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From ANON - Faelights on October 21, 2007
I knew it! I knew it was you!!! XD (Well, actually, I started reading this right from the first chapter when you linked to it from a Peacewish account SOMEWHERE, so uh... yeah. I thought I'd been hallucinating after it changed on me. >_>; but then it did sound like your writing. Bah.)

Hehe, I'm so happy it's done and everyone is happy!!! You left us on a lot of cliffhangers =P But yay! I did wish there was a little more mention of Tomoyo and Meiling in the later chapters, since it felt like they just dropped off the map. XD But it's all good! I love rereading all the tearjerking parts. I shall reread this from start to finish, er, once I find the time to... =_=; Stupid university.
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From Jennieve01 on October 21, 2007
Congratulations on ending your story! I didn't know that bebeautiful was accepting submissions from English authors for novels. Or maybe you were intending to make pleasure slave into a manga which is very cool. But I don't think they are accepting anything but Japanese manga at the moment. I do know that if you want to make this into manga you have a few choices like yaoipress who actually specialize in original English works, Tokyopop does so to but not anything this explicit. Dramaqueen has a original English publication called Rush, but I'm not sure if they are accepting admissions. Those are all for Manga submissions though I think Yaoipress will pair writers with artists. On the Flip side if you are looking to rewrite and publish this as a book since its more of the yaoi style then Slash you might want to consider LooseID, eXtasy books, Torque press or even some even smaller presses that are starting up now. I do know the majority of the writers who I've seen jump from fanfiction to published fiction and stick to the alternative lifestyle theme usually self publish which you might consider. Of all those previously mentioned I remember Yaoipress and Loose ID both posting they were looking for submissions in the last few months. Good luck on your future endeavors! I do hope you don't take this review as an insult in anyway I just thought you wouldn't mind a little help with the publishers.

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From ANON - Himitsu The Hunter on October 21, 2007
First of all let me say, Its been a great ride and I'll miss being able to look forward to the next installation of your great work almost every week or 2. The fact that it was a Card Captor Sakura fanfic i consider to be merely incidental, you managed to go far beyond that from almost the beginning an create an original story which managed to captivate and enthrall on its own merits rather than simply riding the coat tails of its fan-fiction basis. It will be a challenge for you to transform it into an original work as you will have to build on certain points to provide them the weight of background which being a fanfic allowed them automatic fixture i grant you, but I am confident that you will easily locate and enhance them with your own visions of the history of that world...

What I'm most of all trying to say is, I think you are an excellent writer, for which you are loved and respected by us your readers. It was YOU and not the grey mist of the base material you used which drew in and captivated you this audience.

And if i ever manage to recognize your work should you publish i'll be getting me a copy. ^_^

-Himitsu The Hunter
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From Scorpinac on October 21, 2007
I thank thee for thy praise. It has been a long time, hasn't it? And to think, I came in when you were only up to chapter 5 and hadn't subjected poor Sakura-Chan to the auction yet! Of course, all this time I was waiting for just one full Sakura X Syaoran sex scene -- arguably, I have been cheated. But I'll live. Even i never did get what I originally started reading for, hehheh, I did enjoy the story all around anyway, and that sufficiently made up for it. I may even save it down within the next few days, just so I can one day re-read it from scratch at my leisure without fear of suddenly losing it for all time. At any rate, it's been fun, so take a rest, you've earned it! And having glanced at your FF.net account, I think I will take a gander at Wild Flower. (I happen to be among the Firefly/Serenity fans who got the DVD box set, watched it, and said, "We were robbed!") Well, I can't think of anything else to say, so, I guess this is....gulp...it... L...l...l...laters....
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From xPandaPopx on October 21, 2007
Bleh. It cut off my signature T-T.

" With Love from your Long-Time Lurker-san,
Melody "
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From xPandaPopx on October 21, 2007
Wow. I can't believe it's over! I guess I am what you could call one of your "lurkers," who never said a word about your writing up to this point, and I must say I feel a bit guilty now that we've reached the end. This story was actually one of the first stories that I read on this site, back in the day, and I actually almost let my n00bness prevent me from reading the rest. I didn't realize that there were buttons on the screen that said "next chapter," so I thought that, having only read the first chapter, that your story was very incomplete and I was quite frustrated that this seemingly awesome piece of writing had such a crappy ending.

