderful of your work so i just beg ya to write it more...please? I wanna know who is doing
'anything' to my belove sanzo-sama(even i dont know what is it)^^!
Here is more, but please feel free to tell me about my
work(comment whore)
Birman
2003-05-28
1
Anonymous
Yet another addictive piece to tighten the stanglehold on my grades. Why, oh, why did it have to
stop so suddenly?
Oh,stopstopping suddenly…any more(weak
cough). Now study hard so you can read your smut!
merisp; sp;
2003-05-04
2
Anonymous
Ah... it took me forever to find a Saiyuki fic in here
worth reading. But this one was very much worth the search.
Everyone is written very much in character, so that's a plus. I know Hakuryuu
can be a pain in the ass to type, but at the same time its
Great writing. You do a great job portraying Sanzo. I
can't wait to read about the rest. Please keep it up!
You were the first reviewer on ff.net! THANK YOU!
Reviewed By: jukebox_csi
[MediaMiner
Member] On: July 20, 2004 16:04 EDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:Reviewed By: Flamingolo On:
July
13, 2004 23:32 EDT
Comment/Review:
This was completely, unf*&ing
believable! Fantastic, just fantastically written. I was repeatedly gaping at
the computer screen, and that's a rarity for me when it comes to fanfics. Dark, twisted, heart-wrenching. One of the best ficcies I've ever read, you've done a smashing job!
Thank you so much, I’m so happy you enjoyed
it so much. Thank you!!!
Title: Never No Answer Ch. 7
Reviewed By: Skippyscatt On:
May
13, 2004 13:31 EDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
A friend pointed me in the direction of this fic while it was still at FF.net
but I was so busy I didn't get to it before the Nazi's there pulled it down.
~sigh~ So anyway I went searching because she raved about it. Found it
AFF.net through chapter 4 and realized why my friend was raving so much. The
story was excellent, so excellent in fact that knowing you had originally had
7 parts up at FF sent me searching again in hopes of finding the last three
and low and behold here they were. And am I damn glad! Ahhh,
I'm sure you can hear the BUT in my voice. Why oh why did you
decide to cliffhanger it here??????? Waaaaaaaah
Okay so it's not the worst cliffhanger I've run into but to know it may be a
while before you do the next chapter... that is agony! Is Sanzo going to
revert to his old self again? What is going to go through Gojyo's head when
he wakes up alone? How is this going to affect our Merry Band of misfits?
Will Sanzo's veneer of ice crack allowing the others inside? Inquiring minds
really, really, really want to know!!!
Lmao. Thank you for following me off of ff.net! To answer
all your questions, chapter 8. Thank you for such a long review!!!
Reviewed By: MercyforMeandering On:
March
17, 2004 02:17 EST
Comment/Review:
You are the best writer here. You've captured everything totally even though
I'm technically a Sanzo-seme supporter. Great work.
Write more!
Wow thank you, that’s quite a compliment.
And Sanzo won’t lose his tough edge…he’s just a bitchy uke.
Title: GREAT
Reviewed By: sanzo-san On:
March
11, 2004 23:45 EST
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
It's already end but i really like this fanfic.THANK YOU!!!!
No end for us, since you reviewed so much!
THANK YOU!!!!!!!!
Reviewed By: koorishii On: March 08, 2004 20:08 EST
Rating(s):
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
This is an extremely good piece! Update more, onegai!
(not as fast as you can..fast
doesn't always mean good, right?) You could really make a profession out of
your writings!
Wow…wow, you think I could go professional?
Thank you!!!
Title: GREAT
Reviewed By: sanzo-fan On:
March
01, 2004Reviewed By: M
Li On: February 15, 2004 05:16 EST
Rating(s):
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
"He curled his fingers against the cold tile, desperately trying to hold
onto that little bit of reality instead of slipping further into his mind."
This chapter has so many beautiful descriptions! It was pretty believable,
too--as far as Gojyo and Sanzo actually going for it. I was really surprised
by the end, but it definitely had a good feel to it. I'm curious, though, to
see how this ends up (Goku or Gojyo?). ^_^ Thanks so much for the ride!!!!
