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Reviews for Relax and Hang On -- Again

By : cupnjava

From ANON - Shadowfox13 on December 05, 2004
Hehe, I forgot to ask, what with Goku more...er...active with Sanzo, there isn't any plan for Hakkai, Gojyo and Sanzo doing a repeat of their past life (i.e. the bath scene), is there? Hm, and I do hope hakkai and gojyo mend things between them. Does hakkai ever find out about how his name triggers gojyo and do they work on that? Anyway, I really really really would like to read more. :)
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From ANON - Shadowfox13 on December 02, 2004
Wow, this is getting interesting, I really want to see what comes next in the up coming chapters. *LOL* And I'm wondering if, the thing with Sanzo will eventually get resolved too. And if the healing between Gojyo and Hakkai will come soon. Does Natku ever wake? Does Goku's memories ever become unsealed and does he ever become whole? And something fishy is still happening in the heavens, withouth the four there, how in the world does it get resolved? Well, that and the journey itself. :)

Anyway I hope you write more soon.
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From ANON - addictedtomarbles on November 28, 2004
oooh ooh addendum, addition to the previous review ... the irony of HGTG ... brilliant book, I'm Press and Publicity Officer to the Douglas Adams society as well as a founding member and secretary of anime society. You made me adore this fanfiction a whole lot more now. I fall at you feet oh quill-weaving mistress of the papers
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From ANON - addictedtomarbles on November 28, 2004
Oh its so goooooood. I love it to bits and it was capped with a deliciously naughty yet sublimely sexy threesome - in a bathhouse nonetheless. I liked the little details and how Tenpou always gravitated back to his books. I was nodding all the way thourgh Tenpou's tidying; when you have a situation you can't control or fix, then you immediately change to something that you can control that you'd never do usually. For me its cleaning out my drawers: "I may not be able to do this but at least I have tidied out my drawers". Naughty Konzen, naughtier Kenren and poor harried Tenpou, he's one of my all-time favourite eccentrics. I wanna predict the same thing happening in the next few chapters because threesomes are always good but I like my 58 couple though. Oooh decisions decisions. You're writing is still of such high quality though, it's beautifully long but at the same time not endlessly winding, it has a purpose and isn't long winded. Oh ... and I adored "Tenpou Detail" it had me smiling because Our Tenpou likes to think of himself as cool calm collected and dignified but at times he can be more of a twisted innocent than Goku ever could be. Keep going keep going and I still like the e-mails because I have been reading them at work ah ... the joys of procrastination. I can't wait for the next installment I really can't; will choco-nut-fudgy brownies with marshmallow topping tempt you?
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From ANON - CloeyKujaku on November 28, 2004
God, I wait so long for these chapters! One week feels like an eternity for me. But, I love them so much! It's like waiting for the manga or DVDs to come out, but better, because there is LEMON!

You never cease to surprise me, deary! Seeing Konzen pop up out of nowhere in the lemon scene was a huge shock for me. I wasn't expecting it AT ALL. And now I'm a fan of the KenrenxTenpouxKonzen triangle. (Sniff.) See what you do to me?! But God, you never cease to make me happy. Your lemons are the best, yum, yum! It's so awesome that you can be humorous, dark, adventurous, angsty, and sexy in this fic and not miss a beat. HOW DO YOU DO IT?! (Shakes.)

As a strong Cupnjava fan, I shall continue to read this fiction and review until I die! ..I DON'T WANT THIS FICTION TO END! (Sobs.) Continue it forever so I have something to look forward to!

LMAO. The bit with you and Kanzeon Bosatsu cracked me up. I love it! ..Know what, I just love everything about this fiction.

Lovelovelovelovelove.

I shall list my loves of this fic:

1. The cute Gaiden Goku. (Awwww, he ate lunch like, FIFTY FUCKING TIMES. XD)
2. The sexy ICness of the characters. (Kenren's an ass. I love him.)
3. How damn well you describe the characters. (I wanted to grope Konzen throughout thise whole chapter.)
4. Lemons. Lemons. And more Lemons. (Need I say more?)
5. Pairings. (FAVORITE PAIRINGS OF ALL TIMES IN THIS FIC! ..'Sides KouxSanzo ain't in here. NOT IMPORTANT, THOUGH!)
6. Plot. (Face it, the plot sticks to the anime. It roxxors my soxxors.)
7. Word choice. (God DAMN are you descriptive!)
8. The damn author. (I love you~.)