But, a month or so later fortunately, I discovered those happy buttons and immediately began searching for "that one CCS story about the slave thing that seemed oh-so-promising." And now three years later (a high school graduation, a creepy-ass boyfriend who SERIOUSLY believed in zombies, the marriage of my brother, the birth of my nephew, the death of my grandmother, a bout of pneumonia, the release of the rest of the Harry Potter books, and now the start of my college life), I just have to suddenly gush out all the happiness your story has brought me that I had kept silent.

I've cried multiple times. I've been left going to bed (at 4:00 in the morning, no less) wishing that I'll find a nice guy like Syaoran someday to save my day. I would end up skimming over the smut at times of impatience, just wanting to know what will happen to the plot. I've giggled like a really dorky girl at parts and and even bit my fingernails at times of excitement. Seriously. It would make a very entertaining video for Youtube....

I was rather taken off guard this evening, not knowing that we were THIS close to the end! I guess I was pulling a Touya and was in denial when it was OBVIOUSLY being wrapped up a bit a few weeks ago, yet I calmly found my way here today to only see chapters entitled "Epilogue" and "Afterword." I was shocked! My e-speak brain was going haywire: "OMGWTFNO XO." And so now I find myself staying up way later than I thought I would have just to write out my gratitude to you. I haven't logged on to this account since the time they got rid of the FIRST recommended reading, and so here I am, logging in all special to show how much I loved it.

It's been fun! Thank you (x20958209209386092603673024) for writing this wonderful story.

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From ANON - Madd Hatter on October 21, 2007
Ugh, I put my email in the box - and to be honest I forget my login information past this point so I can't unhide my email. ZiggyOtaku@gmail.com - please send me a reply about the email group.
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From ANON - Madd Hatter on October 21, 2007
Yes, yes! lol. I was so going to seriously suggest you publish this. I have to say I would hold this higher then anything I've ever read, because this is the best god damn thing I've ever read.

I'm so happy I stumbled upon the fanfic. I came on the site to simply find some pairings between Sakura and Touya. Not because I'm some sicko who wants to see sibling sex, but because I agree with you that girls tend to idolize men who have similarities to their fathers, and I felt a strong bond between her and Touya - even in CCS. I wanted to see how some authors would implore that and use their imagination to see what they saw.

I wasn't exactly satisfied with my search. I was actually rather disappointed. Then I saw this, and I'll be honest - I did expect some smutty ill-willed out of character things based on just the title. But during the first chapter I thought 'this isn't some 14 year old virgin day dreaming' Lol. I was extremely impressed with your writing style and your imagery. I'm very picky with that. I can't stand things that are drawn out over scenery and things such as that. But you never lost my attention with this story, not a single sentence.

The reason I was eh about the idea of Sakura and Syaoran getting to be the main picture here, is due to the fact I was so entranced by your work with Yue and Touya - I was afraid you'd lose focus and I quickly figured out that the pairing between Sakura and Syaoran was a must in order for Yue's and Touya's relationship to build.

I was also basing it on other fics I have read with the pairings. So I just had this awful idea in my head and I should've given you more credit then that, lol.

I will, however, admit that I am a little dissappointed with no sex scene between Syaoran and Sakura. Not because it was a must for me to read more smut - but I wanted to hear Sakura's experience with that with her being a virgin. They had oral, and lemme tell you - that was very well written. But, sex is a whole new level Sakura isn't familiar with. You implied it - but she wasn't any indifferent to it.

With as emotional Sakura is - I just expected a deeper relationship appear once she did bond with Syaoran.

Also - I want to mention this. Have you ever read the Twilight series from Stephenie Meyer? It's a vampire series she published that I've also been hooked on - I have to say this drew me in deeper though.

She was just a normal person - never expected to be a writer in all her dreams. One night she also had a dream. She had a dream about these characters and when she woke up wrote it down. She began wondering 'well what happened to them' and next thing she knew - she had a whole book written following 3 others.

I'll send you a link to watch her little interview - because she mentions how tough it was to publish with her lack of knowledge about the whole thing. I want you to see if so when you do work on getting this published you won't get discouraged - because I promise, you'll be on New York Times with this Dx

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1SQ9bJIhcJ0 -- Watch that, please.

Stephenie Meyer has had so many interviews and even had "Watch out Harry Potter" on my local news.
I can say I loved your story more then her book, and lemme tell you - I went through her book(s) in 2 days and it's 400-600 pages.

Please, if you do this PLEASE don't get discouraged. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE.
If you go through this just remember you had 600 people who loved your story and you owe it to yourself for you 18 months of unemployment. Lol - think of it as 18 months of work and you getting paid back for it.

If you could - could you please email me your yahoo group. I would more then willingly join your group and hear how you're doing. I'm not a huge yahoo fan, I rather dislike it - but if it's for you, then Yahoo can be my best friend.

