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By : Capitalist

From ANON - Jinki on April 03, 2007
ooooooooh how cruel, Yue wont tell Touya who Clow is!? i seriouusly think Touya needa slap some sense into him. oh wait he did lol. i thought Touya wuld pester Yue about it but he believed the lie that clow was noone. yue wuldnt talk bout noone in his sleep: clow must be special i hope touya realise tht. i hve theory tht yue goes to clow's grave at full moon cuz thts where he feels safe when he is weak. hmm i dun really like Ralen, no offense, and i know people said Yuki shuld be in the story maybe paired together with Touya later,but to me them 2 r not meant to be together! (well i do read Touya and Yuki pair with each other too. but here yue and Touya are THEEE pair) btw, OMG Sakura is sooooooo cute. i dun care she's a little silly for 16 years old she'ss adorable like in the anime. n the li obsession is to die for LOL too bad u didn't write more chapters for the time btwn Touya and Sakura in village and them 2 growing up , cuz that'd be so angsty n cute to read. i hope they visit village again cuz i wanna know what Yue wuld think of da village, and wat touya's freinds think of his new life in castle, but i like protective Touya too thou i'm not sure if he's got the concept Yue is interested in him a lot really. oh yeah it was fun to see Melin and Tomoyo too definitely. the girls are a little creepy LOL, but teasing li is quite cute~
another promising looking new CCS work piece!
i found this late nite n read it in one go, despite hw n RL... i really like it n hope it'll be even "beta" in the future (plotwise as in Yue n Touya end up together 4ever LOL) so i hope my reviews not just babble to u. ^^'''
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From ANON - Hitomi on April 03, 2007
Why are you being so mean Undisclosed?!!!!!! Sakura has a better plotline now than she did at the start!!! She is in love now. She is becoming her own person without Tori being overprotective. She is dancing, making friends, having fun, she enjoys her life now!!!!! The story was not meant to be a yuri story and Capitalst didn't drastically change the story. The yuri was only an intro for the yaoi. It was preparation for the upcomming main plotline about the pleasure slaves.
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From ANON - Undisclosed on April 03, 2007
Well, This story is very good... to a point.
When you made that declaration that 'That's it for the yuri', I immediately was turned off by the story. It is a cardinal sin in writing to change the story that drastically.
You based the introductory chapters on Tomoyo bringing Sakura out of her shell and seeing something she wanted to own herself in more ways than one.
The current chapters barely use Tomoyo except as a 'faraway person' role, and Sakura's relationship is now heterosexual, despite her first major encounters with men being incredibly poor and all her early role models being female.
I give the first half-dozen chapters 5/5. I give the yaoi plotline 4/5, since it's not perfect by any sense. I give Sakura's plotline after the introduction... 1/5
You said it yourself... The real story is not the first half-dozen chapters as far as you care...
WELL CARE ABOUT WHAT YOU WRITE MORE, OR DON'T POST IT!
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From ANON - Hitomi on April 03, 2007
Finally a Card Captors fanfiction where Yue is seme and Tori is uke!!!!!!! Thankyou for writing this!!!!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - Masuda-san on April 03, 2007
This fic is great. I was really looking for a YukixTouya, but I found this one instead.
And thank god I did. I'm looking forward to Yue beating Ralen to a pulp. Or maybe Touya. Oh wait,
maybe Sakura instead. That's impossible, but it sure is hilarious.

I hope you update soon.

-Masuda-san
Goddess of the Fries

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From ANON - karenanime123 on April 02, 2007
sorry i haven't reviewed since last September 2OO6. I luv where the story is leading and I had to tell you about it!!
i was thinking about my last review when i said that Yue might have wings and I was thinking about how Yue is gunna teach Toya how to massage. Will Toya notice anything weird when massageing Yue's back? something that hints at wings maybe.
even If I am wrong i am very much looking forward to Yue teaching this to Toya. i am eager to see how you write that :)
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From midnightfox on April 02, 2007
*claps while crying* that was such a great chapter. And dare I say Clow was mentioned? >.> ^~^ Well I can't wait for more to be revealed soon.
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From MistressMizu on March 31, 2007
But Ralen will NEVER be happy. At least, I hope he isn't.

