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Reviews for Crash

By : Shuukitty
  • From PatoSan on April 23, 2004
    Chapter 13

    That was fantastic!! Oh my god! I actually felt the pain in Shu whenhe was talking to his mum; and I'm not a softie. Talk about well written, non-flowery ansgt. Amazin greally. So different to what I've read up to know; it felt so real and mature, which is what most fics in this subject ususally lack. Then Yuki snapped at Shu's grandfather and I lived it. The best part had to be the conversation between Shu's mother and Yuki though! Yuki was perfectly IC, yet respectful (to a certain extent) to the elders and I was putting my hand over my mouth and going "No way he said that!" You made me FEEL in this chapter. First the love and fluff (not overly done at all) at the begining, then the talk (which I thought wa executed brilliantly on Shu's mum behalf and all the details about his leg and him trying to stand straight, etc), and an amazing confrontation at the end. I think Shu's mom concern was very well depicted and even though his family comes out as uncaring, somehow it conveys thancerncerning and old fasioned feeling that they know what's best for their son/grandson, etc. I don't know how to explain it, and I'm in a hurry because I need to be going, but I enjoyed that chapter immensenly, of thf the best to date, if not the best. I think Shu overheard Yuki and now he's going to get the wrong idea, bse Ise I know Yuki's words were just to spite the woman. I seriously can't wait to see what happens! What are you waiting to publish this fic over at Gurabite?! I'd say the adult content on that site is greater than here! Many adults are there, talk to imayb or anyone over at the Gravi community and they'll you. Most of us are well over 20, soem in their 30's and over. Do email me or ask around if you are interested. I certainly recommend you publish there; there are less youngsters than here, despite the warnings on this site, you can tell there are many underage around. Come over to Gurabite! :D Best of luck on the next installment, I'm dying to read it!!!
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  • From PatoSan on April 21, 2004
    I finished reading what's up of this story and I can only say that I loved it! There are so many little details that make it such an excellent read, and the lemony bits arey wey well written. I truly love it and I hope you and your co-writer update it soon! I hear it's nearly done and you just need to fluff around with the editing for a bit. I'll eagerly await; that was very, very enjoyable. It's so simple but it flows really well and the bit about Shu being spoiled was, in my opinion, a really nice touch. It makes you wonder about his character. As cute and nice as he may be, I can see where his parents are coming from, although they shouldn't be nasty. This is also the first time I see Eiri portrayed in this way. He's mature, but not overly, and even though he has his problems he's not overly dramatic. The whole fic has this very relaxing feeling to it somehow it it's very smooth. It stands out. A lovely job, certainly.
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  • From PatoSan on April 18, 2004
    Chapter 6

    Ok, call me freaky but I do think the bathroom bits really added to the story. It brings it home, make sit feel more real. Nice description of Hiro/Yuki interaction and some great stuff with Yuki's ulcer. There are some of the best interpretations and descriptions of Anime!Yuki drub prescription and ulcer that I've seen. Very nicely written! :P
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  • From PatoSan on April 18, 2004
    Chapter 5

    Nice touch at the end. I wouldn't have thought of it. It's not something that people tend to include, I thought it was good that you did, adds maturity to the writing and the feeling of reality is stronger, too. My only complaint os the time he spent in hospital, it seemed to short after surgery, collapsed lungs and broken legs. But it's ok, I'll overlook it for the sake of the story ^_^ This is extremly good so far. I'm hooked so badly! Next chapter!
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  • From PatoSan on April 18, 2004
    Chapter 4

    Really nice chapter, too. I really liked how you got Shuichi's fatho beo be a bit of a paternal figure to Yuki. Most people would have probably written them on the same footing, but they forget Yuki, as mature as he may be, is only 23. That's the first time I see that so well and simply portrayed (it's nt expressed explicitly but htat's the feeling I got). I'm seeing many new things in this fic, I love it when that happens! Next one now!
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  • From PatoSan on April 18, 2004
    Chapter 3

    That has got to be the best hospital scene after the crash that I've read. Everyone's reactions, the people that actually managed to hear about it and make it to the hospital, everything was good. The most memorable scene for me though was Yuki breaking down in his sister's arms. It was so realistic, so simple and done with so little over dramatizing. Just realistic and painful, like real life. You are still stly tly aware of how silly you look, but it really does take second priority before a situation of this sort, and you conveyed tperfperfectly. I also loved hw the accident brought Yuki and Hiro together a little bit. Unspoken thoughts but supporting each other nonetheless. I loved it all! Onto the nex chappie ^_^ I'm dying to find out what happens! I've read Zetsuai, I still ahevn't seen the resemblance (apart from the obvious accident). Let's see...
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  • From PatoSan on April 18, 2004
    Chapter 2

    I liked that chapter very much. The emotions that Yuki was going through at the begining and how Shuichi reacted to them. It was all very much IC. This is the first time I read a story in this fashion. I mean there have been others that have attempted the same thing, but this is definately the best try I've read to date (and I have read plenty *cringes at thought*). I was talking about the thoughts and the emotions of course. I have read many others, Shu has an accident and something happens. I'm intrigued to see how you will deal with this one. But if what I've read in this story is anything to go by, it'll be different to the stuff I've read up to now, and I shall be very pleased! Thanks for posting at this site. You should consider poting at Gurabiteshyion.net as well. It's a Gravitaion only archive and most of the readers are adults. You should definately check it out. I only post my R rated stuff here and in that archive.
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  • From ANON - Aja (imayb1) on April 17, 2004
    I'm so glad you are sharing this "ficcy" with a greater community of readers! I've told you before on the ML how much I enjoyed this, but I wanted to tell you again, here. I'm glad you finally named it! This is, honestly, one of the best Gravitation fanfic stories I've read. I don't say that lightly and I've read... thousands. Literally. I love this story. I hope that this posting encourages you to write and post many more Gravitation stories because your writing is SO worth reading.
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  • From PatoSan on April 17, 2004
    Well, well. Mirai Aira placed a rec for this fic over at a Gravi community dedicated solely to the search of good quality Gravi fanfics. I must say she chose wisely. What a aonderful start. I loved it, it was very powerful, well written and filled woth more emotion than any other 'angsty' fic I've read in a long time. I'm loving every minute of it. The thoughts, the actions, the lemon, everything was wonderful. I shall now go and check the links she placed at the site to get more chapters of this incredible story. I hope the quality stays up with the following chapters and I shall review every single one. Ver y nice job. One of the best starts to a fic I've read in a long time. Lovely.
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  • From ANON - mirai aria on April 17, 2004
    Anyway, I've seen the later chapters to this and you know I loved it :-D I just have to write a review for the rest of the chapters. I've been a bad girl. *emails*
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