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By : vampkitten27
  • From ANON - Xenia on February 09, 2006
    Great job. Keiki be jealous to Shouri.... its very nice. I hope what you continue to write with some sorts of things. Wait for the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - Sio-chan on February 06, 2006
    First off, I wanna say This is a really good story, I love it so much. So many fics for this series are quite lacking, it's very hard to find one I can really enjoy. As for your virgin problem, I can see why it would be, but I've also noticed alot of fanfic authors don't mention the blood, and you did say ttend to, but it's not always that way, some don't bleed their first time, a few of my friends that have already had sex didn't. So, Youko could be one of those girls who doesn't bleed the first time. It's not a sure thing, some bleed some don't it's genetics. Hope this helps, keep up the great work, I look forwerd to more. ^^
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  • From ANON - xelgirl on February 05, 2006
    Yay! I love your fic! I keep returning to see if you've updated it yet! Thank you for writing some 12K fanfiction! Please update soon! : D
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  • From ANON - tweetymug on February 04, 2006
    a funny chapter~
    I want to know whether yoko have feeling to keiki
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  • From ANON - lia on February 01, 2006
    I am going to love your story. There actually is another 12 Kingdoms fic in the Misc. Anime section, but it is a one shot between Yoko and some made up character. I do believe your's will be great. Keep writing because you have plenty of readers, especially if you give us a truly good lemon here and there too.
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  • From ANON - tweetymug on January 31, 2006
    good story~
    it is natural~and loving
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  • From Atlantis on January 28, 2006
    Another lovely chapter, particularly with all of the Yoko/Keiki interaction. You're developing this story at such a wonderful pace that it makes me envious. I'm glad you're taking your time with this story and making it a enjoyable read. I especially like how you are exploring Yoko's thoughts and fears over the possible outcomes and such. It really gives her a great depth and adds to the personality we all saw emerge during the course of the anime. I think you are keeping everyone in character very well and those that walk on the grey lines are justified in their changes. You've got a gift, hun!

    I did have a little nit though, since you said you weren't adverse to receiving concrit. No, not spelling so much but the grammar. Almost the entire first half of this chapter uses present-tense and then switches to the more appropriate past-tense in the second half. Just wanted to let you know in case you didn't catch that in particular.

    This may seem forward and you obviously don't have to accept, but I would be willing to look over and/or beta for you in the future, especially since I'm becoming so invested in this story. I'm majoring in english and creative writing and have an eye for those sorts of things (plus, I'm slightly obsessive compulsive, but we won't go into that...) Great job, just don't keep your fans (see: ME) waiting too long. ^_~
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  • From ANON - Me on January 28, 2006
    Hi, you have no idée how happy I was when I found your fic! I have been looking everywhere for a good Keiki/Youko fic! I really hope you will write more and soon. I'm sorry to say I won't be able to read any more of this fic in the near future, since I'm going backpacking in Australia but I hope that I will find it finished when I get back so I can spend an afternoon or evening reading the rest of what I'm sure is going to turn out to be a really great fic!
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  • From ANON - Sio-chan on January 27, 2006
    Write more soon, I love your story, it's so detaled and original, I'm hooked!
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  • From ANON - Jackie_Almasy on January 22, 2006
    I am loving your story so much! I just finished watching the entire "Twelve Kingdoms" anime a couple days ago and love the Youko/Keiki pairing. I also like the fact that you are keeping the characters as they were presnted in the manga/anime. Well done! I hope to see updates soon! One quick question though: the sword Seigu (major sorry if I mispelled it), is it enveloped by a real soul? I personally do not understand the whole concept behind the sword.
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  • From ANON - Quickening on January 21, 2006
    You know what, never mind. Ignore my last review about the whole Ki/Ho thing. @_@ For some reason I was confusing ho with ou. I don't know why; I was just watching the series last night for the third time. Lack of sleep, I guess. *smacks head on desk*

    Anyway, ignoring that part, I still do stand by what I said about Keiki's personality, and his inability to stand the scent or touch of blood.

    Anyway, going away now.
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  • From ANON - Quickening on January 21, 2006
    I have to admit that I'm confused about chapter two, when Keiki and "Enho" were having their conversation, and discussing the King of En. You do realize, don't you, that Enho IS the King of En, right? Enho is his proper title. En-KI is the Kirin of En. If the Kirin is who Keiki was actually discussing this with, I'd suggest going back and changing the name, as that's a rather obvious mistake. I'm also assuming it's EnKI that's supposed to be watching over Kei while Youko visits En, not the emperor, otherwise what's the point of her going there to visit him?

    Anyway, to recap some important titles:

    Keiho - Kei's Empress

    Enho - En's Emperor

    Keiki - Kei's Kirin/Taiho

    Enki - En's Kirin/Taiho

    A Ki is a male Kirin, thus Enki, Keiki, Taiki

    A Rin is a female Kirin, thus Kourin

    Other than that, the story isn't bad so far, except I don't like how Keiki talks "dirty" to and is agressive with Youko. It strikes me as being *completely* out of character for him. Even during sex, I'm certain he would be gentle and respectful, as is his Kirin nature. She's his empress, after all, and first and foremost, he is her Kirin.

    There's also the question of what would happen if Youko is still a virgin (I have no reason to believe she isn't), and he takes her, and she bleeds as all virgins do after their first time. Remember that Kirin cannot tolerate the scent, sight, or smell of blood. They are too pure to handle it, and they grow weak and pass out. That could make things very difficult during certain situations. Just some things to think about as you write this story. Admittedly, I've only read to chapter two so far, and I realize you have a couple more written that might already have these questions resolved. But I thought I should at least give you some things to think about to make your story more believable if you haven't reached any of those stages yet.
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  • From ANON - joyce on January 19, 2006
    ha i like your story cos it does have a sequence in plot which helps build up the relationship of the different characters.

    unlike some impatient authors who plunged straight into the confrontation of a 'relationship' betwen keiki and youko, i find that u have a gd approach wif this youko/keiki fic ( life is not tat smooth sailing blah blah and we will always find some sort of obstacle before we can actually find the sweetness in life etc etc =P so in this case i guess that it is more a 'journey' for keiki to find out the meaning of love)

    will be looking forward to ur update so jia you !!!

    ^_^


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  • From ANON - dumdeedum on January 17, 2006
    WOW! YAY!! FINALLY!! Someone finally wrote a Twelve Kingdoms fanfiction LEMON, and a VERY GOOD one I might add!

    I thought I'd never see one and Twelve Kingdoms is my most favorite anime of all time! I suppose because there is an absence of romance in TK, that one wishes for a romance and a lemon at that. I think everyone is written in character and even your made up story of the samurai blends in well. In the meantime, GREAT job and hope to see and update soon!!
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  • From Zuzanny on January 15, 2006
    I adore the 12 Kingdoms and am so glad that you have posted here. (I love Keiki!!!!)
    ANYway, a confused-yet-seeking-answers Keiki is very nice. Will he come to understand and even love his Queen the way that we want him to? HMMMMMMM? :) Please write more soon.
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