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By : Capitalist

From ANON - Niko on July 24, 2007
I must say, I came looking for some quick well written sex, and instead found a quite intriguing story. I've always loved the touya*yue pairing.

I read all 20 chapters at once, from midnight to almost 4 AM. I hope you update this often, because I'll be looking to see what happens!
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From ANON - Inulover on July 23, 2007
WOW what a sad chapture. I would have throught that Yue would have more compassion, but I trust that you know what you are doing with the story. I think that I was about to cry. Well can't wait to see what is going to happen in the next chapture. Till next time!! Love the story lot and this is still my fav story of all time!!!!

-Inulover16
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From ANON - Reno on July 23, 2007
This story is the only reason I come to this website. I check it a lot, and every time a new chapter appears I squeal with glee. Your writing style is so elegant, and you capture every detail in such lovely ways. Even the most brutal parts you manage to beautify. At the end of this chapter, though, I find myself feeling a bit broken inside, too. Touya has gone and spoiled everything! If only he'd remained well-behaved like a good boy, and listened to his heart (which told him to stay), then everything would have turned out fine.

But gosh, when Yue had Sakura on the bed, I was really nervous. I couldn't possibly imagine Li's devastation to see her collar black, seeing as he got so defensive when she and Tomoyo were fooling around. Li has gotta mellow down about everything, though. Sakura's life has been tough, and it's not going to be easy for her to be the ideal girlfriend when she's got that collar on her neck.

But something worse than the collar, I think, is Clow's necklace. It must burn Touya's skin like fire, especially now that he's got the idea in his mind that Yue abhors him and will never forgive him, and that Clow will always be first in his mind. (Which I would like to refute, since Yue has anger management issues and a stern possessiveness over his /loved/ one. Shh, I didn't say that.)

Anyway, I would love to thank you for how you inspire me with your writing and gripping storyline to try and write well, too. Emotions like this are difficult to capture in words, and I want to try and be like you and write them just as articulately. It'll be a goal for this summer, that's for sure! But you can count on me to always come back and read the adventures of Yue and Touya. Thank you so much.
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From ANON - tenshi on July 22, 2007
0_0 Two chapters!!!! OMG I can't wait!!!!! Ahh Touya finally broke, and here I thought I'd see Yue take Sakura... Ah well. Two chappies... Muahahahahah. Keep up the great work!
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From ANON - Aya on July 22, 2007
Hey there again! Oh my god...it took him this long to submit...and What is gonna happen to Sakura? Will she ask Yue to let her live with Li? God too much suspense...*whines* Please write and I shall give you a Poem OR eve na picture for your fic. I have enjoyed it emensly..keep writing...^-^
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From FionaAlieceLenet on July 22, 2007
Well, if nothing else, I am thoroughly repulsed and astounded. I assumed that following Touya's and Sakura's escaping, something would happen but not something for the both of them together in the manner it happened. But in the end Yue got what he thinks he wanted and yes I say, thinks. I'm quite sure that after a rather short time of loveless devotion it will begin to gnaw at Yue and he will start asking for small liberties from him. Such as: saying "I love you," kissing him with "feeling," etc. Things that show real attachment and caring. He'll think that it won't matter if he orders it or not, he will get what thinks he wants.

Anyways though, the embarrassment Touya felt at seeing his sister in such a way, naked at least, was kind of weird. I'd think that, if anything, he be paying rapt attention so he could see how far Yue would go before his mind could work out what to do, but ah well. it was sort of cute though, I could imagine it rather easily and sort of half-heartedly giggle. I'm sure that sounds rather peculiar and almost deranged but oh well.

I was vastly disappointed with Li. I half wonder if he is so shallow. She was touched by another man beyond her will and he couldn't stop and yet he ranting about how she left? She is a prisoner, unlike him, so I could halfway understand though I was exceedingly bitter about it.

Speaking of being a prisoner, I pondered the theory of: since Yue can't understand freedom since he was created for the use and purpose of another unlike real humans, would Yue have tried to escape Clow had he not be created for him? I thought it was something worth mentioning at least. Because, like most anyone knows, human aren't made with predetermined destinies in mind. [I'm not religious so asserting otherwise is rather pointless in my case.] So unlike to Yue, Touya needs freedom, he was born and lived up till then bound to no one. Yue, even now, only knows servitude. Which I think is why he can't understand Touya's reasoning and needs at all. He's selfish and misguided, to be frank.

