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From ANON - Leu on March 15, 2010
Thank you for writing this marvelous epic, dedicating 3 years of your life to it. I spent something like 10 straight hours reading it, but oh, it was so worth it
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From ANON - Solaris on March 10, 2010
....wow! This story is certainly different to your others but no less enjoyable. You have such a gift with words that you really bring a story alive. I'm always drawn into your stories and the depth that you go into with your characters feelings and reactions is absolutely amazing. I have read all of your works and have thoroughly enjoyed all of them. No matter which pairing you choose for your characters the plots are always so enjoyable and indepth that I find myself eagerly reading the next chapter when I know I should be working or training. Can't wait to read what you have instore for your readers next. ^_^ Solaris
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From ANON - ryka-the-fallen on February 10, 2010
thank you for writing this lovely CCS novel. back when i finished reading it for the first time, i felt that i had to make some fanart for this fanfic, i've finaly got around to posting the picture i drew for your story. http://ryka-the-fallen.deviantart.com/art/PS-the-cast-153648742
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From ANON - kettish on November 26, 2009
I don't know if you still check back here on aff.net very often (or at all), but I just took the last few days to read through PS in my spare time and I must say I was absolutely blown away. I'd gotten so used to searching through AFF for something with a plot that I clicked on this story merely on a whim while exploring this side of the CSS fandom; I never expected to discover such a gem! This story was absolutely complex and epic and showcased your writing talents brilliantly. Should you ever need or want an editor I have worked with other fanfiction writers as well as a national charity (some of their curriculum) and would be happy to do it for you.

To specifics! What can I say...woof. You're one of the only writers I've found here or at ff.net that I didn't cringe every other page in the story or think to myself in frustration, "That's awkward, why didn't they just say--?" I thoroughly enjoyed Sakura and Syaoran's relationship, preferring it to Yue and Touya's, mostly because I myself like to keep things simple and have a wonderful relationship with my husband. :) I thought you very accurately portrayed the sex slave trade (thought of course things went better for Sakura than they do for most women caught up in it today, thank God!) and the feeling of helplessness and despair that riddles these women's lives. Also surprisingly genuine was how swiftly it happened; many writers depicting kidnapping drag it out, have long chases and second chances and the heroine escaping on her own. In real life that simply isn't an intelligent thing to do without 100% certainty that you can make it to safety, and you wrote it as such. Thank you.

I am frankly still amazed at this piece. It's fantastic. I'm wondering how you'll modify it in order to sell it on the market; many of the aspects of the story are heavily influenced by CCS. I believe you can make it work though-hopefully fairly easily (or not, reading that last commentary-lol, I know you were sooooooo bored after you finished writing this finally!). Again, let me know if you want help with this! :)

I could go on for days, really, but I'd start fangirl giggling and I have to get to sleep, as it's Black Friday tomorrow and I'm going shopping. I hope you had a wonderful Thanksgiving, and hope to hear from you soon.

With respect, with thanks, with slightly strained eyes and a desperate need for sunlight, peacefully yours-kettish.
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From ANON - Obsessed on November 12, 2009
I would just like to tell you, that I have read this story over and over again within so many years since i first discovered it. I read, wait some time to let my mind forget the utterly amazingness of it, then read again like a fresh new book. I adore this story, and have kept the link to it hidden away somewhere so I can never lose it again. You are truly amazing. Love this book of yours beyond comprehension. I was lucky enough though, not to have to wait for updates, as it was finished when i discovered it. Goodness, I don't think I would have been able to survive if I did that. The words simply capture me every time. So I thank you, for giving it to this world. Truly remarkable.
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From ANON - Nunichan on October 07, 2009
OMG!!! Finally I can read the ending. I started this when it was only up to chapter 25 or so. Looonng ago. I'm not really a T/Y fan, I don't even like yaoi, but this was really good. It had me hooked by the 3 chap. I love the way you portrayed all the main characters, as I read it felt as if I where watching a movie. I was able to SEE the fic unfolding in my mind. It was most perfect! I was suspicious of your writing style, it seemed so similar to another of my favorite CCS authors. Imagine my surprise to se it was you; Peacewish. I've read all your stories in ff.net and have yet to find one dissappointing. I would love to keep reading more of your wonderful work in the future. I expect you will not dissappoint.
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From Luverofyaoi on September 10, 2009
It never gets old, i love reading this story over and over.
As i was reading another fanfic, i was searching for the right words to describe what i didn't like about it. Then as i read this again, and i read your final notes, you found the words for me, and i completely agree with them. To much meanless sex does take away from the stories plot and you become disenseitized to it. I loved the plot and the emotions in this story so much, no matter how many time i read it. :)
Always will ^^
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From ANON - PhantomAngelofMusic on June 29, 2009
Re: Chap. 39. OH MY GOD! OH MY FREAKIN GOD! I can't believe you almost did that to Sakura! And in front of Touya no less! I knew - I KNEW! The second you said, "what would hurt him the most" I knew! Oh my god, you, almost gave me a heart attack! Still trying to calm down here, I think before continuing with the next chapter I'm going to have to get up and walk it off or something. I was biting my hand to keep from screaming at the computer screen, my only thought a mental scream, "NO!" over and over and over again. I don't think any book, movie or story of any type has EVER affected me so badly! Considering AFF is evil in the extreme, and hides email adresses and if by any chance you even considered for a second dropping me a line in reply (which I would love and consider it truly the highest of honors) my info, including my email i believe, may be found at www.fanfiction.net/~angelmusic (just please for the love of all that is good and holy swear to me that you won't read any of my fanfics because they sucketh mightly.)If that doesn't work, i may also be found at phantomgirl173 @ hotmail (dot) com
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From ANON - PhantomAngelofMusic on June 29, 2009
Okay, first off, I have to say, I am not the sort that reacts strongly to a story, HOWEVER, this last section the last couple chapters, have been so wonderful, that I really couldn't help myself. When Touya and Yue started talking again, I was literally cheering. When Li proposed to Sakura oh, goodness, I couldn't have been happier. But when Li made that comment about blushing AND glowing, I swear I was literally doubled over laughing my ass off. So, kudos, congrats, snaps and everything else under the sun for you! And if I could, I'd make you a whole batch of my special tripple chocolate chip cookies (semi-sweet, milk-chocolate and white chocolate, sometimes M&M's as well) as a way of saying thanks for this awesome story.
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From ANON - Sheila Nambi on May 22, 2009
Hello!

