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Reviews for Relax and Hang On -- Again

By : cupnjava

From ANON - Lychee on October 20, 2004
Ohmyfuckingod! "Complicated" indeed. So, while my husband and the rest of the east coast is screaming at the tv (game 7 Red Sox vs Yankees), I am at the computer trying to tune him out so I can focus on something important; devouring your fine story. And now I'm going to crawl off to bed and probably lie there obsessing over what just happened to my Kappa, and where it'll go from here. I see much angst in the future... I'll have to re-read some of the previous, more light hearted chappies to cheer myself up. In particular, I loved the bit in the jeep with the laughing fit from hell. I've been in the thralls of something like that before. I was quite nervous when I read your notes at the begining about how much is too much. But I gotta say, I think you did a hell of a job. I spent a lot of time twitching and wincing. It was descriptive enough to make me wince, but not so gory as to make me hurl. I can't say I "enjoyed" it, but you did a remarkable job. However, I will be glad when we can get back to the more pleasant love-making between Crimson and Emerald. Even when they're being kinky, smutty, and slutty they're still "making-love". Definately. Keep up the amazing work (bows to the author).
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From ANON - Hakuryuu on October 20, 2004
Oftentimes, I feel the best writing crosses a few lines. Yours trampled a few boundries. I am speechless... floored, and in awe. This was incredibly deep, psychologically thought out and really well organized into something that gave me the chills and still left me unable to look away. You used really nice syntax in the repitition and the importance of the inner personas... but oh goodness... that last part gave me absolute chills. I can't wait to read your next part but I know I'll be bawling through it. And, above all, you created another variable within the relationship that still keeps them in character. ...wow... forget studying tonight. Just... hoooo I need to take a breath. I might start bawling now.

On to your response to the review... jeez. Happy thoughts. I totally invision a bunch of us getting together at some con and getting into some incredibly deep conversation about the meaning of life through saiyuki and stuff... I already got into a mini one with my lit teacher who has no idea about Saiyuki... :) but whatever. I would love to do that... that'd be soooo much fun. Definately.

Good luck with the surgery and everything!

- Hakuryuu (gyu!)
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From ANON - Flamingolo on October 20, 2004
New twists, new twists *cheers*. I especially liked the way you did Hakkai and Gojyo's thoughts; excellent job making it just 'like a car crash'. This ficcies is so wickedly funny...you had me giggling like an idiot with Gojyo's interspersed 'comments' to Kenren. Lovely job, nice mix of humor, sex, action, and gore. ee cee cheers for the gore *cheers again*. Ever eager for more!
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From ANON - addictedtomarbles on September 27, 2004
Hurrah, Gaiden goodness and yes I read it at work *slaps wrist*. I did read it again when I got home though. Aww a rule book as a memory book takes me back to younger days. I enjoyed the smashing up idea and the sweatdropping Goujun.
How brutal? Umm well I'm a kinky bugger so like the others death and dismemberment is probably my line. (The books you mentionned in one of the chapters, I recognised most of the titles ... er ...you didn't need to know that)

I look forwards to your next installment and suggest sending you gingerbread shapes (hopefully stars and smileys if I can find my cutters and wine-bottle rolling pin).
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From ANON - Anon on September 27, 2004
Hurrah, Gaiden goodness and yes I read it at work *slaps wrist*. I did read it again when I got home though. Aww a rule book as a memory book takes me back to younger days. I enjoyed the smashing up idea and the sweatdropping Goujun.
How brutal? Umm well I'm a kinky bugger so like the others death and dismemberment is probably my line. (The books you mentionned in one of the chapters, I recognised most of the titles ... er ...you didn't need to know that)

I look forwards to your next installment and suggest sending you gingerbread shapes (hopefully stars and smileys if I can find my cutters and wine-bottle rolling pin).
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From ANON - Rya-chan on September 26, 2004
Mmmm...this chapter was spicy. xD

The little rule-book thing was very cute - play-doh is fun :p I should...sculpt some time as well. Oddly enough next Semester I'll actually be taking sculpture. Damn. I'm going to have fun with that. *falls over*

Kenren and Tenpou are just to hot for their own good O.o;

Gojun really needs to have better cover-ups~ Or maybe one time he should just tell out the truth. And um, the 'wtf moment' was a good wtf. No worries, it just took me by surprise~ I'll elaborate more when I gy lay lazy ass to type an email.

