Adult-FanFiction.org : Anime

Reviews for Relax and Hang On -- Again

By : cupnjava

From ANON - Rya-chan on September 17, 2004
O.o;

You updated so soon. xD It usually takes more than 2 weeks or so for most authors to do. Dedicated, or just in the mood for smut, hm? Heh. Well you've impressed me again. Thoroughly. You made me cry, laugh, and simply go 'wtf' this chapter.

The little dragon bit, was immensly cute. About time the little MAN dragon got in on some action. *falls over*

You portrayed the Goku/Sanzo bit just about as cannon as you can get. It was simply gorgeous.

And it was about time Goyjo got a rough fuck. I can't just get enough of Hakkai's demon form :p

You've made my day by writing this, a great way to spend a Friday evening, hot chocolate, and fanfiction.

Mmm.

You have my thanks.
Report Review
From ANON - anon on September 17, 2004
I think your characterization of Sanzo is the worst I�ve ever read. You have him making jokes and being a sub. You have totally broken cannon. I mean why don�t you just have him dance or something. Next will you have him submit to Goku? And, then you use the characters to defend how you broke characterization. Horrid. What�s the point of writing fan fiction if you�re just going to disregard the characters.

This story is repetitive and predictable. How many chapters and no plot? PWP is one chapter � one chapter. You are trying to just cram as much in here as possible. You must really need a sex life.

Why don�t you ever post any of your bad reviews? I�m sure you get them. I know I won�t be seeing this one there, because I�m not going toreadreading anymore.

You write long narratives like we actually give a shit about what you say and what you think. You pretend like you care. Whatever! Your just trying to get readers. You are insulting your readers with the vocabulary shit. I fucking know what those words mean and if someone else doesn�t then they can just look it up.

Give the story some plot not just sex and maybe just maybe I might read your crap again.

Don�t think I�m posting as as anon because I�m hiding or anything. I�m posting this anon because I don�t want your friends -- who are your only readers I�m sure -- flaming my shit �because I know they will.

Report Review
From ANON - Lychee on September 15, 2004
First let me tell you how much I enjoy your fics. Cause I a w a whole lot! You have a great sense of humor, that bit of conversation in the jeep a few chappies back had me howling. And I love Sanzos' sense of humor, sick and twisted as it is. And the way Sanzo and Gojyo always seem to overhear something they shouldn't...and then using it. I can't wait for Hakkais' revenge against Sanzo. And I've learned some new words! But I have a teeny tiny complaint. Well, not a complaint but a correction. It's rigid, not ridged. Pe doe don't hate me! I've seen this mistake in other fics too and I always snicker at the mental imaI meI mean, I know Trojans are 'ridged for her pleasure' but if I saw an uncovered one that already had ridges on it, I'd run away screaming. ^_^ So, please write more, you're awesome!
Report Review
From ANON - Flamingolo on September 15, 2004
My, my! A wonderous lemon...and it was even het. Nicely done, I think that is probably one of the only believable ways I can see Sanzo having sex (oh, I've TRIED to realistically envision other way,ieveieve me ^_^). I vehemently agree that he needs to come to some realizations before he will let himself have sex that isn't a bit on the punishing/non-conish side...say...sex with Goku *snickers*? I'm usually a bit hard on OC, but I wound up liking this take-charge dominatrix...so you get an OC medal *hands you naked bishie medal*. I also thought you did a smashing job with Goku, his behavior, and what's going through that wonderfully ernest little mind of his. As always, looking forward to more!
Report Review
From ANON - Rya-chan on September 13, 2004
Lovely Chapter. Lovely Story.

That was the most sex I've ever read straight for 3.2 hours.

I have no life.

But - anyway, beautiful characterization, it's like you could actually imagine this happening in the series. Please update soon.
Report Review
From ANON - Shenigami_senpai on September 12, 2004
Fantastic! This particular chapter fed my Sanzo fetish in such a glorious way I had to read it TWICE! Thank you for an excellent fic. Just enough humor and angst to keep it lively, but not so much of either that the story gets bogged down, perfect characterizations, wonderfully vivid narration. What more could a girl ask for? I gush�
Report Review
From ANON - Hakuryuu on September 12, 2004
SQUEE!!! you are my hero. Have I told you that before? I should have. If not, let me tell you again. You are my hero. :) You are amazing and wonderful and brilliant and OH dear I can't even imagine. ...Can I have your autograph? ^^

Ok ok ok so in sequential order: The fragile/strong thing... that was amazing, and a very astute observation. I think that that is one of his main problems... well, not problem really, but misunderstanding. You phrased it nicely :) and it definately opens doors. Like my lit teacher says, "Good stories don't answer questions, they ask them."