I have just finished reading your fic, 'Pleasure Slave', and I must admit, when I first clicked on the link, I was dubious. I kept reading on though, giving it the benefit of the doubt, and to my pleasent surprise it turned out to be a fantastic story!

Beautifully written, I must say. And you managed to keep the characters....well, in character! It is a bit difficult these days to find writers with such an ability. There were a few parts to it I thought Touya was a bit too aggressive with Sakura, but given their situation, it was completely understandable.

And next- your roles for the characters in the AU fit perfectly. This is a bit off-topic, but when you first mentioned the disturbances outside the castle and such, I initially thought that it was the Clow Cards! But then I realized it couldn't be, Sakura would be playing a much larger role in their capture if that were the case.

Overall, well done, 5+++++++ stars. And, I love the artwork, as well, beautifully drawn! If only I could draw like that. *sighs*

I only hope, that sometime in the future when I post my original story, that you will by one of it's readers. Thank you for posting such a wonderful fic. *hugs and sends cookies your way*
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From ANON - absrip on April 29, 2009
When ever I finish a great story I always becomes so darn depressed for all the obvious reasons, in fantasy we would love for them to go on forever but nothing is ever truly whole without an end of some kind. I stumbled across a rec of this story and read it as an original slash/yaoi fic cause I don't know the CCS fandom/anime. This was an amazing piece of writing, such a compelling story and fascinating characters. I've read a lot of slave/master slash fics and this is one of the best I've ever read, published fics included. I was not bored for a single second throughout this jugganaut of a story and I can't begin to tell you how much I adore your writing style, everything about this story felt so alive and fresh, you even managed to make me feel sorry for Ralen at one point.*shakes head*

I truly hope you'll keep writing and thank you so so much for writing this story, it was beautiful, hot, alive and strangely addictive!*grin*

Here is where I found your story recced:
(http://animestan.7.forumer.com/viewtopic.php?t=1787&postdays=0&postorder=asc&start=0)
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From ANON - Kunsai on April 09, 2009
This was a very...interesting fic, and it took me about...oh...7+ hours to read all 50 chapters of it....but it was well worth it. BTW, I do believe that you broke the barrier of at least HP 2 or 3, not sure about 4. Anyway, I wonder if you will actually read this, but even so, I will write a full-length review on this, so that way you can understand what I truely like about it.

To be fully honest, this fiction was very, very different from what I expected. The title and summary are a little misleading. I was expecting a dark, but lemony fiction. However, it was to my amazement how much you spent on the character development and the relationships. However...I do have one question....where's Eroil? Or...does he not exist because, as you said in one of the later chapters...there are no reincarnations?

Anyway, let's start at the beginning. Sound's like a very good place to start, eh? I think that having the Kinomoto siblings being raised and living in the mountains was a very unique, if not good and interesting idea. It would help to explain Sakura's naivety when it comes to sex and anything having to do with either the male or female body. It thuroughly supprised me when I found out that you had Mr. Kinomoto(Could never remember his name) killed off. But, then again, if dear-old-dad was alive, then he would've been in the way of the entire fic, wouldn't he? The siblings would still have a reason to go home, and so Touya would've fought back harder, wouldn't he. However, I think that you foreshadowed too easily Sakura being captured. However, it was kinda funny watching Touya always being a step behind Sakura, wherever she was.

Tomoyo, Tomoyo, Tomoyo. The ever-nurtuing, every-happy person being the one to introduce Sakura into the idea of being a sex slave. Call it whatever you want, but those 'pleasure slaves' where there mostly for sex. Which is why most of the former slaves in Yue's castle were bitter about being made to do servant's work... but again...I digress. Tomoyo, in my opinion, really was the right person to chose to help her, regardless of her personality in the show. But then again, she was always devoted to Sakura in the show.

