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By : Capitalist

From ANON - Anon on October 10, 2007
This made me cry, like a true heartfelt cry. That was just so painful! This is by far one of the most beautifully written fanfics I have EVER read. Well done.
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From ANON - Fay Li on October 10, 2007
WOW!! That was sooooo good. I'm really happy that noting hapened to Li. I hope that Toya gets whats coming to him. Poor Yue. I love that he matured more than Toya at the end. Cannot wait for the next chapture.

There was nothing that I thought needed improvemnt or expanding. I really think that Yue watching sakura and Li worked out nice and with the tie in at the end. CIAO!
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From Ayana on October 09, 2007
O.O OH MY GOD! CONTINUE!!!! I have to see if anything more happens between them?
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From priya on October 09, 2007
TOUYA!!!! that git that idiot that moronic stupid head!!!!! gha!!!!!.... don't worry capitalist.... ur still dearly loved.... I'm just too pissed off over that mule headed touya to be pissed over any one else.... HOW THE HELL COULD HE DO THAT!!?? poor sakura... poor li.... but those two get a huge shout out for talkin some long needed sense into those two... U GO KIDS!!!!! they did not deserve this...
that evil touya was really repulsive.... gave me the chills...i'm glad that Yue came to his senses, it was really touchin.... n i nearly cried when Li n Sak have to seperate!!
i hope kero flies in chomps touya's head off..... n someone call an ambulance for Yue!!!!!

this is the 1st Sak Li pic i guess..... i just had to draw it!!!
http://chasva.deviantart.com/art/why-66878726

plz upade soon... plz plz plz!!!!!!! the tension is killin!!!
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From ANON - Hinata's Twin on October 08, 2007
Hate You!! Are you kidding me?! Never in my life have cried at a movie or reading or reading a work of literature until now. I mean damn my house is basically like that I had to fight to continue seeing my boyfriend and my family still refuses to see how in love we are. I mean it hit really close to home and it was good. Plus, Touya will be back he can't resist Yue. >D
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From uruki on October 08, 2007
Aw man, its so good that I wish there was more...and I hadn't read this updated chapter-at least I won't have to suffer another months wait for a update...ugh...neways, great job!
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From noseflute on October 07, 2007
My god.

I've been following this story for quite a while now, and, lurker that I can be, have never reviewed before. I suck, I know.

But now I can pour out my love for this story all at once, gushing over all the things that are so amazing about it. Or just gushing over how it's amazing in general. Because it is, oh, it *so* is. I feel so inarticulate just repeating that, but I don't know what to say. You really have a talent for getting across exactly what you want.

The emotions in this are so intense, sometimes, it's left me sitting there, shocked in the aftermath, overwhelmed. The characters practically come alive - when Yue hurts, I swear I can feel a phantom ache in my chest. When Touya does something so incredibly stupid but entirely him, I want to smack my head against the wall, even though I know he would do the same thing in an instant. When Ralen so much as breathes, it's like he's breathing down your neck, and you can't help but want to wash that feeling away. (The characterization of your OC's is great, too - Ralen, for example, is undeniably cruel, but he has a realistic side to him. You can believe that he's a real person, even if you don't have any pity on him. ^^) The imagery you weave so well is so powerful, and the reactions it garners from everyone who follows along is well-deserved.

And this chapter - guh. So much intensity. And why can't things just work out for them? It's so frustrating but so good - I know that when things do eventually work out in the end, however far off that may be, it'll be so much more amazing. But for now... poor Sakura, hating her brother. And poor Touya, about to realise what he's done and bear the full brunt of his sister's hate. And, oh, Yue! In the last few chapters, it seems as though he's grown so much (and he certainly isn't the selfish child he once was). And of course it couldn't be all "Toya, you're free," and "Oh, Yue, I love you and I'm staying anyway," and kissing and making up. What's happened between them in the past hasn't just gone away, and you've made a point of making this clear. Touya still bears scars (both emotionally and physically) from his time as Yue's slave. What they've been through together, and really, what they've put each other through, doesn't constitute a happily-ever-after. Not right away, anyway. And I'm glad you didn't do that. Because, really, those two have some serious issues they need to work out before things can ever be okay between them. Touya needs to do the bit of growing up that Yue's done before anything can really work itself out. (And I've gotta say, having the "children" understand all too well what Touya and Yue didn't, and rubbing it in their faces - awesome. XD)

I think I'll cut my already trailing review off here. I, along with everyone else, will be eagerly awaiting the next chapter. :)

(I also have to admire your dedication for sticking with this so long. Because, well, wow. ^^)
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From JuyJuka on October 07, 2007
Oh my god,

This story is getting greater and greater from chapter to chapter.
And it's each time worse to wait.

