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Reviews for Relax and Hang On -- Again

By : cupnjava

From ANON - Jamie on August 26, 2005
The jeep just sank, and Hakuryuu's pissed, lol. *Snickers* The comments are in completely random order, lol, because I don't want to go back to figure out which came first!

I'm actually not fond of threesomes usually, but this one was one of the better ones I've read. Top three, at least. Though I now want to smack Ah'nesty, lol.

I never played I never. *Sips drink and grins* And that Fuzzy Duck- Ducky Fuzz- Aw, fuck the duck... Er, yeah, heh. That was funny, lol.

Heh, Hakkai orally molesting a cherry. Funny.

Like the Gaiden flashback! Very much LIKE the gaiden flashback, lol! Aw, hell, I'm obsessed with Gaiden, lol...

Snerk. The scenes with the other groups were FUNNY, lol! Especially the one with just Kou and Lirin, heh. *I started giggling for a minute there, lol.

140 proof... That's seventy percent alcohol, ne? Sheesh, now I know what they mean by a burning sensation going down your throat...

Doku, you pervert... *Giggles*

Two lines in particular KILLED me, lol:

�Konzen, please tell me, how opened-minded is your aunt?� *Massive snickering fit*

Goku continued. �Gojyo�s hot when he cums.� *Thud goes the jaw*

...You do know Sanzo is going to murder you in your bed if you get his cock pierced, right? Lol!

This chapter isn't going to steal the favorite spot- that's reserved for numero tres, lol- but it's definetly a good one, lol!

Question: How long do you think it will be before people pounce on you for 20? Lol! By the way, for the deleted line thing: It's pokeball, go. not go pokeball. Snerk. A phase I will never return to, lol. *Head desk*
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From ANON - Shiro on July 09, 2005
I really should review this when I have my brain around me but I enjoyed reading this fanfic a lot. I used to have qualms about your style of writing the Saiyuki cast. Because Saiyuki is essentially japanese and your writing style is proper english and it somehow clashes each other when I was first exposed to your Sanzo/Hakkai fanfic you posted on the hardlove community on LJ. I liked your writing but your style of writing didn't seem to match that well for Saiyuki.
And then you got me hooked onto RAHO. ^__^; The 'style' difference (between Saiyuki and your writing style) is still there but you integrated it well enough that I can ignore it enough to enjoy the fic. I like how you manage to change a PWP into a full-fledged fanfic with plot ^__^
And I love the tension and everything that surrounds Gojyo and Hakkai. It's done wonderfully and I wish i could phrase myself better to describe how I feel about this fanfic. But I guess this will suffice for now.

Uhm, to satisfy a small curiosity, are there anymore chapters after chapter 18? I've seen you mention chapter 22 in the writing on your website and I'm itching to see what would happen now that a certain blonde female is back on the loose.

Great job. Hope to read more. ^_^
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From ANON - Soraslight on July 05, 2005
Awesome fic!!(Not counting that my favorite pairing is GojyoxHakkai) Can words describe how much of a genius you are?! Great job! You caught the characters personality's to a tee! I only on chapter 3 though...but I can say that this is the only long yaoi fic I will ever read. Because:
1) I have a short attention span
2) I love you story so I can't help myself.
Keep up the good work!!!!
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From ANON - Jamie on July 04, 2005
*Perks* Any chance the next chapter will be out for my birthday on July tenth? Lol, I'm turning 16.
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From ANON - Flamingolo on June 13, 2005
*points to empty, blackened hole in soul* Look, cup. A hole *lip quiver*. In my soul *cheesy music*. Caused by YOU. Lol, hope you're getting that blasted computer fixed; know that RaHO/any brand of cup fic is missed!
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From ANON - pyrocat on May 28, 2005
you are one of the best authors i have ever read. that said, the story can never be ruined (yes i read your webpage). yes the threesome is unexpected but if that is what the characters need to move on to more fun then......

overall your story is the best saiyuki fanfic i have ever read, and i mean that quiet literaly. the characters are living breathing people (or dragon) in the story.