All that aside though, great story. I do so hope to see more from Sakura and Syaoran, good and bad. I sort him to see him excerpt more of his "knightly-ness" from before. It's more or less vanished to his selfish and shallow nature of the moment.

Hope to read more very soon.
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From Scorpinac on July 22, 2007
On the subject of Syaoran "working hard" next chapter before getting to be with Sakura fully in #41, the following possibilities --

One: #40 will involve some "Fastfoward" action as we dial foward quickly to get to the point when Syaoran finally has the gold he needs to buy Sakura.

Two: He starts putting in some hard over/double time to try and earn the rest quicker, feeling Yue may finally turn his attentions to Sakura fully.

Three: He goes to Meilin and asks her for a loan and/or she gives him the rest he needs as a gift(it has been stated she's a highly popular dancer and dance instructor, I'd imagine she has a fair amount of gold from her paying customers in the local bank!).

And four: possibly a mix of 2 and 3 above. Past these, the only real possibility to Syaoran even getting away with having sex with Sakura right now would be if Ralen finally just lost it and raped her outright(though then he'd have to try and frame someone else while calling her a liar, but that takes us back to how gullible Yue is, and also to whether or not Sakura would even tell, though her collar would be screaming it loud and clear for her.).

Well, that's all for me for the moment. Laters!
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From Jennieve01 on July 21, 2007
... wow ... you know I'm anticipating the next chapter far more then I anticipated harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows. In fact if this was in printed form I would gladly line up at midnight to get the first copy.

that said ... Happy birthday! May you have enough of everything in life.
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From ANON - Toby on July 21, 2007
Happy Birthday, Capitalist. Hope you have an awesome one! You got your 1000 reviews!
Loving your story as always but Touya annoyed me so much when he was rambling about missing his village. I really wanted him to give it to Yue; tell him that what they have together isn't a partnership between equals and that slavery is wrong. It doesn't matter how opulent his lifestyle, he's still a prisoner. It IS terrible to be with Yue!

Although, I actually love how selfless Touya was, what you did was much better. So, not a criticism but a testament to your writing that I care so much (having not watched CCS for many years! :p). Keep up the amazing work.
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From ANON - fairyfae on July 21, 2007
Greetings. What can I say? That was heart-breaking. I really do not want you to take this as a flame. I know this is your story and you can do whatever you want to the characters, but I couldn't help but feel that Yue was particularly selfish and cruel while a fundemental aspect of Touya's character was destroyed. Nevertheless, I do have to take my hat off to you. You are truely good at your craft. I actually cried for Touya and Sakura when Yue was punishing them. If your goal was to pull on the heartstrings of all your readers, I don't think you could possibly fail.

You may think that I will never want to read your story again since the relationship (can you even call it that when it is soooo very twisted and broken) is so distrubing to me but rarely do I get to read a writer as good as you at setting up plot in advance. Therefore, I will most likely return to reading each chapter carefully when you start to develop the plot you've kept simmering in the background. When will Touya's powers develop and what will be the implications of that development? Where is Yue going and now that Touya is broken, will he ever find out or will he simply be forbidden from enquiring? Will the mystery that is threatening the castle ever reach its walls and give the people within them something more to do than practice swordplay in the courtyard? Is Clow really harassing Touya just to be an annoying, jealous prick or is there more to his visits? Is he trying to get more out of Touya and Yue? How can Yue ever heal from his own wounds and cowardise (fear of being hurt when loving another) if he has to take no chances with Touya because of his slavery? Will he never recognize that love which is coerced is empty? Will he never recognize that by taking away Touya's dignity, rebelliousness and pride, the being that he has now is not the Touya he was so facinated with in the beginning? It seems unfortunately that the only person that seems to change drastically is Touya. While Touya breaks, Yue fails to heal. I imagine that those elements of the plot will have to be on the back burner a little bit longer for you to deal with issues such as Touya's regresion back into chains and absolute captivity. By the by, like I said I don't want you to think of this as a flame. You are a good writer and I will come back to your story if you don't mind my slight difference in opinion. I just can't take the sadism and pain. Imagine taking joy in the breaking of a spirit you admire. The very thought horrifies me. It seems perverse if not necessarily perverted. Perhaps Yue is more human than he realizes. Perhaps it is Yue that is broken beyond repair. As they say, misery loves company.
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From ANON - Madd Hatter on July 21, 2007
I apologize for continuing to double, triple post comments, but this story is driving me mad.
I have a few other predictions, and some analyzations I've come up with about these characters.