The part that you had me confused and shocked at the beginning, was that Sayoran bought Sakura, but he was not her master. Her master was Yue, but that was only revealed after she got to the castle. When I realised that it was Sayoran who bought her, I was elated to think that he was going to be her lord and master. I was disappointed when her master was Yue, until you got to the part where Touya comes to try and save her...try being the operative word. The rescue scene was interesting, and I always thought that was a snake-in-the-grass, especially after he tried taking credit for finding Touya and Sakura. I don't remember that name, but I suppose that some of your characters could be OCs, espcially some of the other/former pleasure slaves, the merchants, and some of the guards.

I'm trying to keep everything at an even place and not go out of chronological order, but it's hard...
I think that you portrayed Li very well, and you did a good job at keeping his personality the same, although there is a hint of his and Sakura's Tsubasa selves towards the middle/end. But, then again, that's what happens when you're in love.

I think you took Yue's and Touya's relationship very far in this fic....was this supposed to be centered around them or something? I'm half-way between joking and truely wondering...Anyway...I was disgusted with the way that you broke Touya. I mean...using Sakura as bait?!?!?!?! I thought that he would never recover...However, I am also happy that you kept Sakura in the clear...although it would've been interesting for Sakura and Sayoran's affair....there could be nothing done to prove that they did anything wrong....I wonder if she truely kept if for marriage...or if they did it when met up with them at Sayoran's home.

On another note, I applaud much for your many interesting quotes and phrases, as well as the way in which you chose your words. You neither needlessly described everything in deatail, nor did you ignore to explain how some of the more important objects look. I truely liked your quote that Yue said, although I can't find it right now, on how, maybe the young truely do realise some of the more important things in life, and the adults are just trying to inhibit them from knowing more/understanding them by being blind to what they really mean. It wasn't those exact words, of course, but that was the jist of it.

Know I know I'm being random, but, to tell you the truth, I hated your entire blackmail chapter...up until the point that you (Finally) killed off Ralen...that man...not...fiend...truely deserved it... no...actually...he deserved more than that...he deserved infitie pain for all the pain that he caused other people. He truely was a snake in the grass.

I think it was interesting to have Melin be the dance-instructor...I don't remember her dancing in the show, but I'm glad you kept the kung-fu aspect of the Li family in both Melin and Sayoran. His teachings sure did help Sakura out when Onii-chan was trying to drag her back with her...although she made a huge point to him...he was giving up what he wanted all of these years...although...I wonder...does he still call Yue 'Master' after he released him?

Are you sure you are a shrink or a psyche(not as in a psychic)? You have a very, and I mean, veeeeeerrryyyy deep understanding of the human mind. After all, you wrote a fiction that includes a fair bit of psycologial torture and training....Although I thought that Yue was going to stay broken, like a mindless, souless slave, after Yue broke him in...although I like the idea of Yue truely being like the Moon, needing to rely on others just to live...needing that physical attention.

Now I'm just going everywhere...but here's a really good question. What the hell is the time period? Is it..medieval times, modern-day in a strange, quiet area untouched by true war(Meaning, stuff like WWI, WWII, Cold war, etc.) I would almost guess it's more of a Rennaisance(If this is the wrong spelling...then I can't spell one of my favorite words) period piece...Gunpowder is rare, most weapons would be midieval-ish, and the thought of having slaves like what Sakura and Tomoyo are wouldn't be out of the question for the wealthy...
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BTW: Was Relan reeeeallllly going to rape her with intercourse, knowing that once he did, he'd be a dead man anyways? Not that i care...I'm just glad that he's dead.

Overall, I thought that this was a really nice, and interesting, work, and I look forward to reading your stuff again, especially if you get to publishing anything in books instead of on the web.

Over and out,
Kuronosa Kunsai(Although, from my e-mail, you can thell that's not my real name...)
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From ANON - kiralv a.k.a. klv on March 27, 2009
This is the most professionally written fic I can remember having ever read. I was hooked the instant I picked it up (as much as anyone can "pick something up" electronically), and read it in nearly all of my small spare time, taking about 4 busy weekdays to devour. You have the mind of a novelist, and if you ever write a professional novel, the world will be a better place. Thank you for that delicious 50 course meal!!
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From katiakitty on February 19, 2009
WOW

I just took two days to read this, and by two days I mean from 10am to 4am both days.

Your amount of awesome cannot be expressed in any way, it is too much. I love love love Yue and was rather despairing of being able to find a fic that would have decent sex in it while still capturing his personality. And speaking of personality - how do you do that? Seriously, everyone is so in character, CLAMP might have written this (don't we all ~wish~ they would
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From ANON - Luthien on January 29, 2009
Oh my freaking gosh, you are amazing! I absolutely LOVED this story!!! I don�t think that I can give it enough praise for your incredible talent� I couldn�t stop reading and rereading the whole thing. And, being the avid reader that I am, that is saying a lot. I guess all that is left for me to say is�
Arigatou gozaimasu.
Thank you very much.
Luthien

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