Sanzo is gorgeous. I would have that man in an instant. You made him sound just godly (Konzen XD) in your description... XD I want. Definately want.

That one part of suspense before that last blow with the belt... VERY well done! Definately had me holding my breath ;).

The part with Kanzeon Bosatsu telling Jiroshin about how strong people can be free when they're weak... (badly paraphrasing your argument/thesis)... that was beautiful. I've actually been thinking about that today, and then I read this and it all came together. You really have an amazing eye for detail and slight observations that most people might miss... and then you're able to organize your findings in such an all-encompassing way... it's amazing. It's also very hard to do, so applause for doing it so well.

...Eight... ::snicker:: That actually wasn't in the story, but I had to. Just cuz. You understand.

Goku and the freedom of thought... NICE! It never really occured to me, but it makes sense when you mention it. Goku is really open minded... and it's not cuz he's stupid (like those meanies always tell him ;)) but it's because he can't find anything wrong with it. That could be expanded onto a whole nother philisoph deb debate... :) NICE!!! WAI you have me asking all these questions and thinking AND it's even at 11:00 and I'm tired! :) Major Kudos. I think you've broken a few laws of nature.

The part about Hakkai and the child... terrible. Terribleterribleterrible. My heart broke for him. I've also wondered that too though... ... oooooooooh! so sad.

Kenren and the plot against heaven (hey, sounds like the title to a Harry Potter book!) was hilarious. I must have laughed about a minute straight. All that displaced energy cuz the rest was so sad. :) But that line was hilarious. ... O.o when does Kenren ever keep his mouth shut? Let poor Gojyo have it. Just once. ...For me? ^^

Forward... *snicker* I have definately wanted to say "Relax and Hang On" in my car when I have people just to see what would happen... *snicker snicker* Maybe I'll just say "Forward" and laugh at my own inside jokes.

To wrap i ((T ((The chapter before was BEAUTIFUL too... oh dear with the nails thing? *shudder* I have really long nails and whenever things get stuck like that... or it rips or... *shudder* oh that's terrible... and looking for his fear? Definately. I've worked with animals long enough... they can smell it. Horses will run away, but if you get a predatory animal... ooh it's all over. ... and Gojyo gets turned ON?!? lol)) this was another WELL WRITTEN and ABSOLUTELY AMAZING chapter. I was sooooo excited for it's release... and now it's here! FANTASTIC!!!! Keep it up, I cannot wait for the next one. I'm on the edge of my rolling desk chair.

- Hakuryuu (gyu!)
Report Review
From ANON - Flamingolo on September 07, 2004
Hurray! An update; and oh my this was a violent one *pats you on the head*. Goodness. I loved it, and I appreciated the lengths you went to for the accy. cy. And, I'm not even going to pout that their was no lemon ^_^ I think my stomach would've failed me for sure in cas case *grins*. Excellent job, again looking forward to more!
Report Review
From Maetel on September 07, 2004
I really liked this chapter. Especially the way yharaharacterized Hakkai's youkai side. There is so little shown of it throughout the series that I have seen. Also, Very creative name for that part of Hakkai.

Also, thank you for making Hakuryuu more than just the dragon who peeps every so often. I've loved reading his internal reactions to everything that has been going on.
Report Review
From ANON - Pegent ent on August 30, 2004
I love Gojyo. The way you write hims is exactly how I always saw him in the manga. I especially love the lines 'what he wants, we give'. not many people can write Gojyo's character with the kind of insight that you do. He manages to stay the irrisponsible older brother, but at the same time he's the gentle understanding lover.