just thought you should know

thanks for the story so far and please update soon!!
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From ANON - Flamingolo on May 12, 2005
Eep...a little late reviewing, many apologies! I had to wait until I could read this chappy in one sitting, and the verdict ends up being: Oh, you brilliant authoress, you. I adore that you revisited the paper and tied in the butterfly wings so perfectly; I absolutely did not see that one coming at all, you clever girl. Also liked the usage of red spider-webbing, very neat description that made me do another double take, something you seem to have a knack for *lol*. Smashing lyrics for the couple to sing, Hakkai's "This is the last smile that I�ll fake for the sake of being with you" fit so nicely in with his personality, and the theme. One thing I didn't approve of *grins* was the phrenology bashing. It ends in -ology, so it must be a science. Right...?

LMAO at Hakkai trying to fit himself into the weaving of the fleece shirt...that was such a great, subtle line the seemed to embody Hakkai's sense of humor to me. My favorite line in the chapter had to be �I suppose I need to do a better job of showing you that I love what�s beneath your smile.�; very sweet, even more so in its complex simplicity, at least taking into account the rest of the fic and Hakkai in general. *lol* I loved the dialogue between Hakkai and Sanzo that revolved around the religious protest, very funny exchange. Also, *lol* meatbun piercings...that's great. I love how Hakkai and Gojyo's relationship progresses both at an amazing rate, and a delightfully subtle one. *happy sigh* Fabulous new developments, this fic never disappoints, and is hands down one of my top five fics across fandoms. *glompage* Looking forward to more from you, you're delightful.
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From ANON - addictedtomarbles on April 21, 2005
Hey dear.

Sorry to hear about your computer. It sux when technology doesn't go your way.
Another chapter and I didn't mind waiting at all ... hearing about Gonou's life almost made him come alive off the paper and I liked that. We always knew Hakkai/Gonou was a dancer or a gymnast, ah Tenpou will be proud. I still can't find a way of writing dancing, I'm giving it a try and will send you the results. I liked how you portrayed it. I also want to see the other photo album because I have some naughty pictures in my head.
I guessed that Ah'Nesty wasn't from the underground. It seemed too easy although it didn't guess it exactly. I thought they might have met during Gojyo's two year period, but I certainly didn't see the twist coming.
Yay, Kama Sutra 101 with Cho Sensei is progressing too and he's taken on new pupils in Ah'Nesty and Gojyo (or would that be alumni?) and bless, Goku is doing really well in his demonstrations. Hakkai should ask Sanzo for an end-of-term report
Poor Gojyo too, his sensitive side does come through in this ficiton and from watching the anime and reading the manga both him and Goku seem to be the most emotional of the four. I think sometimes our kappas 'playboy' streak can be overplayed. Although Hakkai is my favoruite (i see where he is coming from). I'm quite drawn to Gojyo for some reason.
Jiroshin jumped Kanzeon! Woo. I was smirking all the way through it. Could I be rude and ask if I had any hand in it?? (although I thought she'd jump him, I was glad I was proved wrong)
Absinthe ... I have bad memories of absinthe ... never again ... well ... just a drop.
Right on with work and ope to hear from you soon

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From ANON - sg on April 08, 2005
From a reader who's been lurking lo these many chapters--I'm giving up now. A little bit of het *sometimes* is alright. Threesomes are great if it's for example Sanzo/Gojyo/Hakkai or Spike/Jet/Faye but I detest OCs. I'm still traumatized by the Sanzo-het back in ch. 5-6.

Having said that, you are a very talented writer and your yaoi-lemons are delicious.

Gomen nasai.