Like I said earlier, Yue is wind and water, and Touya reminds me of fire. If you look at it on as astronomy... Yue is very emotional. His automatic love for the wild deer and affection held for it makes perfect sense. Then there's fire, and fire can be brilliant, hot, passionate, and deadly. All three elements are extremely powerful and the fire in Touya has died down now. Yue poured his water to extinguish Touya's fire.

What concerns me about this is the fact the wild deer had that same fire. Yue doesn't feel that attachments to all the woodland creatures. He won't pick up a rabbit and want to take it home. Does Yue really want Touya to be completely submissive? Because, as water and wind, he's submissive himself. That is why he loved his Clow so much. His Clow was his creator and his lover and his master. He was Clow's. Would he really want to make Touya his? Isn't that why he's gotten bored with all the other past slaves? I think Yue's going to get sick of this behavior from Touya. Yue loves Touya's strength too much.

I have a feeling Sakura is going to go to Yue again. Who knows, maybe Yue will end up in her cage again. Although, I can't see Sakura as being comfortable as last time. But, I'm sure he'll have her calm down and apologize for harming her. After all, he DID stop. She just doesn't know why. We might even see Yuki again in this one. Maybe she'll convince Yue to listen to Touya, but with Touya being so submissive - Touya might have to confide in Yuki again. Who knows? Maybe that talk with Sakura will earn herself collarless.
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From ANON - CBCC on July 21, 2007
This chapter is so sad (for a Touya fan like me)... but I still love reading it all the same...

I wish Yue would sooner or later realise that a broken Touya isn't what he wants the most... and would do something to get the 'not-a-slave' version of Touya back. Maybe it'll take Touya to do something drastic to himself (like how he got sick earlier after being locked up in Yue's room for too long) for that to happen? This is all my wishful thinking - to have Yue doing something to get Touya back the way he was and so on... [imagine how it'd be like if Yue has to force Touya to call him 'Yue' instead of 'Master'... or force Touya to say 'I'm not your slave' instead of 'I am your slave'... that'd be hilarious...]

Extremely impressed with your quick updates. It's so nice to check for updates every weekend to find a new chapter being posted. Many thanks for your hard work and please keep it up!!!
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From ANON - pratz on July 21, 2007
I read the last ten chapters in a row. very emotional to bits. your yue is cold but fragile, and I am eager to read more of this. good luck with the rest.
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From ANON - Lady M on July 21, 2007
**edit - when I said best character in the story you made up, I just wanted to clarify that I meant he was the best Capitalist created character, not the best character in the entire story. He may be one of my favorites, but even I know that hes not the best.

*** edit 2 - And about them escaping on his watch, if Ralen didn't know about the escape tunnel there is no way for him to watch it. And technically, since they escaped and went OUT of the castle... isn't that Syoarans bad?
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From ANON - Lady M on July 21, 2007
Awesome ! But kinda sad? I would think that Yue wouldnt really want Touyas spirit broken. Isnt that his favorite part about him? That Touya was always fighting him every step of the way and it was a challenge. If Touya really, genuinely breaks, doesn't that take away the "stag like" fierceness that Yue loved so much about him?

I think that (and this is just me being drunk and guessing) that Yue is going to eventually offer Touya his freedom and he isnt going to take it. And somewhere around then is when one of them cracks and tells the other he loves him.

And on another note, I absolutely LOVE Ralen. He makes the story better. With such a coward asshole as a foil to Syaoran and Touya, he just totally rocks. He is always causing drama and starting shit. Hes always there to LOVE it when someone gets kicked down. Plus he is 100% yours. You made this total dick that everyone loves to hate. He is just as much alive as Sakura, and the series is NAMED after her. You really did a fantastic job with him and I have been meaning to tell you for months. He actually does run the castle well, the slaves are always well fed, and he helps keep Yue happy by staying out of his way. I think that he makes a wonderful character in your story and he helps the plot move along nicely. Yue hired Syoaran because of something he found in him and I can only imagine that he did the same for Ralen. Would Yue really trust Clow's precious castle to someone that couldn't handle the job? Of course not. The only person to successfully break into the castle (give or take Cerberus) was Touya and he has already been established as an extraordinary boy. Either way, I absolutely love it when your bad boy wins and I love it when he loses. His motivations are always easily read, he takes what he wants, hes as deep as a thimble, hes an overweight, selfish slob. Awesome job on him. Hes definitely the best character in the story that you made up. I dont mean best like "hes a really good guy and I want the best for him," hes the best because hes never boring. Your story rocks. All hail Ralen!!

Happy birthday!
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