I'd also have to say, the line is also just shy of death and dismemberment. Because I'm just that kinky. >.>

So, good luck with your move ^^. I hope everything goes well!

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From ANON - shinigami_senpai on September 26, 2004
That...was...AWESOME! I feel like Chris Farley, "Remember that time when Kenren and Tenpou...That was awesome..."
I love the concept. I also agree with other reviewers that your story is about as close to "in character" as you can get any still have naughty grown-upion.ion. Also, about the future chapter, I'm in the Just Shy of Death and Dismemberment camp. Go, go, go! You . sh.
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From ANON - Hakuryuu on September 25, 2004
You've done it again. Hi-larious. Amazing! You never stop raising the bar. The little "fight" scene... lol. And does Gojun have a liiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiittle crush on somebody??? Or is he just, um, upset? Lol. Nice job with the characterizations and such (like al... al... WOW I just got the Gojun thing. Like, Hakuryuu? Wow. Way late on *that* bandwagon. >< hooooooeeeeeee. :) Very nice all the same. Seems like he grew up a little in his next life tho ;)). 8's were hilarious... 888.H... gonna remember *that* one! And the stuffed animal thing??? oooh am I gonna have a story to tell you ;). Yeek what e It It was all so brilliant I can't even start. Go Tenpou/Kenren. Just go them. They kick butt.

And as for going too far... you know me, I'd tell you to do what you felt, and you can tone it down for others but KEEP the original. On the other hand, I love my boys and would *hate* to see them hurt lol. But I think you should do whatever's best for the plot ;). Good luck and merry writings!

So sorry, this would have been longer but it's midnight and I'm exhausted. Goodnight!

- Hakuryuu (gyu!)
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From ANON - CloeyKujaku on September 24, 2004
n.n;; I really SHOULD of reviewed much sooner, I've consistantly checked this story ever since the second chapter was put out, and am NOW finally reviewing? God, I'm so lazy.

Ahem. -Straightens up and looks profesional.-

DEAR GOD I LOVE YOU! ALL TIME FAVORITE AUTHORESS EVER. FIVE STARS. A+. TWO THUMBS UP. MARRY ME! ;____;

Okay, maybe that was going to far.

How brutal is too brutal? Kuku, I'm up for anything. Just...Don't end up killing them. Crying doesn't make me happy.

I'm so sad you won't update for a bit, I'm really looking forward to the next chapter. I'm deeply impressed that you're able to create such DAMN good lemons and not have them seem repetitive. You're the only authoress I've seen do this, which is probably why I keep reading. It's such a thrill reading your fictions, since you never know what'll happen next! So, I hereby claim myself to review every chapter from now on, because you DAMN well don't get the credit you deserve. -AWE.-

-Sits down and refreshes page repetitively for next update.-

Loves it!

-Clojaku
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From ANON - Hakuryuu on September 21, 2004
Oh... goodness.

This was awesome. Just awesome. I don't know how you put that much frickin AMAZING porn (and that many four + syllable words) into that fic, but you did, and I definately give it my gold (or white? gyu!) seal of approval. Were there a Nobel Porn Prize, you would win, hands down.

Oh wow... XD this was hilarity. At it's finest. Well, not when they were blasting holes in the wall (although, I could just *imagine* Gojyo's little I'm-so-sexy-but-I'm-in-so-much-pain-don't-you-wish-you-were-me-Sanzo-kun SMIRK on his face XD) but other times.. ohh... okok ok the thing with the deck of cards - you are bomb. You captured a lot of the spirit with that, I'll have you know... and you may be rolling with laughter when you see a later Reload ep. XD I know I sure am. And the bells... Lilin's bells... XD hooooooo! Too funny.

