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Reviews for Relax and Hang On -- Again

By : cupnjava

From ANON - Ginny on December 16, 2006
Wow. That's all I can say... Followed by a desperate cry for more. Because this was awesome. Awesome and cool and great and hot and cool and the hot and... Well the whole spectrum of praises really... I don't review often, but you deserve it. Definately. I had to review. It's so awesome... *is still in awe*
So anyway, the story's good, the smut's better, the dark parts had shivers running down my spine and made me want to stop reading even though I couldn't and kept readong on and... Well, yeah... Amazing. Really. My sincere compliments.
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From ANON - vampslyr on December 16, 2006
Chapter 10: 'It's weird when they do it' because they're not acknowledging that they care for each other. Love isn't weird no matter how you express it, but fucking without love is weird.

If Kenren and Tenpou had acknowledged to each other their mutual attraction to Konzen, things might not have gotten so bad. Goku wouldn't even think of it as sharing, it'd just be a natural expression of love.

Damn, so good. This is just so brilliantly written.
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From ANON - vampslyr on December 16, 2006
The main problem here is that Hakkai doesn't know *why* Gojyo's been going from woman to woman and that it shouldn't be part of his nature. And the lack of talking. That'll hurt a relationship faster than anything.

I skimmed the actual torture, just reading the interactions between Kenren and Gojyo, but damn girl, this is so well written. Thank you for Kougaiji to the rescue. He line "You have relinquished your right to breathe." I'm pretty sure I woke my roommate up when I screeched, 'cause that's the only answer to that situation. I'm really glad that this happened in the castle so Yaone is there to heal him.

Bunny is just creepy. Amend that: Bunny is just *fucking* creepy. We all know that Bunny is far worse than anything that humanity is capable of writing, we all know there is far worse in that unknown than we can fathom, and hope never to be able to.

Crap, I was afraid he'd make an association with the torture and Hakkai. I am so glad I'm reading this at a late date so I don't have to wait for the next chapter.
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From ANON - vampslyr on December 12, 2006
Chapter 8: I think we see the reason *why* they had to clean the office 3 weeks ago.

I just wanted to point out for continuity's sake that you had Tenpou moving his hand in the middle of the sex scene even though they were bound at the beginning and end:
'Tenpou stretch and arm out and tried to grab the sandals as they traveled through the air...' 'Tenpou tapped Kenren on the shoulder...' 'Tenpou�s fingers mindlessly trailed against his own stomach.'

Wow, one of the reasons they're fucking is to *hinder the army*!? Damn, sneaky SOBs. And they're *trying* to get thrown out of heaven. I really need to catch up on episodes I haven't seen yet.
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From ANON - vampslyr on December 11, 2006
Chapter 7: That's one hell of a summary. Well, now we have an idea what Goku was thinking about when he was lost in thought over games of cards a couple of chapters back. Go Goku! Good sneaky little monkey. Interesting and unexpected use of the Nyoi-bo, and I mean unexpected as in I never connected sex + nyoi-bo before the beginning of the sentence, by the end of it my brain was thinking 'dildo' and then you go one better by making it a restraint. I'm impressed with the whole set up there.

Oh my, that passion chi has an area effect. Hmm, wonder if we could drown a whole building with it...

That was a sweet and beautiful conclusion to Sanzo and Goku's love making. I am so glad you wrote that and now Sanzo can see just what it was he was searching for.

That was the fucking best chapter ever. It took me over three hours to read and and I had to keep stopping because I was braking down from laughing so hard. I thought my neighbors were gonna shoot me and I'm just glad my roommates weren't around 'cause they would have.
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From ANON - vampslyr on December 10, 2006
Chapter 6: Wow, I don't believe it! Something sqicks the Merciful Goddess! Hmmm, Sanzo feels pleasure from asphyxiation, but it's something he can't give in to. Interesting hang up, something really nasty must have happened there. I wonder if we'll find out.

Well, with that revelation of Goku's perspective, we're back to square one with figuring out his and Sanzo's sexual relationship. You're keeping us guessing on purpose and it's appreciated, though it be frustrating.
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From ANON - vampslyr on December 10, 2006
Chapter 5: Wasn't able to find the manga scans of demon Hakkai on Hakkai_Love, but it may have been a while since you wrote this chapter. Shit, Sanguinans is fucking scary. That was really well written, Sanguinans' obscured vision and point of view were pure grade A horror.

