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By : modeac
  • From ANON - Anon on February 28, 2010
    Awesome. Keep going with this. By FAR the best threesome in Pokemon I ever read.
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  • From Darkling on February 17, 2010
    Quite the twisted and somewhat dark story you're building up here ;). Can't say that Pokemon is one of the series I'm the most familar with, alas, but nonetheless, it's a good story, and a rival to good stories of the same kind that I've liked and greatly favored (such as Shin Taisou and Okaasan to Naishou).

    Now I'm only wondering what direction you'll develop Ash in - to elaborate, in stories like these, the tormented one will usually develop into becoming more meek, more submissive - and above all genuninely enjoying the torment he/she is being subjected to. However, especially in the case that more people join in (as Misty and Dawn have now), there is also the possibility that the tormented one develops into something of a tormentor himself - under the mistress's command and guiding hand, of course. So I'm curious to see in which direction you'll develop Ash there. Also curious about what exactly Misty and Dawn's roles will be... comrades-in-torment... Or eventually tormentors of Ash themselves as well? Or soemthing in-between? I guess time will tell ;) .

    The list in chapter 4 was quite interesting.. I guess you plan to have Domino subject Ash to most of those stuffs at some point? Then, I really think Ash shold be subjected to some anal stuff as one point or another. Maybe not by having him fucked by some guy (though I'm sure Domino could get into her head to call some discreet acquintance of hers that could do that to Ash or the like), but perhaps by having Domino fuck him with a strap-on or simply playing with his ass using a butt plug could work. At least, I believe this would be something worth putting in (no pun intended :p), as to most hetero guys, the ass would be considered off-limits - and morever, having an orgasm from having the ass fucked/played with would be considered just about the greatest humilation possible, so there Domino could deal quite the blow to Ash. As for group sex - well, that's what the fic is eventually going to come down to isn't it? But before that, Ash indeed needs a lot of more training from Domino.

    Anyway, so far it's quite a good and twisted story you're making here and I'm looking forward to the upcoming chapter :3 . Keep up the good work!
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  • From ANON - Cystia-Jam on February 09, 2010
    I love this story! Wow, I can't wait for another update, that Domino is insane, it's wonderful. I definitely agree that Ash should have been awake for her little session with Misty, and find the entire situation despicably evil. I don't know if Ash could handle a foursome, but I'm sure as hell up for finding out. ;D

    From a formalistic approach there are a few grammatical errors and whatnot, but over all the writing is a much higher quality than you would normally find in this particular...genre. The second and third chapters seemed a little rushed compared to the first one, and sometimes there's tense inconsistencies, but over all, again, it's fantastic. I don't know if you're just writing for fun or you actually wanted a critique of your writing, so if it's the former I'm sorry. I love this, though, and I'll be waiting for updates! ;)
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  • From ANON - opin on February 02, 2010
    This is one sick and twisted list!
    I looked up abasiophilia and prostatic massage on the net, this is going to be areally weird fic if the show up, unique and brilliant- but really weird!
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  • From ANON - scar'd on December 21, 2009
    I love the back and forth between Ash and Domino having sex and the supporting cast going about their business or investigating- it gives a sense of upcoming doom! Also love the BDSM scene- not too many stories with femdom around.
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  • From ANON - ngear on December 15, 2009
    POKEMON BATTLE
    Great battle! I really like the fact that this was a battle of strategy and not just two Pokemon throwing random moves at each other or going the cheap route and having it as a straight battle of type advantage vs type disadvantage.

    SEX SCENE 1- ASH/DOMINO WITH DAWN AS VOYEUR
    Unusual and kinky! Very detailed and well written!

    SEX SCENE 2- ASH/DAWN WITHOUT KNOWING
    Also kinky- and somewhat disturbing, great dialogue and character reaction when ash found out what domino was up to. Can't wait to see what ash does when he wakes up!

    SEX SCENE 3- DOMINO/MISTY BRAINWASHED
    I like how this sex scene wasn't as detailed as the earlier sex scenes- as though giving the reader multiple choice when writing sexual situations.


    In general this is a great chapter and gives a lot more variety than ordinary stories, also i like your take on characters like Domino, Dawn, Misty, Paul, etc, they fit in with AFF stories while seeming genuine to their anime roles.

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  • From JyubiRyu on December 13, 2009
    Great chapter for a great story. You should use Berlitz for Dawn's last name considering(SP?) that's what it is in the manga.
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  • From dragoknight on November 24, 2009
    upppdaatttttteeeeeeeeee this story is so good
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  • From KingDelita on October 11, 2009
    Hello there. I like your story a great deal, for I too am a major fan of Domino. It's a shame that so few stories involve her, truthfully. And though it may be a tad too late for me to offer my opinion on her Pokemon, I kinda see Domino having a Persian to remember or honor ol' Gio, one of the few signs of softness the Black Tulip allows to be seen. A Drapion (as Pokemon Hunter J readily proved, it can be a dangerous Pokemon indeed), an Electivire (if not just for raw power, its vicious streak could appeal to her) and a Roserade (it being beautiful yet undeniably lethal, able to inflict any number of status ailments on her enemies...plus, it's the closest thing to a "Tulip" the Pokemon world has) could also fit the group. I'd love to be able to talk with you through E-mail, if you are willing.
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  • From dragoknight on October 04, 2009
    Damn. Ash got brutally fucked! XD

    Good chapter. I'm curious to see where Misty and Dawn end up in this. I kind of want to just see more of Domino abusing Ash and taking advantage of him. But that's always been a fetish ^^'

    You do whatever you see fit. I'm gonna read this til the end!
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  • From dragoknight on October 03, 2009
    Hey! I know this story was written some time ago, but I just now saw it. Mainly because I never look in the threesome section.

    I like the story, I LOVE the pairing. Can't believe the thought never crossed my mind.

    I read at the bottom you could get 8-10 chapters out of this. I think you should go for it.
    It's a good fic. I like it...at least
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