Wow, thank you so much for quoting, that
just makes me feel so special. Lol. Goku’s not
meant for sex, damn it(cuddles him protectively)…but
love? You’ll have to read to find out!
Reviewed By:Reviewed By: M
Li On: January 09, 2004 11:30 EST
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Wai~ ~ Thanks for the update!
Thank YOU for repeatedly reviewing!
Reviewed By: jediah On: November 19, 2003 23:34 EST
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10< 10
Comment/Review:
WOW GRAT FIC!!! I can't wait to read the next
cap!!! Please don't make us wait to much!!!
please!!!
Thank you for the capital letters! Here’s more chapters for you!
Reviewed By: Kal Kally On:
October
22, 2003 07:07 EDT
Comment/Review:
I like this fic so much. Please don't stop writing.
Thank you for the review, here’s some more
writing for you!
Reviewed By: mli On: September 27, 2003 05:11 EDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Please write more as soon as possible!!!!!!
Thank you, yes sir!
Reviewed By: simmy On: August 31, 2003 12:03 EDT
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
oh... my god. oh my god. the entire time i was
reading that, i kept thinking about how perfectly
you got into ai'sai's head. the fact that you think
you butchered him makes me want to laugh out loud. i
think his pov was the best for this chapter-- he
hides his feelings and emotions so well, it was so powerful to hear
everything that was happening from him, how sickened and horrified he was.
and you didn't just shove emotions into his characters. you made it flow
naturally. i LOVE thnternterpretation of hakkai. AND, so many people write about this situation,
but you've actually captured the horror of it. this i
just amazing. again, a few grammatical errors that are just ... so odd and
out of place with this fic. but, still, this is my absolute favorite saiyuki fanfic. you rock the casbah.
Thank for reviewing repeatedly and complimenting
my Hakkai! I try to beta but….well…yeah. Thank you for telling me I rock the casbah(blush)
Reviewed By: Ravenhurst On:
August
07, 2003 01:54 EDT
Comment/Review:
So glad you're back with this story again! I got worried that it had died; it
was so good that I wasy say sad to see it go. Thanks very much for sharing;
we can't wait for more!
Lol, I bet you thought the same thing again on my last
chapter. Thank you for the reviewing and here’s…more!
Reviewed By: Schneekoenigin
[MediaMiner
Member] On: Jul, 20, 2003 11:27 EDT
Rating(s):
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Like it very much ... please more *smile*
Thank you, here is some more Sanzo, pipin’ hot from the oven.
Reviewed By:
Monique On: Reviewed By:
Ruby On: April 04, 2003 07:46 EST
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
I love every words there is.
And it has GoyjoxSanzo, my favourite
pairing.
Thank you so much for that, it really made
me want to write more. So…here’s chapter 8!
Reviewed By: thandie
[MediaMiner
Member] On: March 01, 2003 07:53 EST
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
i love it! Please don't mak wai wait to much...i *need* to Know what
happened. Keep on the work!
Lol, sorry for making you wait too much! Thank you for
reviewing!
Reviewed By: Hiruseki
[MediaMiner
Member] simmy On: July 15, 2003 11:55 EDT
Rating(s):
Reviewed By: lituska_silvermoon
[MediaMiner
Member] On: an>February 05,
2003 05:24 EST
Comment/Review:
Very promising start...please continue!!! ^_^... sigh..
how hard it is to find GojyoxSanzo pairing fics... ^_~
Why AREN’T there more Gojyo/Sanzo fics? Thank you for revng! ng!
Reviewed By: Hiruseki
[MediaMiner
Member] On: February 09,
2003 22:29 EST
Comment/Review:
this is very, very good ^_^.. I love it.. ^^
continue, please? ^^
You were the first to review on mediaminer! THANK YOU! Here’s
more updates!
And of course, the crew over at ADULTfanfiction.net needs
their three cheers!
Reviews
for Never No Answer
Squall-sama(too lazy to log in)
Squall-sama@juno.com
2004-04-23
id #
197171
Holy
Shit, no one has reviewed this yet!?! DUMB-ASSES, THE LOT OF YOU! *huffs* this fis is awsome, its so deep and
full of emotion, It really gets the point across and yet at the same time,
tortures the reader with wanting to know what's going to happen next. Please,
continue, I'd hate to see this one discontinued because of a lack of reviews.