So, you damn well earned your title as best fanfiction authoress of all time. Keep writing, and I'll keep reviewing! Keep writing, and I won't come to your house, kidnapp you, and force you to write for me and me alone! :D

Until next time, this is Clojaku, signing off with this last threat--I MEAN loveable comment:

Continue.
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From ANON - Flamingolo on November 22, 2004
Wow. That was outstanding! One word came to mind when I read this chappy: heavy. What a weighty atmosphere you created with this one, especially interspersing the butterfly lines...lovely, lovely job. I had too many favorite parts to even begin listing! Once again, you've managed to be dark and depressing, yet 'wickedly funny' all at once. That line about someone needing to kill a butterfly had me chuckling and wincing at the same time; as well as the commentary between Gojyo and Kenren. I nearly fell over at Sanzo's thoughts on Hakkai...but, seriously, they really do just need to fuck and get it over with ^_^ So do Sanzo and Gojyo. Yes, yes, one gigantic, smutty orgy for everyone *throws confetti*. I have to say that this smut-free chappy was one of my favorites so far; as I mentioned before, the atmosphere you managed to create knocked me on my ass! I didn't think it was too depressing at all, but I'm looking forward to some kind of reconciliation *bats eyelashes at you*. Keep up the excellent work, I'll be eagerly awaiting more!
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From ANON - CloeyKujaku on November 15, 2004
Hurray! Another chapter!

..I wonder if it's healthy that I check back every day to see if their is a new chapter. In the name in all that is fandom, I believe so! (Dedicated to this fiction, dammit!)

Yet again, I love the side conversations Kenren and Gojyo have. I really wanted to throw a rock at the damn kappa through out the chapter. He needed to be bitch slapped, and hard. But then again, I really can't blame him. I'd be the same way if I had to go through the same things that Gojyo had to. So, I hated him and loved him in this chapter. That makes no sense, but whatever.

And Sanzo, dear Sanzo, was a hott bastard as usual. I loved seeing him smack Goku with the fan. Giggu~, best scene ever. ^_^ SanzoxGoku is so cute.

I feel sorry for Hakkai. I honestly wasn't expecting him to remove his limiters. That was an unexpected and truly delightful twist in the chapter. (Blows kisses at.)

And the whole butterfly thing, truly worked. And the monkey! Giggu, spiffy. Love your story so damn much, you shall always be in my thoughts!

YEA! GAIDEN CHAPTER! Not too many Gaiden fics out there. Such a shame, really. That's a good series in Saiyuki. I'll keep reviewing if you keep writing~! ^_~

-Clojaku

P.S. I won't chop off your hands if you be a good girl!
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From ANON - addictedtomarbles on November 15, 2004
Konichiwa! I'm glad you e-mailed this to me, please keep doing so, so I read it in my lunchbreaks! :) I'm following this avidly and this installment just slaked my thirst but still I wanna know what happens next, I want my favourite twosome back together! but I know it isn't as easy as all that. Damn me and my angst-liking preferences. I liked the way you had Hakkai suffering to save Gojyo and that it's not a case of glowing-hands-over-body-voila-no-more-injuries which seems to be a familiar plot device in some fics. I also liked Gojyo determined not to become the monster who uses sex and sexual violence as a weapon (harkening back to experiences with his mother and how she slept with Jien and hit him perhaps). The hint of Sanzo possibly falling as well; more complications for Hakkai maybe? It left me curious to know how deep the damage to Gojyo is and it was an evil cliffhanger to keep me skipping on. I'm looking forwards to the Gaiden chapter but don't keep us in suspense for our other two I beg you. Also I read this a second time whilst listening to X-Japan's Silent Jealousy and Scars, inbetween which was Green Bird from Cowboy Bebop, and it made the writing stand out as starkly as blood on snow. I'm hanging on desperately for the next installment and will sweet homemade sticky rice balls or warm gingerbread men tempt you???
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From ShowndraRidge on November 11, 2004
That last chapter made me think of something, and reminded me of something. I don't know if you've read 'Test Tubes, Dragon Spawn and Demi-Gods 2' but Goyjo's tourture is like what Sam has to go through in the last chapter. (don't worry it's not close enought to be considered plagerism) it just remended me of TTDSDG.

Thank you for the update, and not ending the story there. I can't wait till the next one. This story is just so well written, and don't worry about the bunny part, I think everyone scares themselves at points when they write.
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From ANON - Sorchafyre on November 07, 2004
I thought you had a good balance in this chapter. From the warnings, I was afraid of some Auswitch style torture, but what you chose to use was... traditional? Can one use the term 'tasteful torture' without sounding like a complete wacko? You conveyed the depth of the horror, without getting too graphic or outre, as I said a nice balance on the correct side of the line, at least for me.

