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Reviews for End of A Weary Day--Formating Revised 12/21

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From ANON - Miyomi on January 10, 2004
I wish you wouldn't leave. I enjoy your story immensely, but you do what you want to do. Always know you'll have a loyal fan here!
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From ANON - Jademardh on January 10, 2004
I'm really sorry to hear that you're ending this story. I thought it was wonderful. I also thought the whole idea of fanfiction was to write what you want to happen with the charaters. The feelings you were trying to put in your story are probably shared by other people. I hope you don't seriously want to end this story. I say forget what the critics say and write what you want. I see that there are other people who reviewed your story feel the same way. Please reconsider and continue on.
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From ANON - angua on January 10, 2004
I�m really sorry to hear that you have decided to end this story. I really loved the plot and the fantastic way you portrayed the characters (especially k&k) and the complexity of their love. And that included the first version of the chapter in the teahouse (I don�t see anything wrong in it). Don�t be discouraged by people and please...always write what is in your heart. Thanks for sharing your story with us.
angua
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From ANON - Cole\'sLover on January 10, 2004
Hey, don't let those other reviewers get to you. I know where you are coming from because of my own personal experiences.
I've been married & divorced twice and was in a long term (8 1/2 yrs) relationship myself. It is EXTREMELY hard to find a good person to love and to be loved in return. I think a lot of those reviewers are probably young kids or young adults who don't have the life experiences we've have so they don't understand. Don't be so upset over the other reviews. I've really enjoyed your fanfic and it truly pains me to think you won't be continuing. I'm dying to know who the woman was that Tae saw with Sano. I'm sure once the full story is revealed Megumi will forgive him. Please reconsider ending the storyline at this point.
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From BlackRavenOfDeath on January 10, 2004
I am truly sorry that someone has made you feel that way, especially over such a wonderful fic. Some people just have no common sense what-so-ever. I did not think there was anything wrong with your first version of chapter 6, nor did I misunderstand the second version, nor your A/N there. People complained and you were simply trying to make them happy, and they still didn't like it.
I am also very sad to hear that this fic will no longer be continued. Not only did it have wonderful potential, it was already wonderful. I loved how you portrayed the characters.
I know there is little chance of my words swaying you to continue with End of A Weary Day, but I do hope they at least brighten your day a little.
I wish you and your husband well.
er -er - HellsAngelOfDeath
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From ANON - Val on January 10, 2004
I am truly sorry to read you have ended this story. I actually enjoyed all the all chapters, even the unrevised chapter. I felt you gave a unique spin to the story and the characters seemed a little more three dimensional. Now I am going be going crazy with curiosity as to how the story would have ended. I watched the Reflection episodes and I hated the way it ended. Seemed very ooc for this couple and much to tragic for my taste. I hope you will reconsider and continue with your story; I really hope I am not the only one who would like to see you finish The End of a Weary Day, has turned into one of my fave
pieces of AFF. Sincerely V.P.
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From ANON - ewunia on January 10, 2004
You know what!!!
I think this is your story and you should continue it. There are people who will love reading the story and there are people who will never be satisfied no matter what. I have seen a lot of good writers discouraged by such idiotic reviews. Don't be one of them. You are a very good writer and you should continue this story. It is very good one. And if someone dosn't like it or think that it is not worth anything it is their opinion which you should read but don't get discouraged by it. And the whole point is if someone criticise your writing and can't back it up with construcitve criticism don't listen to them. THis type of review are bunch of bull. That is all it is.
KEEP WRITING, I LOVED THE STORY AND WANT TO READ MORE OF IT!!!!
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From ANON - Xona on January 10, 2004
I'm very sorry to see that you're ending your story, I've really enjoyed reading it and have been looking forward to more updates. (Gomen for not having reviewed before) I hate that there are people who insist on flaming others to the point that they don't want to continue their stories. I liked both versions of chapter six...the orgional had lots of potential, I was curious to know where you were going to go with it. Perhaps the second version fit the romantic inclinations of everyone a bit better, but it's your story and you should have been able to write it as you saw fit without everyone getting on your case about it. At any rate, I really hope you don't give up on writing fanfics all together, because I really look forward to reading more of your stories someday! (I hope there is enough outcry for End of a Weary Day that you'll be encouraged to continue it despite the flamers) Here's to hoping and hang in there! ^.^
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From ANON - lere on January 08, 2004
Oh, well... What can I say??? Three things, I guess:

1.I like the first version of chapter six. I'll not lie because I believe their love is absolute. The drama in that bordel shook me, but I like to keep my mind open. Like I said before, what made me accept that was the reality. I see their love as absolute because Kenshin and kaoru are caracters from fiction. They are not real. But if they exist I think things like that might happens, because Kenshin would be just human and made mistakes (Kami knows about his past mistakes so it esplain one little shake in his fidelity to Kaoru).

2.I think the comotion is because the relashionship you build between them. They seem so deep in love, most kenshin (you show his love like a sacred thing because the way he see Kaoru: a pure angel, who hold his heart, soul, hopes, who is his soul-mate), that is nearly impossible to believe he could put that down so fast. When love is so deep people think tha respect is that way too. Well, that's in the perfect world and for few pure souls. But if the I would like to know what might have happen if you choose to follow the first version. Kenshin debating about how to tell Kaoru, questioning his love, and then her reaction after knowing. It would be really good. That way I think their fellings should be much stronger. But this is your story and you choose the path.

