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From vix111 on August 12, 2007
Ha! I beat you review script!! It cut down my review again, but I was smart and copied it! in your face awful script!! actually...I think he hates my emoticons...:O

I've been late to review your chapters lately XD
Where to start...?
Kero and Ralen...Yes, thank you for the bullying! I love to see that guy getting bullied about, he is just too mean to Sakura.
Kero and Touya...kero does like playing the harbinger, right? Their conversation was great, I love it when authors make Kero actually smart (too many dumb him down) The look on Touya's face told him everything he needed to know about their relationship! Yay for Kero and his secrets! XD
Meilin and Tomoyo...I was actually wondering last week when would they be seen together. It was a great moment for them, and oportune for the "talk" Now Sakura is thinking dirty thoughts!! LMAO! I imagine Syaoran blushing all the way through, either way she decides (although she probably would go for the hand for starters)
aaaaandddd....
Finally, Yue and Touya...They are soo cute together, when they are not being all master/slave. The end, the dream said...so the dreams will end, meaning they served their purpose. Yue has realized whatever his subonscience wanted him to, which makes me think he is going to crack first! I like saying that word, crack...crack...
Touya's psychic powers are developing and that makes me wary though...he is just too worried about Yue to be normal. And Yue should know better than to not pay attention to what Touya feels. I gotta say I love transitional chapters, they develop the story much more than all the important ones XD
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From ANON - Serrandipity on August 12, 2007
-Squeals- Yet another wondrous chapter~ Thank you so much! X3 Anyways, to the rant on this chapter.. Grr! I hate Sakura! Well, not 'her', just the fact that she's so dang.. Happy and lucky! I mean, Touya, I'm sure, is not exactly happy, though we all know he's head over heels for Yue, however much he denies it! And here's Sakura prancing in daisies. -Pif- Plus, I'm beginning to think that she's enjoying her stay.. >.> I 'was' thoroughly convinced that no one can enjoy being kept in the same castle as Ralen, but now, however late this thought may be. XP

I must admit, I thought for sure when you mentioned 'second base' that they were actually er.. Going to go all the way. But I'm not disappointed that they won't, though I am a tad sorry for Li. Poor poor boy~ I'm wondering if Sakura, the innocent little thing XD, would actually er.. Take Meilin's advice.. I think she would be thoroughly embarrassed (who wouldn't on the first time?) but do it anyway, ignoring Li's probable protests. She can be stubborn when she wants to, I noticed.

On a last quick note before I depart, I liked the conversation between Kero and Touya the best, especially the moon and sun comparison. Keep up the good work and I'll be checking everyday for the update! No rush, though.. >.>; I know you're rather reliable on updates, but I like checking once a day for my favorite stories no matter the regular day. ^-^
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From ANON - Lana on August 11, 2007
I love this fic so much! I'm so happy I can finally read it directly off this site before I have to go back to school (where the have a blocker to keep me away from AFF). Anyway, excellent as always, I look forward to the next chapter
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From Scorpinac on August 11, 2007
Ah, Ralen shivering in terror on the floor, so nice... And Keroberos and Meilin are, as usual, hysterical, though the conversation between Kero and Touya was interesting. And poor shy, timid Sakura, she's so cute when she's blushing! Not done before the third birthday? No, not really surprised. In fact, does it have to end at all?! Just kidding... Well, it'll definitely be interesting to see what's next, and was that actually Clow who's been tormenting poor Yue's dreams?!?! Whoa, the evil blighter... Well, looking forward, as always, to next chapter! Laters!
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From ANON - Hinata's Twin on August 10, 2007
OMG!!! When I started reading you had 39 chapters and now I've caught up with the most compelling fanfic I've ever read. Really I think Touya has an idea about his sister and the 'brat'.
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From midnightfox on August 10, 2007
*laughs* Fantastico!!! ^_~ oh naughty Li *hits with w/ newspaper* So a new beginning/end is arising *thinks* can't wait to figure it out.
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From ANON - ayachan on August 10, 2007
ohhh, holy shit. Yue's going to fucking freak out over that last dream. EXCELLENT! We haven't had a visit from "dream Touya" in a while though. I loved the concept of the sun and the moon! Wow, that was fantastic! And it was nice to see Ralen gone for a few day.. whew, thank god! I'm glad that Sakura's so happy ^^ But that sentence about breaking the tradition and reading to new loved ones just broke my heart. It's going to be hard for Touya to let Sakura go. Haha, I'll stop mad rambling now :) Can't wait for the next chapter! Good luck on it and keep up the good work!
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From MistressMizu on August 10, 2007
This was such a lighter, happier chapter than we've seen in awhile. I rather enjoyed it; also hearing the things Kero told Touya, it somehow didn't surprise me at all. Yue really is a very dependent creature, as his dream shows. It looks like he's finally realized it for himself. I just wish that one of them would admit their feels to the other sometime soon. But seeing as there is still so much of the story left I get the feeling it isn't going to happen.

It was nice seeing Meilin and Tomoyo together for once! It really reminded me of the anime, seeing them all together and Syaoran's quiet uncomfort. But of course the things the three of them talked about--it's just like some teenage sleepover, because that's what best friends talk about sometimes. Certainly nothing the 10 year old Sakura from the anime (or manga) would talk about. It was so cute, too!! She's so modest, it's just unbelievably cute. Especially at the mention of Syaoran never getting to know her bed. XD I giggled when I read that.