Hakuryuu is awesome, gotta love the dragon that doesn't even know his own strength. Tano is an interesting OC.
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From ANON - vampslyr on December 10, 2006
Chapter 4: Go Merciful Goddess! Interesting to note that Sanzo seems to respond well to being dominated. I don't think he's quite gotten with Goku yet, and it may be because Goku hasn't figured out this little tidbit yet. I think Goku just keeps making advances and gets rejected after Sanzo plays with his head a little. But not too much, Sanzo does care about him. I think your overall writing style for this is very good and I appreciate your word usage and spacing, it adds a lot to the story.
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From ANON - vampslyr on December 10, 2006
Hahahaahahaha, Hakuryuu is the Dragon King? Fitting punishment for the bull shit he pulled according to the end notes from disk 6. Tenpou's an... interesting... persona. Good to have an idea of what's going on in Hakkai's head now.
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From ANON - vampslyr on December 10, 2006
Chapter 2 absolutely awesome. Sanzo is evil, but I'm sure he doesn't realize that he's actually hurting Hakkai. I know you said it was up to the individual to decide if there's anything going on between Sanzo and Goku. At this point, I'd say it was one-sided with Goku wanting Sanzo and Sanzo being a bit oblivious. Now, what's up with Hakuryu? If you've made him a reincarnation of someone, I think that's really cool. If that's cannon, *damn* I need to see more.
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From ANON - vampslyr on December 10, 2006
Wow, Sanzo's pure evil in this. Not in a malicious way and it's absolutely hilarious, but still evil. This first chapter was just awesome, a magnitude above the original and completely hot.
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From Despina on August 27, 2006
Ch 20

I've waited through the AFF nightmare of closure for this story to reappear. An I actually read this chapter when you first posted it, but then couldn't find it again.

I love the hot tub scene, there was just something about that... You captured that feeling of being overwhelmed by love so well. The scene really choked me up.

Your intricate story line is amazing and well crafted. While the characters were created by someone else, these characters in this story are definitely your creation. I commend you and fangirl you. And you inspire me to want to write Saiyuki fiction.

I hope you can find the balance in your life to continue writing. I look forward to more.

Thank you for sharing.

Des
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From ANON - fuzzybunnytoo on August 16, 2006
Read it the first time but am re-reading it and it is even better! I love this and just have a big time yelling and laughing (think the neighbors are going to call the men in white coats) Let them come I am ready for them....Oh, did I say that out loud? Sorry. Love the Fic though.
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From ANON - midori eyes on June 30, 2006
Waiting, wainting, waiting, and still waiting. When you're next chapter is up, I'll be here waiting to read it, as will my sister ( for we are both somewhat addicted to your {epic?} story. It's believable, in my opinion, and every one is very much in character. You've filled in the gaps in everyone's past with a truely wonderful and satisfying read. Again, I hope to see the next chapter soon. Thanks!
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From ANON - guanyin-kun on June 02, 2006
Once again, outstanding. Your verbage and descriptions continue to develop and enthrall me to no end. Tenpou and Kenren remain, as always, a sharp reminder of what brought them to this point together. Tenpou's desire to keep his men safe, yet sacrifice himself believing it to be "living"....almost to the point that if you could merge some of Gonou's thanatos with Hakkai's skill of manipulation you would be almost there. I cried when you had the flash-back to *the* night. Gojyo's running commentary of having a normal life...his seventh birthday (he got slammed into a wall). Those secondary cues just tore at me when you realise how much he desperately wanted to live the lie he built up for himself. And the scene with Tenpuu...Leave. It. On. The. Table. That's Emerald's cup and when he wakes up from his nap he'll want it. A very vulnerable side we rearely see of Gojyo and probably need to. He's not as simple as he's made out to be, he's just not as messed up as Hakkai. I am heartened that your skill continues to improve, even since the last time I reviewed. Even though you can't up-date as often, I hope you do it soon. Like a certain Priest on a snowboard, this is just getting good. See you in the by-lines. lol.
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