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Reviews for Too bad you\'re beautiful

By : DeguchiMoNaku
  • From ANON - Ryuichi on May 13, 2004
    Hahaha you're such a whore, add another fucking chapter. x.o YOUR STORY IS...the best. Because I am god. O_o.......and because I can say that...and because I HELPED WRITE THIS....*dies of caffeine overload*...OMG PINK TISSUES!!!!!!!!!!!

    Great story and all...yup...sou desu. XD

    -Ryu-
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  • From ANON - rileycharlotte on May 01, 2004
    waaaaahhhhhh!!!! your fic is ssssoooooo good!!! the more lemons the better... lemon tarts and lemon cream pies both make me happy! but it's sooooo sad! poor shu-chan! i wanna fuck him too! (though i think he's getting enough of the i'll-fuck-you-to-comfort-you type stuff... so maybe i'll just hug him...) and take that razor away!!! poor baby shouldn't hurt himself... i have MUCH impathy for him there... *sigh* you're a great writer, you kick ass! YAY!!!
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  • From ANON - Mary on April 29, 2004
    I'm enjoying reading this story! I have to say it's nice to see a fic in which Yuki is not fluffy and sappy. He's not like that at all! I can't wait to see how you continue this. Please update soon!
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  • From ANON - Anya on April 29, 2004
    Why alcoholic? Do you know what happens with your liver after too much drinking? I’m not saying that Yuki’s beautiful eyes won’t be so attractive anymore….so why alcoholic?
    Still good chapter. And I hope that now you’d continue sooner. ^.^
    Best Wishes, XD

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  • From ANON - Ryoan on April 27, 2004
    Oh, yeah, got to read it. Yeah, like the softer side of Yuki, but I know you're going to have him get a bit meaner with the alcohol. It gets to be an uncontrollable thing. I don't mind things getting mean, but I like when they can have a change of heart (for the better of course) realizing what they've been doing that's hurt the one that loves you. Hopefully, I'll be reading you again soon. Yuki&Shuichi!
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  • From ANON - Deb on April 27, 2004
    Excellent chapter! I cant wait to see what happens next!
    Please update again soon!
    Lotsa Luv
    Debs xxx
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  • From PatoSan on April 26, 2004
    Well I don't know why I came back to have a peek at this fic. I guess I was actually curious to see if you were ging to throw a tantrum (so many people do). The fact that you didn't and actually appreciated the criticism does show you are not immature. I'm glad I was of helnd Ind I did see an improvement on the last chapter. It had a brief description at the begining to set the scene, and the interaction between Yuki and Shu was better than in the past. It can still be improved by extending the descriptions some more, and adding some thoughts, or drivinf motives in the characters (although I know you said you did it in a hurry). If you are not content with the final product or think it to be rushed, then don't feel pressurized to post it. Readers appreciate a good written story over a mediocre one, and would be willing to wait. I would aadviadvice you tried to use more adjectives when referin got the two men in order to avoid using their names so much as it can get a bit repetitive. Adjectives are a good way to enrich the writing in general, and make it flow more smoothly. Good luck with the rest of the story, I'm glad you took what I said into account.
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  • From ANON - Stephi on April 25, 2004
    WOW.....I say kill yuki.....who needs him anyways ryuichi is pretty and and and stuff...I love it so far....umm....hurry up with the new chapter eh! -__-

    ^_~.....

    TISSUES AND KUMAGORO FOREVER!!!
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  • From ANON - weisskatzchen on April 16, 2004
    please add soooooooooooooooooonnnnnnnnnnnn!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - The Doctor on April 15, 2004
    YOU MADE ME CRYYYY! ...poor Shuichi! *grabs him and runs to Nittle Grasper's hideout*
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  • From ANON - weisskatzchen on April 15, 2004
    YOU MUST ADD GODDAMMIT!!!
    PLEASE!
    MY LIFE DEPENDS ON IT!!!!!!
    I AM HOLFING MY BREATH, SO DONT LET ME DIE!!!
    love- the kitten
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  • From ANON - Pato san on April 11, 2004
    I can't beleive this fic has so many reviews, and fairly good ones at that. I don't mean to be nasty. I'm usually a very nice person, honest! The first chapter was fairly decent, but I honestly see no plot, no depth in the characters, really poor dialogue and very OOC. It would be alright as a PWP I guess, but even then... Sorry this fic didn't do it for me.

    You should keep writing though, seeing so manopleople did like it, plese don't let someone like me deter you. I thi think you could improve, even if you decided to stay with this mega nasty Yuki. First of all, what are his motivations? How can Shuichi love the man so much and then go all happy and say the same to Ryuichi? And Ryu back to him? It was just... odd and unrealistic. Try to explain a bit better why the characters act they way they do and why they feel the way they do. I love you Yuki, and I hate Yuki, I love you Ryuichi, I love you Shuichi, it's just too hollow. Good luck in your writing though! I know it's hard, but please don't hate me! The only way to improve is to take note of every reader's opinion and try to better yourself, always strife to improve, never settle. I can tell you are probably quite young and shouldn't evenbe here in the first place, as well as many readers, but if you are going to write something, then try for it to have some substance to it.
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  • From ANON - nn on April 06, 2004
    If you don't continue it fast , anyone ' ll forget 'bout you !
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  • From ANON - Shido Fuyuki on March 24, 2004
    Wahhh! It's been more that 2 weeks and still no new chapter?! This sucks!
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  • From ANON - Kari on March 13, 2004
    DUUUUUUDDDDDDDEEEEEE!!!!!!!!! Write more it's been almost a month write more or I will start a protest................ j/k

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