3.The lemon, of course. FANTASTIC, LIKE ALWAYS!!!! They keep coming better and better. I love the passion you put when they make love. It's like the mix of their souls.

Big hugs from Brazil my friend!!!!
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From ANON - Clemen on January 07, 2004
Great chapter. I love the way you write with emotion. Can't wait to read what happen with sano and megumi, and like always kk scenes. Hope you update soon. Hey if you could please e-mail when you update. Until then take care.
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From ANON - Spotmarked on January 07, 2004
Tsuki-san,

I must say that your story is one of the best Rurouni Kenshin fanfictions out there, and I have read a lot of them. I really love your writing style: it�s descriptive, not lon long-winded. Some authors will say, this is what happened and how it happened, but do not give readers enough time to let tetaietails of the setting and things like that settle in. I am glad that you took the time to describe what Kaoru and Kenshin were feeling and thinking throughout the story and especially during the lovey dovey parts. It really takes away from the effect of the moment when some ars wrs write, he put this in there and then they were like this and BAM! it�s over!

A as as you have probably noticed, the revised version of your chapter with Kenshin at the teahouse fits really well with the whole mystery behind Sano and the green-eyed girl. Kaoru walked in on Kenshin and thought that he was being unfaithful to her, but it was only a �fleeting glance� and did not convey the whole picture. It was the same thing Kenshin was explaining to Megumi earlier about Sano. Although I really liked how you had that chapter before, I think Kaoru walking in on Kenshin strengthens the plot of your story.

Tsuki-san, you have a lot of talent for writing and I look forward to reading other works from you in the future!

Spotmarked

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From ANON - catt on January 04, 2004
do not disappoint your readers, please continue your stories........
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From ANON - SesshaKenshin on January 03, 2004
orororo....sessha finds this uh, unusual...um, kanzentsuki-dono, sessha really likes your story demo,,um...i hope you won't get mad at me but sessha would just like to point out some of the things he, um, disagrees..sessha humbly asks for kanzentsuki-dono's for forgiveness for doing this but sessha would like to diasgree to battousai's reaction to the woman..sessha does not agree on the tha that he was teased beyond his own restraints to have done such actions to the girl...um, he may fins her attractive alright, but i think it would ooc for the battousai to be easily swayed by another woman, aside from his kaoru-dono de gozaru yo...sessha believes that if it was battousai, he may not even find the girl attractive at all...but okay, let's consider that. So, battousai finds her attractive, but i don't think battousai is someone who'd get turned on that easily...if battousai is someone like that, then he'd have a lot of women even during the revolution now would he? Im sure before, a lot of women find him dangerously attractive, but he�d be cold..battousai is someone who could only lust for one woman (his wife) alone..thus, if it were battousai, shouldn't he be not affected by the girl's charm? he shouldn't have gone boner with her in the first place even if kenhin would think she's breathtaking...*sigh* gomen ne, if sessha had offended you in anyway. sessha would just like to point this out since sessha disagrees about that part...hm, wouldn't it be better if battousai had just came in with a cold attitude towards everyone..he might treat the girl with some respect, but i don't think he'd be someone so easily to be warmed up with, after all, he might even look down for whores such as her, even if she's goodlooking...hm, how about she tries to seduce him, but he still keeps a straight face on, unfazed about anything, and is not �at all� affected by her seduction. Only kaoru could do that to him and arouse him�.then, with a cold treatment on the girl, as the girl tries to seduce him, kaoru suddenly pops out saying about finding something�.she gasps, as she looks at kenshin and the girl, completely misunderstanding�she thought that kenshin was taking a long time because they were playing�kenshin looks at her, surprised that she had come inside, then realizes their position�he�d ran after kaoru, wanting to explain that nothing happened and this and that�.how�s that? Won�t you consider? Um, sessha would like to know kanzenetsuki-dono�s opinion on sessha�s suggestion��um, if ever you�re mad, um, please be ge�see�sessha would be prepared de gozaru yo�gomen nasai, kanzentsuki-dono�sessha just wanted to point this out�*bows on the floor*
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From ANON - Lere on January 02, 2004
OH.MY.GOD!!!!! You are back! YOU ARE BACK!!!!! I drop my jaw and it just can't come back to place. What a mess!!! You know, when you started to write about Kenshin reassuring Kaoru about his love and devotion I swear: I SAW THAT COMING!!!! But never THAT way. I just can't figure out what he'll do about that now, because we all know his tendences to be guilt. I know men are all out of control when it comes to attractive and easy women, and they can understand sex and love like different things far more than women can, but... Poor Kaoru!!!!

I love the drama development! Hentai fics are fun but when you get a good story together the final mixfantfantastic. I whant to know what that stupid will say NOW!!!!

Big hugs from Brazil!!!

Your friend,
Lere.
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From ANON - KagomeKat15 on December 31, 2003
Ya knoe...all this lovin' is going on and it's all good...but, I can't help but think: Poor Yahiko...so young and without a love of his own...(sniffles)

Great, eh...'one shots', babe!!

Ja ne,
KagoKitty
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