EEE! Thank you, I do like the quote(as
is life), and here is more detail than you could ever possibly wanted! J
Kichibo
2004-05-08
id #
209997
I think
you wrote their personalities very well, actually. Yes, even Hakkai. Believe me, I know how hard it is to write characters who never
have any introspective moments. Damn Chichiri for
having no introspective moments! AUG! But really, you did very well. :)
Lol- ah Fushigi Yuugi, that takes me back. Hakkai IS hard to write, but
I’m throwing it all to the winds and will have more of him as well!
Cupnjava c[~]~~~ *sip*
Saiyuki_Fan_Fic@yahoo.com
2004-05-09
id #
210693
I think
you wrote Hakkai very well. I personally think his inner thoughts are much
darker than what he lets on. I think that might be why he’s always so nice.
He’s over compensating for his darker thoughts. Given the circumstances of
your story, his outward appearance would have darkened, so, I think you were
right on point.
Hakkai can be difficult to write, he seems to have no conflict from which to
work. However, we all know that to not be the case. If you aren’t using Kanan to get a reaction out of him, then you use his
other weakness….his comrades….his band of brothers. He walks a fragile line
and he knows it -- in my mind-- he sees himself as one slip up away from
“that time”.
Excellent and keep up the good work. I look forward to reading more of this
story.
Cupnjava c[~]~~~ *sip*
Thank
you for complimenting my Hakkai, which was by far the hardest(as
you said). Thank you again for reviewing each chapter, that means a lot to
me!
purkledragongoddess
2004-05-14
id #
214364
I've
just started reading this series but I love your story. The character have the right feel to them, and you seem to be
connecting my two favorite guys. gotta love that.
Thank
you, all I want out of this is accurate character portrayal and you said it’s
good!
kazuha
kazuhasanzo@yahoo.com
2004-05-15
id #
214724
i really admired your fiction
really love it please posted it as fast as posibble
coz i can't hardly wait to know more. but you really have a good imagination. keep
up the good work.
from now on i am your
fans!
ganbate ne!
arigatou!! Thank you for supporting me,
so I will publish another chapter! (forgive all the
grammar errors, pelase ^.^)
Demon45
christofrog@msn.com
2004-05-18
id #
217110
This is
an absolutely awesome fiction. You have captured each of the characters
perfectly. At times the stark realism of this story is difficult to read and
like a car accident you pass on the road, you don't want to look, but you
just can't seem to help yourself. Each chapter is like a book in itself. Not
sure how you find the time to write all of this, but please keep it up. I can
hardly wait for each installment.
Lol, my god, I think you came up with the perfect metaphor
for my fanfics. Thank you so much for reviewing-and
understanding that despite my typing speed, this still all takes a while. :D
Cupnjava c[~]~~~ *sip*
Saiyuki_Fan_Fic@yahoo.com
2004-05-20
id #
218524
I am
assuming this was the big finale….the conclusion? I can see where it is and I
can see where there is room to continue the story. This ,
of course, means you have truly captured the spirit of our love which is
known as Saiyuki.
Yes, this chapter had some technical errors. Such is life. We all have
technical errors. It is very hard to proof and edit your own work. After all
you know what you mean to say and you know what the scene looks like. It
takes another, and another, and another, to be able to tell if the reader
will see it as the author does. This is why professional writers get
professional editors.
As fanfic writers we do try to present good quality
work, but we write between schooork ork and home life. We’re worn out by the
time we get to the PC and if someone wants to nit-pick let them.
I have really enjoyed this story. I felt you characterized all of them quite
well, and the plot itself was quite good. I like how you kept the reader in
the dark as much as Sanzo was, is and will be. You’re OC’s
were well flushed out given their level of participation.
Your use of angst is well done. I thoroughly enjoyed your use of metaphor and
simile. Your style is relaxed, but detailed and I appreciate that. When I
noticed you published a new chapter, I literally gasped at my screen.
Over all excellent work. Thank you for taking the time to share your talents
and creativity with us.