Hakkai is just as well written of course, but I thought since everyone told you that, you already knew. Hakkai and Gojyo belong together for more than just their pasts and their friendship though. They have an inate understanding of eachother that is expressed all over the manga, and that you have managed to portray quite well in your writing. Plus the sex is hot, but that is secondary to me. Still hot though. Can't wait to read the next installment.
Report Review
From ANON - Flamingolo on August 29, 2004
I really liked the latest chapter of this...I thought you did a nice job with the certain artistic liberties you took ^_^ They added a lot to the ficcie, and hell, who DOESN'T enjoy a little angst? Once again, you churn out one of the hottest lemons I've ever read *fans 'self*. I think they make such an impact because they are so original; it shows that you go to great lengths to avoid writing a cliched sex scene, and gods do I appreciate that! Excellent, excellent job. I can't wait for more. Really I can't. I'm wasting away as we speak ^_^ Keep up the great work.
Report Review
From ANON - Hakuryuu on August 28, 2004
I knew I forgot a few things!!! One, I LOVED your transitions... they were amazing! And I'm just a bit curious (I'm sure you'll explain in the next one, but just to make sure...) what *exactly* happened between Sanzo/Goku? And... umumum... oh yes. I love Kanzeon Bosatsu. You did an excellent portrayal. :)tasttastic!!!!
Report Review
From ANON - addictedtomarbles on August 28, 2004
You updated! Hooray and this one was just as good. There are some fics out there that always have Hakkai just lying down for everybody and it was good that you twisted it around so he got his "revenge" so to speak and Sanzo's ass needed kicking. Also that if stuff happened in Hakkai's childhood you didn't let it distract from the actual story. I also liked the multiple personality thing and that you dealt with it in a light-hearted way. As someone who has problems with such things it was a refreshing to see it dealt with so lightheartedly rather than wallowing in the very bottom of the pit of angst.

Please put the addendum on, I'd love to hear how Tenpou and Kenren broke a bookshelf and everything.

Holds out cookie of encouragement
Report Review
From ANON - ShiroiFuji on August 28, 2004
From your stories, I knew you were an awesome writer. Writing lemons really is an art. To put in a plot, to make these actions believable as the character's - it takes attention to detail.

And you're good at it. Not just the lemons of course, though I must admit I completely adore those. But the jokes...oh Christ, when they had that giggle fit I was right there with them. I am never going to be able to hear the phrase "relax and hang on" without a glauglaugh.

But it's more than just the story even. The warning you wrote at the begining showed you did care about your readers, as did the note at the end. And that shows something about you as a person, not as a writer.

I hope I can enjoy many more of your works, and whenever you finally leave this behind you - for life does slowly change us all - I hope that as you continue on, you stay as wonderful as you are.
Report Review
From ANON - Hakuryuu on August 28, 2004
XD Fantastic. Absolutely Fantastic. You've definately pushed the bar again - and I love it. I get so wrapped up in reading your fics that I forget fic fic-dom and start thinking otherwise. Absolutely amazing.

...Lets see if I can remember all of this.

1) That dirty conversation was awesome. Absolutely awesome. I almost died laughing. That is so much fun to do... and to see Hakkai get a kick out of it too XD man that kid needs to loosen up like that a lot more.

2) Which brings me to my second point. I liked your theory about his childhood... I know that's been theorized with Sanzo as well, but this shed a whole new light on things.

3) Which brings me to three - where do you find scanlations or manga scans + translations? I'd LOVE to get my hands on some Gaiden... I must admit, that's the one thing I'm really unfamiliar with. Since it's far easier for me to get the anime (or so I thought) I've just been basing it off of that and reading the books as they come along... but perhaps its time to change that. (If you've read the liner notes for the second book, it refers to Gojyo and Sanzo as being "bad friends"... which happens to be the name of their image song XD) So I don't really know a lot about Gaiden, how everything happened, or how Hakkai met up with Hakuryuu, but I'd loooooove to find out. Gaiden is awesome. Tenpou is god. (Which, coincidentally, he is ^^).

4) ohhh the bitchy hakkai... the best example of that is in the ep where Gojyo helps out that little girl... and Sanzo and Hakkai have the conversation, and Hakkai bets Gojyo ditched Goku for some girl... and Sanzo disagrees and POOF there's Goku and Hakkai just TURNS TO SANZO with this SMILE on his face... my goodness ithe the funniest thing ever. There's also a Hakkai ep in Gunlock that shows just how awesome he is.

5) Reading into the lines is fun. Please continue to do so. It's made for interesting conversation. :)

6) Oh yeah... Sanzo, admit anything??? XD hilarious. But I see your point, and I agree totally. And eight inches... that's funny. and even funnier that it's eight... like Hakkai.

7) Totally unrelated (but not really) but there's a reload gunlock ep with a girl who reminded me SO MUCH of Scarlet (right? That's her name, isn't it? From Of Her Nature?) I was just bowled over and had to tell you.

and finally 8) Sorry for depressing you so much with my fic ^^() I'll send you another one (it might be a little un-understandable, cuz it's kindof a friend-insertioc foc for, well, a friend) lol but it has to do with Hakkai... in a rather comedic situation. Hopefully that'll make up for it. ^^()

Please please please keep up writing. Your work is amazing and I can't wait to read more. 10k props to you!!!
Report Review