Somehow I don't think Yue would be all that happy about Sakura and Syaoran though. Same goes for Touya... But I'm glad she's confessed to him. it was rather cute. :3 Such a good update, too! (As always.) I guess in a way, Touya has confessed to Yue, but he hasn't exactly told him he loves him. I hope that they both do soon, because it's obvious they both love each other.
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From sodapop0006 on March 30, 2007
Hello! Here I was, just a person out looking for some sweet little Li/Sakura romance (and failing to find one that I like, unfortunately), and I keep noticing this fic called Pleasure Slave. I saw that it had a lot of reviews and a high rating but the AU part made me a little leery of checking it out. Finally my curiosity got the best of me and I opened it up to read the first chapter and know for sure what it was like. And it. Was. Captivating. ^_^ Your characters are absolutely amazing and I especially love how you've done out Touya's character; there's enough sweet and rough play to keep a perfect balance and you keep up on the non-sexual scenes just as well. Oh, and for this last chapter, it was nice to see Li's jealousy and Sakura's confession, that always makes my skin tingle when it's played out well! Also, I was pretty absorbed in the story (read it straight through, gulp! ^_~ ) but I breezed through a few comments as well and the predictions look fun. For my part, even if the situation for Yue to allow Li and Sakura to pair up were ideal, I think Yue might still have some issue with it. He seems very possessive, even if he's not playing with his toys he knows they are still his. Some serious control issues, but I hope he learns that submission can be fun too! Of course, that might be tricky if he's going to Clow every month and acting in part as a pleasure slave... (I'm so excited to see what he's really doing!) ...but that's just my guess. What I'd really love to see is when Touya finds out just how Ralen actually treats Sakura and maybe even get to pummel Ralen into the ground... ^__^ He's just so fun to hate! Anyway, to sum-up, I love your fic, you're doing wonderfully, and I can't wait to see where it goes. You have one more devoted reader!
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From ANON - Anon on March 30, 2007
i like this chapta and i'm glad you made it a long chapta. its been a while since u have written a chapta so long and u did it in two weeks. thats a proof of ur talent right there. the best bit of this chapta was yue and touyas trip outside. i wonder if yue will let touya go further [and for longer] next time they are out? they were so peacefull and happy. yue has changed so much. i agree with fisshie012 that yue and touya need more angst. this chapta had angst and it was very good. so more angst in the future please.lol

there is 1 thing that confused me tho. in this chapta sakura said that touya had missed dinner the night before. but he didnt miss it. that was the dinner when touya was wondering who taught yue to massage. or have i got my days wrong? that part confused me.
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From Aureawolf on March 30, 2007
Woot! All these fast updates, so great. But everyone seems so happy in this chapter, too many good things are going on. So methinks something bad has to be coming. Hmm...Clow. Gonna be interesting to see how that fits in. ^_^ Hell, I'm still waiting for Eriol to make a random appearance. ^_~
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From ANON - bolognastealer101 on March 28, 2007
I love this fic, and have been following it forever...like since chapter 10..
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From ANON - fisshie012 on March 27, 2007
T_T...i miss the angst XXDD....
between Yue and Touya i_i...
but damn its getting better....

come on...i know you want to do something
bad with Ralen and Touya :taunts: =P
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From ANON - Anon on March 27, 2007
I am so happy your chapters are being added much more quickly :D
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From Scorpinac on March 27, 2007
Well, that was a boatload of progress! No doubt Yue will request that Touya play while Sakura dances again sometime, and at least Ralen didn't actually damage it, as Syaoran said, that would be just low! Not to mention rather pathetic. And why am I not surprised at Meilin's reaction to Syaoran's and Sakura's relationship?(Way to go, Tomoyo...) And at last the confirmation of Clow, whom I am presuming is, like his CCS counterpart, dead as a can of spam, though possibly reincarnated(Eriol-kun, anyone?). Can't wait to see what happens next at the 3/4 mark! Laters.
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