Can't wait to read the next chapter! It's hard to say what will happen next, when you end in a dream like that. Which reminds me... Did Touya have some sort of sense as to what the Void was thinking, or was that a dream telling him what it was thinking? Oh-ho... If the Void thinks that it smells like Yue, then it must know that he spends a lot of time with Yue, thus he is something important to Yue--something that in taking would help in its defeating Yue. >_> Oh man, that was long winded. Okay, okay! This is the end of the review. I LOVED IT!
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From ANON - ayachan on August 08, 2007
Haha, oh man, I don't know where to review anymore! I guess both is ok though. But great chapter!!! Gah, I'm scared for Syaoran if he is the one that makes Sakura's collar change. Ralen getting pummelled to death would make me cheer, but Syaoran.. oh man, that's going to be interesting. Can't wait for the next chapter!
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From midnightfox on August 06, 2007
Jeeze you are literally killing me with this suspense. I was freaking out at that last part like this: O0O lol XD can't wait for more such a marvelous job you've done.
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From vix111 on August 06, 2007
is it just me, or your reviews are acting screwy? they seem to be disordered O_O and this thing just cut down my review T_T
lets see what was cut down...
well, I said something about Syaoran and the deal between Yue and Touya. Yes, Yue cannot give him Sakura because the deal with Touya, that's what Syaoran cant remember. Oh, and I also said I re-read the whole thing. In retrospect, I don't know why in chapter 37 I thought Yue was talking to somebody that wasnt Touya, probably because I forgot about Yue's dreams. A very nice touch having the dreamscapes in the same dimension, gives the feeling that they'll walk right into each other's dreams at any moment (O_O dreamseers) Will clow bother Touya again soon, or will he give the poor boy some time to rest that awful series of unfortunate events (XD no pun intended)
I hope you develop Touya's powers more than the canon. What good is for him to see things, when he can do nothing else? I was just noticing that now Sakura can fight, and that will fit in nicely once she starts using magic. I'll join the group, finally some use for that mail; And I have not forgotten the promised art, its just that you write faster than I can finish it (which is very good indeed ^_^) and college is being a bitch. See you t the group ^_^
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From vix111 on August 06, 2007
Nice peaceful chapter ^_^
I got to review until today, busy as hell on the weekend.
Kero's got the brother thing down, he feels sometimes like the older one (and I like to think of him as the older one too XD) and he never did like Touya in canon very much. You are ebil, you said he was getting past second base and we all assumed they were gonna do it. But they didnt. EBIL!
I hope Kero stays for a while, we need a kero/ralen confrontation already!!
So much for locking the door at nights
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From MistressMizu on August 04, 2007
Oh my! I had been checking back every day for an update, but I didn't last night; I guess I should have. XD Ohhh Syaoran was so close, but good boy! I was worried if he'd really done something they would be in so much trouble... Touya would probably be the most pissed though. Haha! When I read Yue asking what could she possibly do, I wanted to say something like "Wouldn't you like to know?" XD Oh, I loved this chapter. Two people have pointed out that Yue loves Touya. Both of them denied it though... The poor things. I hope that one of them just confesses already. It's about damn time. Anyhow, I wonder about that feeling Syaoran has...about the three of them--Yue, Touya, and Sakura. The three of them are awfully cute together though. As though it's a love triangle XD except neither of them will touch Sakura in that way. Like she's something precious to them both now. Hmmm. Anyway, I'm very grateful for Kero's character, except I don't like him not liking Touya. Then again they never got along in the anime/manga either so it would make sense to give them a reason to not like each other here. (Or maybe it was just that Touya was always suspicious of Kero in the anime...)

Anyhow, I cannot wait until the next chapter!! I'm so glad you made a community, too! I hope that we have some fun there. Of course with some editing, I would be lovely to get this published. It would be a lot of hard work though; I think you should go for it and try your hardest!
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From Scorpinac on August 04, 2007
So Yue has a Cellural crystal, huh. Nice. Loved Kero chewing him out and Ralen trying not to blow when he had to give Sakura her own room, classic. And I also like Syaoran bribing Kero with tarts, that was good. Oh, yes, a very enjoyable chapter, especially the final scene, hehhehheh. At least he's told Sakura why he didn't ask when he had the chance, though it'll be interesting to see where this goes from here, oh yes. Can't wait for #42, even though you did lie about Syaoran actually getting to have sex with Sakura this chapter. Oh, well, in time, in time. Laters!
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From ANON - Anon on August 04, 2007
Hey. Nice, calming update. I like it. I needed a chapter that didn't make me cry. This may be my last review for a bit because I'm traveling for a while but I'll make sure to catch up later. I love your characters so much and it just struck me why today. Their personalities are not only multifacited, but also contradictory. Lots of people write colorful characters without showing how contradictory people can really be. For instance, you portray Yue in both selfless and outrageousy selfish ways. The same with Touya. The saddness Yue displays at the beginning is a beautiful contrast to his denial of love in the middle. He makes no connection between the intensity of his reactions and his feelings. (Although, I do admit its well past the point where I just want to slug them both. No one but a child obsesses over a toy and even a child only obsesses over a loved toy. My nephews break their toys all the time, much to my sisters dismay, and it really doesn't phase them a bit unless its that 'special' toy.)

This story is really becoming one about deciet. Touya's keeping the severity of his abuse from his sister and is lying to himself about his feelings, Sakura is lying to Touya about Li, Li is lying to Sakura about the continuatioon of the plan to buy her, Yue is so far into self-denial, he could write THE definitive book on it and do I even have to mention your original characters. Kero seems to shoot from the hip so thats one honest person. The whole thing is turning very Shakesphere. I don't know if its a comedy of errors like Much Ado About Nothing or a tragedy full of misunderstandings like Othello, but it has all the earmarks of classic storytelling.

Editting the story into an original novel sounds fun. I wish you the best of luck. I'm sure you'll do fine. The story has to already be approaching novella length if not beyond.

I'll be sure to join the yahoo group when I return from New York. As always, great work.
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