Cupnjava c[~]~~~ *sip*
Never a
finale! Thank you so much for reviewing each chapter and complimenting my
angst, which is what I strive for…along with the comedy it brings. Thank you
r shr sharing your thoughts as well.
De5
christofrog@msn.com
2004-05-21
id #
218673
Intense!!
That is the only word I can come up with. Seriously intense. You have done a
great job with this story. Yes, there probably were a few grammatical errors,
but when you are reading a story this intense, you either don't notice them
or just ignore them outright. I chose the latter. You have captured the
characters perfectly. I would have loved to have had a glimpse of what was
going on in Son Goku's mind when he was transformed, and would have really
enjoyed seeing what happened when Sanzo and Goku woke up. The story was
excellent and I too enjoyed finding out the details little bit at a time. I
hope you write more.
Sweet,
my writing is enough to forgive the massive errors! (eee!
Thank you for ‘intense’) More Goku-POV for all,
along with Hakkai and Gojyo and Sanzo and—well, you get my point. Thank you
again.
ryushin
2004-05-23
id #
220222
Sanzo,
Gojyo, Hakkai, even Goku - they hurt.
So badly and yet one cannot stop reading.
I'm a sucker for 5x3 anyway and there are so few stories out there. The good
ones, I mean.
It somehow feels right that Gojyo and Sanzo cannot be together without the
pain, although
to this point them getting together is more of a side affect - nevertheless
intriguing.
Sanzo's trauma and the effect it has on all people around him, no matter if
he wants it or not,
cuts deep. Damn, the hurt is tangible, one can taste
it on the tongue while reading.
The story is mesmerizing to a point where it threatens to overwhelm all
senses.
The chapter in which we get the inside of Goku - a character I would only use
for comic relieve - is awesome.
Kanzeon is portrayed as the evil witch bitch he/she is, one had to smirk at
that.
I hope you are planning on continuing the story. I would like to know how
Gojyo reacts the day after and how Hakkai
will cope with the situation. And I really want to know if Sanzo and Gojyo
have actual
feelings for each other apart from hatred and lust. Or will Sanzo simply
continue to chase the hurt away and crawl into
Gojyo's bed each night to forget for a few hours. That would open a door to new new level of pain.
Damn, you are really on to something there. Don't stop.
*wow
ryushin
Wow back
at you…Your review is almost like a story in itself, thank you so much(blushes like catholic schoolgirl). Oh, in my view of
Saiyuki, Gojyo and Sanzo are the only ones for each other-I don’t understand
why this isn’t blindingly obvious to the rest of the crowd. Lol. AND NO SEX FOR GOKU- he is too cute(cuddles
protectively from bad Homuras and OC-Sanzos)
NO PLACE AT ALL! Thanks for writing such
a great fic and I look forward to another..........hopefully in the near
future??? You have a really great way with words and drescriptions
that allow the reader to feel themselves inside the
room watching instead of the outside looking in. And believe me, in this one that
was not always a good thing. I appreciated the realistic tone of this tale
and hope you can be tempted to treat us again.
Thank
you, my cuddly lil demon, for trying!!! Horray, this is your day! This is near future(it
hasn’t been a year yet :D ) Thank you for tempting me, I couldn’t resist a
good review like yours!
yuki-sama
2004-06-13
id #
232865
love
the story XD
but unfortunatly, it feels like most of the charater's conversations have been repeating or refrased...
i'm currently finnished chpt4 (maybe you explained this later) but didn't you
write that Sanzo 'lost' his gun in the snow? Then how could he be defending himsel with it? ^^;
Anyway, keep up with the good work ^__^
This is
for you, a high-paced, action/smut-filled second arch!! Thank you about the gun though,
I really hate it when big mistakes like that go get through the cracks.
kazuha
kazuhasanzo@yahoo.com
2004-06-24
id #
237182
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story is really really good but my it just stop
right there isn't end already. yeah i really like
that sanzo in the breakbown
hehe ganbate plz update it fast if there is continous
story
bla bla bla mind my bad eng
Thank
you so much! No bad English at all, I’m complimented you took the effort to
review and read my story! Thank you and I hope you enjoy these new chapters!
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