Gojyo's fear-based reaction to Hakkai's overture was nicely realistic, as was their individual thoughts leading up to it. The whole bar scene was wonderful, especially the looking up half-expecting it to be Hakkai every time someone walked in the door. You were incredibly accurate conveying his mental state, convincing himself he was angry, but secretly wishing to be rescued. Nicely written.

I must admit, I didn't get why Gojyo was trying to connect Hakkai with his pain, it was obvious to me where it was going to end up. It wasn't until I got to the 'safe harbor' line that I had an inkling of what he was attempting to do. That was confusing, even though Kneren 'understood' I would have been happier had it been spelled out a bit more. I knew a few lines in that he was going to have that automatic association between Hakkai and pain/fear, but I like the sentence you used "an inverse of Hakkai's association, although thankfully as ias intense" or something like that, I forgot to write it down before I started this review. That was nice phrasing.

I've very much enjoyed this story, and look forward to seeing where you're going with it.
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From ANON - CloeyKujaku on November 05, 2004
I say we kill that damn Flaxen bitch! -Readys pitchfork and torch.- Ahahaha.

Yea Kougaiji! I hope Gojyo will forgive Hakkai! I was gaping throughout the whole chapter. And the little conversation between Kenren and Gojyo made me laugh my ass off. "Blablabla" "Yep." "Blablabla" "Yep." XD I love the general! He's such a little ass. But I really hate bimbo blonde lady. -Sniff.- Poor Gojyo-San. Yaone shall save him!

And the appearence of Nii! Yeaaaa! Nii is awesome! And Bunny!

Ah, only you can portray the Saiyuki boys so well in a fanfiction with yaoi and make it not UNBELIEVABLY OOC. If you ever stop writing this fiction, I will take it upon myself to hunt you down and force you to write. ^nd jnd just as a joke, use the tactics Flaxen used! Giggu~.

But you better write more, or else you'll have a pissy fan knocking at your door! ^_~

-Lovebites.- UPDATE SOON!

-Clojaku
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From ANON - shinigami2278 on October 24, 2004
For some reason this chapter moved me, and I'm a big Gojyo fan, so what does that say about me. I figured I would respond to this chapter since you seemed to be really worried about it. It was good, most authors stay away from torture, for the reasons you stated. Sometimes it just needs to be written, and then to draw back on the Pavlov theory again was a nice touch. To write the emotions, inner thoughts and to keep the action going is hard to do. I'm really liking this story so far. The cliffhangers keep me comming back for more. Please update when you get the chance. I only wish, if I ever dabble into fanfiction, that I can do it as good as you.

Shinigami2278
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From ANON - addictedtomarbles on October 24, 2004
Ack, I am a sick person. I found that chapter gripping and you were right about the car crash thiI reI read it at work again on the e-mail and it gripped and made lots of spelling mistakes in my documents. It was graphic but you gave lots of warnings and it had me thinking about it as I trip-trapped to the coffee machine to calm down. It pushes the line just enoguh but makes the wounds healable, I think death and dismemberment is indeed my line. However it has one negative effect, I who am usually quite patient am now begging you to update, it's so sad. I want healing and Hakkai healing at that. Please please please. I know you're busy but think of our redhead suffering! It's made me hop skip and jump for the next installment. I have chocolate sugar cookies in my bag (new batch, orange and cinnamon) and can get some to you in less than a week. Pretty please
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From ANON - Shinigami_senpai on October 24, 2004
Hey, since we're sharing TMI on a personal level...I own a copy of Soty of O! Love it! Excellent chap. I was so excited to see a new chapeter posted I've stayed up way past my bed time to read. Thank you thank you thank you. I too read at work. How else will I ever stay "on task"? Hope you're getting settled after the Big Move. Thanks for the great story and keep up the good work.
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From Maetel on October 22, 2004
Oh dear god... I almost started crying for poor Gojyo while reading that chapter. (Sign #1 that you are too into an anime series: You cry when the chtersters are tortured in fanfics.) As for the hardest part to write being the bunny part, I think that has to be because honestly, people lose themselves when writing violence because they disconnect themselves. a p a person has to start thinking of what to say a wri writing violence makes the writer think back to just how they wrote the scene. Humans like to think that they are above violence, and when they get the chance to be violent, they look back and can't believe the horror.
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