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Reviews for The Unexpected

By : WildOtaku
  • From lovemeplease on September 03, 2007
    Please keep going!
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  • From ANON - meikouhaikitsune(nsi) on December 07, 2005
    that was really really good. It flowed pretty well and i have never seen that story line before great job update soon later.
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  • From ANON - DrkDreamer on August 19, 2005
    You do realize this puppy would have peed a dozen times and pooped half a dozen by now? [grin]

    (Or has Daryl been at work unseen??)

    Hope you continue this.

    FWIW - I like your story AND Kira's...
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  • From ANON - Lady Mashala on June 12, 2005
    MORE!!! This is sooooo good!!! I want to rad more!
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  • From ANON - Sephykoi on October 10, 2004
    Heheee..This is actually really cute XDD

    Sure, it needs editing, and from what I read in Kira's review, it's only your first draft. Here's a thought though, just to make it interesting: Add a bit more descriptions and such. Makes a fic a happy fic ^__^

    But yea, I wanna know what happens next ^_________________^ *giggle*

    ~Sephykoi
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  • From KagetsuAsame on September 12, 2004
    Love it. You have to go on, have to write more. Drop me a line when you do, I look forward to reading it.
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  • From ANON - lyn on September 04, 2004
    I think you might have a good story, but your style is confusing and quickly bores the reader. Try to use a little more mix of discriping and actuall diolog.
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  • From ANON - morgiana on July 29, 2004
    I dodn't mean insulting, Kira (I'm sure you aren't one of these people who are totally unable to bear with little critical voice, ya?). Forgive me if that sounded like that. I just think that a man should always try to make his works BETTER, no matter how GOOD they already are. And sorry Nova, this is Your place in net, I didn't mean to bring any disscussion here. This is end of it, from my side.
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  • From yukiuke on July 29, 2004
    Morgiana...thanks for insulting both Nova and me by suggesting we don't know what *good* Ai no Kusabi fics look like. I've read Wasteland and Cup and while they're good, I certainly think I can hold my own. At any rate, I'll leave that up to my readers. *bristles, hurt* P.S. You're the first person ever to insult my work.
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  • From ANON - morgiana on July 29, 2004
    Well, I love that little dose of almost-humor in this story. you didn't put there jokes, but this humour is in your style of writing. And it's great. Only one thing is wrong - the story looks as if it was incompleted. (but who cares? ^-^)

    And BTW (now I'm talking to EVERYONE visiting or publishing ai no kusabi fics here) if you want to see how *good* ai no kusab fic look like, you sholud read Wasteland or Cup of Desire (both at http://www.geocities.com/dbrrk/ai.html). None of us (authors) is HALF that good (sorry, Nova, Sorry, Kira -_-").

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  • From yukiuke on July 26, 2004
    This story will appeal to readers who enjoy animals. I can envision some very amusing scenarios. You need to continue now and develop the plot, and you might also consider editing to make things flow be (I (I realize this is your first draft). This will help you find your "voice" for the next chapters. Do you know what I mean by voice? It's great to see another writer tackling Ai no Kusabi! Hope to see more soon! Congrats--you've done the hardest part--started writing! Keep it up!
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