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From ANON - Mzblue on April 05, 2005
Well, once again you've rocked my notions, here I think the story is going to go one way and you once again hurl me off the emotional cliff so to speak!!!!! Although without ruining it for the rest of the readers one part in the story, really offended me, JUST KIDDING!!!, and you know which one I'm speaking of!!! MY EYES THEY BURN!!! LOL! That something I was not expecting and it was quite amusing, god, how I laughed. For those wondering read the story and you'll know what I'm talking about!!
Now back to the good stuff, I truly am moved by the love Gojyo & Hakkai share. Hakkai is one psycholgically disturbed person. God, he bleeds the angst, its pouring out of his pores. But considering the childhood background and on top of that his complete and total let down by the religious folk, who supposedly help one spiritually, is it any wonder the man is still alive?? Sometimes a part of me wishes to just slap some sense into him, but I guess that's what he has Gojyo for. To love him beyond the pain, fill the void. Great stuff, plus I love that even with the world falling around them, they can still find the funny. Speaking of funny I must file a complaint to you. No one desecrates the Great Sanzo's Weenie!!!!!! LOL!! Goku has one or two screws loose if he thinks the hot priest is going to let anyone near his dick. Hehhe, I love the way Sanzo finally took control without any of the fucking guilt. That's right Sanzo, you tame that monkey!! Puts a whole twist on "Spank the Monkey" I loved it.

Now here are some crazy t-shirts I've seen or wish to own:
Innocent Bystander
I do what my Rice Crispies tell me to do.
One Tequila, Two Tequila, Three Tequila, Floor!
Dick, the other white meat!! (LOL I gotta get me a shirt that says this!)

Great work!!!
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From ANON - Quirk on April 04, 2005
Yaaaaaaaay! Another chapter out! (pauses to laugh madly) I love the tee shirts. I've seen some like that, too, so it really cracked me up. I liked Goku's devious side--- i was running different theories as to how he and Hakkai communicated under Gojyo and Sanzo's nose. Thanks for demonstrating! Ah'Nesty--- I LIKE her. She feels real to me, like she could really exist in the Saiyuki world. And I would love to see them come up with that school uniform. The great Kannon finally getting some action with Jiroshin, cracked me up, too, especially since I think they had it coming. The serious parts--- and I think you know what I'm talking about--- well, they are like cleaning a wound that didn't get treated in time, and having to clean out all the gunk. I have issues with the same things Hakkai and Gojyo do, I guess. Oh! and i'm glad the bunny girl's back. It means they get to kill her again! ^_^ And I can't wait for the meeting between all three groups, however it plays out. I'm sorry about your computer; that totally sucks. Just do your best, ne? Oh, good warnings. I think they covered everything, to be sure. If I had to look for something, I'd say... more carefully betaing over spelling. Not grammer, or anything, just spelling. I try to triple check everything, but mistakes still get through, so I can't really say anything, but it's the only criticism I can think of that's constructive. Anyway, thank you for the chapter!
~Q
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From ANON - Paisley. on April 03, 2005
I have retuuuuuurned. >:D

And YES, I am mad about the threesome. Gahhh, I want that whore-ho-bitch deaaaad. I mean, she's cool, but I still can't shake that feeling that she's gonna break my two dears appart. But with that dance scene, my stomach dropped. But me and Gojyo feel the same way whenever our significant other does something of that nature.

I am mostly sad because Gojyo is my favorite character. He's a hottie on a stick and even my own boyfriend is jealous of him. [Which tells you something] but he always talks about Naru from Love Hina so I get him back with my posters of the hot kappa all over my wall. But it always weirds me out when Gojyo is with a woman nowadays because I can't stop reading Gojyo x Hakkai fics. I also am starting to go to more Gojyo x Goku because for some reason, that gets me going.

And believe me, I have tried numerous times to write lemons. But either I get the giggles because I spaz and say, " OMFG, I typed penis!!!" or I think it's not quite as arousing as it could be. So poo. ;__;

So yes, another awesome chapter. Funny as usual and I hope Goku manages to get Sanzo to get that pircing. Cause everybody knows, that'd be fucking sexy. :D

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From cupnjava on April 03, 2005
Vampunk, that was MY mistake. Glares at betas. Glares at self. Thank you! Thank you! Thank you! Hopefully I grabbed it before too many people read it. Man. Not being on my own machine BITES. Yeah, that's what I am going to blame it on. LOL