It's strange. Nothing about Yue's first murder.

Greatings
Juy Juka
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From ANON - pockifille on October 07, 2007
I'm without words, again. the whole 'if you love something let it go' is usually a platitude, but it's do very true with these pairings.I'm glad that yue finally realized that, but i can't help feeling sorry not for him (though that's there a little too) but for sakura, who did nothing but be herself, and still loses everything because of other people's issues. 'love' should not equal 'control'.

gorgeous story, i think i'll be sad when it's finally over, because that'll mean i won't get to read more of your wonderful writing.
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From ANON - x0mi07 on October 06, 2007
waaahhhhhhhh!!!!!.... so much angst... i'm tearing yet again! two weeks was worth the wait for this new chapter! i love it! keep it up! God bless!
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From SisterWicked on October 06, 2007
oh, you're so HORRIBLE!!!! lol, well, maybe not. UUgh, this update made my whole day, then crushed it like a tin can, all in one, you sly dog! Anyway, thank you SO much for updating, please Please write more soon...
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From ANON - Himitsu Hunter on October 05, 2007
Hate you?

Why in heavens name would i do that... I savor ever moment of emotional torment you ride these fragile hearts though. You do it so professionally it sparkles like a gem. Love, hate, selfish desire, and selflessness all in one bundle going up and down bitter hills and beautiful valleys.

Really I'm not really one for most Yoai stories... but you're fic transcends any such labeling and just shines brilliance in plot, characterization and straight out storytelling.

Happy ending or no i will treasure having read this story and be rather saddened when it ends.

(P.s, I've been reading this since it first came out, and kept on following it up till now. Keep up the excellence)

-Himitsu The Hunter
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From WTW on October 05, 2007
Noooooooooooo! DX
*cries*

This chapter and the last really brought me to tears. Heart renching presure to hard to bear. *sigh*

But I know your a good author and that there will be a very happy ending. In the next chapter I know I'd love to see Sakura smack her brother around good... grrrr... *very upset with her brother right now* Not lieing there. ^^ But your so very good at bringing out emotion while reading. Thankyou for taking your time and posting when you can. I look forwasrd to your next upcoming chapters. THANK YOU!!!
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From vix111 on October 05, 2007
Oh my...that chapter was...wow...I seriously have no words...XD
For one, it was completely balanced, enough SxS and YxT to go around. And the characters were simply perfect!
I really want Sakura crush his pride to the ground and stomp on it for a while, but people, Touya has being acting like Yue for thw entire story! You cannot hate him now for something he's been doing since the beginning!! He just wasn't doing it conciously, while Yue was. Maybe, just maybe I've just been reading too much of your stories, girl!
I love Touya, and I love what is comming for him, Sakura really will take it out on him.
Which brings me to my next point: Touya hasnt left yet, only because he didnt answer, it doesnt mean his already made his choice. Of course, he will leave, but maybe, just maybe he'll admit it to himself before leaving (he wouldnt admit it to Yue, if he were to leave).
Yue, I love your devious "little mynx" and your reaction to him. Yes, you knew he was playing you afterwards, but you won't deny that the little act didnt get you horny! I mean, kinky evil Touya, anyone???? Way better than kinky non-devious Touya. I thank you for that scene, the deviousness of it was just what I needed, maybe we'll see more of him in the future.
I bet Kero will be back soon, I think the 3 days are almost over. I can't wait to see what he'll do to Touya!!

Thanks again for the amazing chapter, Capitalist. This story has got to be the best AU I've ever read!!
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From ANON - unpretty on October 05, 2007
this, is by far, the most dramatic chapter I've ever read.

I never stopped crying while reading the entire thing

you really are good at this!

keep it up!

P.S.

I'm willing to wait even for another month for the next update.
Just make sure that it will be as good as this, if possible, even better. :)

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