I'll email you more in-depth about the con, but I met a woman there and we were discussing some of the finer parts of the series... and, in short, we totally agree with you about Goku. That was the consensus we came to as well :).

Sanzo... oh! When he was finally 'hanging with the guys' thing... that was awesome. I just finished watching Teen Titans (which is my new fix lol it's pretty good!) it reminded me of Raven and her I'm-stoic-but-I'd-kinda-almost-maybe-like-to-be-one-of-the-"gang" complex). Wonderful.

XD I just loved the entire thing. I know I'm forgetting halves and millions and every such thing that I wanted to say about this fic... oh dear it was one of those lines about the monkey or something >< darnit! Anyway, hilarious!

Speaking of which...

I almost died when... um... a certain number was mentioned. I laughed out loud... both times... for a loooooong time. hooo... and the 4 and 4... was that purposeful? Veeeeery tricky with that math... XD. I won't be able to hear the word... er... yeah, for a LONG time without laughing uncontrollably.

Oh! And did I say the HP thing? Fantastic. Sure, you can use it! I just need to remember to set my emails to save sent messages >
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From ANON - Flamingolo on September 19, 2004
Hello lemonade! This was a really steaming chappy. I loved the cute way that Goku took control and how their relationship changed. I also thought you did an excellent job 'taking us there' with Sanzo. However confident and strong-willed he may seem in the series, behind closed doors would be a different, even more complex story. Long explanation short: I found it to be an interesting and IC perspective on Sanzo. And Gojyo and Hakkai f-ing like bunnies...well, what's not to like? One thing that stands out for me is the constant back-fortforth between Hakkai and Gojyo. I love the dynamics of their relationship as you've written it, especially sinccan'can't picture either of them 'laying back and taking it' (which makes for some extremely yummy lemons); in other words, I love how they keep playfully trying to outdo (no pun...lol) each other. Oh, and the cute little dragon lime was adorable ^_^ Anyway, lovely chapter, as usual. Eager for more!
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From ANON - addictedtomarbles on September 19, 2004
I loved it! Thought it was brilliant and that I shouldn't be reading it in a communual computer room *sweatdrop*. Although I do think that flame was a little harsh, it wasn't really constructive criticism at all, just a lot of slagging off. It's not nice when people flame-blast things to eternity just because they don't like your take on it. And you mentioned cookies woo...
Don't take the flame to heart, your writing is good, kinky and yummy. Even if you lose one reader, you have a loyal fan base over here. I like your take on it and I await the Kenren and Tenpou addendum with a shake 'n vac dance on standby
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From ANON - mzblue on September 18, 2004
Man, you've done it again!!!!!! This one trultruly the Superbowl of Saiyuki lemons!!!!! It's Gojyo/Goku vs Sanzo/Hakkai.
You did a wonderful job caputuring the blow by blows (laughs manically to self hahhah)
And its not just the lemons, but the essence of the Saiyuki Camraderie that you do so wonderful a job of capturing! Your storytelling has great depth and feeling, without going off into OOC land. Your fics should come with following warning labels:

"Warning the following stories will hurl your emotions and libido over a cliff. You will experience a slight dizziness as you laugh you ass off at the Saiyuki guys adventures. Undies will be ruined in the process. You have been warned, and feel free to pass these wonderful stories off to all you friends."

I can't wait to see what's next. Truly wonderful story writing. Thanks for making my day!

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From ANON - Demon45 on September 18, 2004
Good Heavens but that was good. No, not good. Great! I don't know which pairing was hotter. *drinks a huge glass of cold water to cool down* My, oh my!! I am not sure why I haven't reviewed before now but I must address this now. This was simply awesome. Thanks so much for sharing with us. I love how "everyone" becomes a part of the show (so to speak!) And I must say I loved Goku being so forceful. �How�s this, Priest, nasty enough for ya?� Oh my, my my!! All in all a great job and I am really enjoying this. Wil there be more? I sure hope so!!
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From ANON - Rya-chan on September 17, 2004
And please don't worry about the false Anon hun ^~ I just read his review, and of course --even though we hate it -- everyone has their own opinion. Of course though, I'm quite sure you allready know that.
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