Cupnjava c[~]~~~*sip*
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From ANON - Jaxx on April 03, 2005
Oooooh, you're so good!! I'm waiting for the impending threesome with mixed feelings. On one hand, I'm...anxious...about someone coming between the two love birds (Of course, I mean this in more of a literal sense than an emotional one. Ah'Nesty's love for Gonou still sets off a couple sirens for me. I have to remind myself that it is Gonou she's loves. Hakkai belongs to the Kappa). On the other, I know it's going to be a hell of chapter! This chapter about broke my heart. Gojyo's so irresistable when he worries about losing Hakkai. (Hmm, what does that say about me?) I caught myself fervently thinking "No don't leave!! No good can come of that! Just look what happened last time!" And Hakkai as a dancer?? *drools while a chorus of angels strikes a chord overhead* Delicious.

I have to say that I do like Ah'Nesty very much and I love that you have brought in Hakkai/Gonou's past in such a believable way. And an entertaining and comical one at that! I loved the photo album. I loved every damned picture in it. I loved Gonou's rebellion and I loved the way each picture brought out different emotions in Hakkai. (Here's one person you don't have to worry about offending with the challenge to Catholic ideals, though I mean no offense to anyone who holds those ideals dear). Sanzo's attempted hypocrisy was priceless. "Did you enjoy the BACON with breakfast KORY?" I laughed so loud a friend who came by to use my washing machine came up from downstairs and stared at me while I tried to regain composure. (And shortly thereafter looked at me like I was a crazy person while I tried to explain). I love what you're doing with Sanzo as well and I love that he is defending Goku Logic! This is one of the only fics with a Sanzo/Goku pairing that I can enjoy. You've done a great job of maturing Goku in a convincing way. Normally I find that particular pairing a little hard to stomach, but there have been a couple of times when I've wanted to reach through the screen and smack Konzen a good one for daring to interfere.

I don't know how long I've waited for Jiroushin to take meddlesome (yet lovable) Goddess! But at the same time, she acts so very feminine that when you get down to the mechanics of her having sex...It was, (while done well, please don't get me wrong!) sort of strange to read.

Merciful Goddess above how I love this story! I wish I had been here to review the entire ride, but I've just recently stumbled across AFF. Read the first 17 chapters in a day (and part of the night) and squealed when 18 was posted. You have a beautiful gift for words, a chilling grasp of symbolism and your writing (and the story) only gets better as it goes on! I have seen you voice concern over this story dragging out. PLEASE don't think like that! It is phenominal in its entirety and I know that it will continue to be until it brings itself to an end. Your story has another devoted follower! I'm looking forward to the rest of it!
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From ANON - vampunk on April 03, 2005
Awesome new chapter!!!!! I was waiting for you to post forever!
I feel so bad for Gojyo! The poor guy. I really like the idea of the three of them doing the threesome thing to help them both out. Although admittedly, I'm not a big fan of Het. But you write that really well. I don't know what everyone's talking about, I really enjoy Ah'nesty. I enjoyed Tano, too. I guess it's because Ah'nesty reminds me of a friend of mine. She's cool, keep her. I didn't know there was a disorder like what Ah'nesty has. I always learn something new when I read your fic. It gives her a lot of depth.
I was a little disappointed that Sanzo didn't get much screen time, but hey, I'll get over it. If you can figure out how to get Sanzo to get his dick periced, you're more imaginative than me. I love how you put things like that in this. I'm a BodMod person myself and it's really refreshing to see it used more. It's great to read a fic by such an openminded and informed person.
That note to Goku was intriging. Why is he worried about people hearing him? Hmmm...very interesting.
I have question: Hakkai called Sanzo 'Sanzo' right in front of Ah'nesty. Did you do that on purpose or was it a slip? 'Cause I thought it was a little odd she didn't notice.
I'm glad you do original stuff! Be assured I will definitely make mass metaphorical sacrifices to the Powers That Be that you get published. I'm trying for that myself. It's a pain in the ass considering the subject matter I tend to write and the almost frightening amount of close minded people there are in the world. Don't give up!
Great work. I'm really enjoying this fic!
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