I'm glad my reviews meant something for you, I was really glad to see my name listed in your gratitude. I wasn't expecting it with as late as I came to join in on your marvelous work.

Thank again for writing such beautiful work - if you go through with this publishing - I promise I'll be in line for the release date.

I also wish you best of luck in life, you certainly deserve it after filling so many people with happiness across the world with your wonderful imagination.

With much love,
Brittany (aka - Madd Hatter)

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From ANON - wilt on October 21, 2007
I've been reading this story for a couple of months now and I've never reviewed. After reading this last chapter or tag or whatever I though I should. I read a lot of fanfiction. More than I'd care to admit and I rarely if ever review stories unless the author really strikes me. I was a little leary of this story to begin with. I don't watch a lot of anime and cardcaptor was always a 'just okay' one to me. The touya/yue/yukito thing interested me though so I looked up a couple of fanfictions. I don't ever remember how I got to this one as I don't look for touya/yue very often or visit this site that much. Mainly because of what you pointed out, it being mostly sex with no plot or characterization. This story, as I'm sure you've been told, is exceptionally well written. I found it disturbing and downright disgusting at times and I didn't know if I wanted to continue reading it. Obviously I did and to my relief it had a happy ending. One of the most interesting things I've found about fanfiction is that the really good ones could generally be taken as an original story. This story is no different. I don't know if you'll think this is a good review or a shit review but I just felt I needed to say something. And I know my advice doesn't count for anything since you don't know me, but don't worry about what your family thinks of what you do. If you're good at it and enjoy it that should be good enough for them. This is the longest review I've ever written I think. Also, you're never too old to enjoy a good story, fanfiction or not. So, thank you for the story and I hope that one day I'll be flipping through a book at Books-a-Million and think 'huh, this writing style seems familiar.'
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From ANON - cherrixwolf on October 21, 2007
No trademark character discussion at the end? jk
Thank you for taking those marvelous 3 years and 3 months to let your readers take a journey of a lifetime. The fangirling I've done for this story cannot be matched with any other fangirling I've probably ever done in my life (which includes dumbledore's new orientation status). I just wish that I had found this story sooner so I could take each chapter in one by one. So once again, thank you
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From ANON - cherrixwolf on October 21, 2007
I love how you tied everything together, especially with Clow narrating at the very end... there's no other word for it besides beautiful... that and heartbreaking since we're coming to the end. I cannot fully express how your prose manages to evoke such emotions in me, some I didn't realize I could even feel before this. You truly are amazing.
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From midnightfox on October 20, 2007
lol I'm gonna get all teary eyed here XD I can't believe it's the end @_@ Three years and 3 or 4 months! yeah I started reading this while I was in highschool and now I'm in college trying to make something of myself. You'll do great in life so you shouldn't be so hard on yourself. :] Don't think about the past think about the now and live for the moments that take your breath away ^_~ A great job on the story and I hope you continue your writing. You should be a journalist ^^ This has to be, no wait, this is the best fanfiction story I have ever read and stuck with. You're an amazing writer and probably an amazing person too (though I don't know anything about you). =] Best of luck in life chica and keep your head held high!

A.B.
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From Aureawolf on October 20, 2007
Beautiful epilogue. And beautiful author note. I've been around here reading for a while, and I must say that was a nice and cathartic ending. I feel like nothing was left undone. Everything wrapped up. Smoothly, not too fast, but also didn't linger.

I wish you all the luck in the world on whatever you decide to do with your future. Rock on author. Rock on.
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From ANON - chipped_diamond on October 20, 2007
Wow. This has been one heck of a ride. I'm just- I'm incoherent at best, there's no words. PS was a long, epic, beautiful, awe-ispiring work, and I feel this pang of bittersweet sorrow now that it's finished. Not only that, but your last input in the world of fanfiction. But, since you're moving on to greater things, I wish you the greatest luck and want you to know I'm right behind you all the way! I really hope you do get this published, because you're one of the best writers whose works I've ever had the priviledge to read, fanfiction or no. Just tell us you pen name, so I can buy the first copy! =)
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From sodapop0006 on October 20, 2007
Wow, it's so strange to see this finally ended. The ending was very intense, and it was a little difficult to picture because there was so much going on when Yue and Touya are "eaten" by the Void. I think the way you put Clow's thoughts into it, though, really helped with spacing out the reasoning behind the Void's defeat and it had a good effect. It's been great following along with the complicated relationships you've made and thank you so much for choosing to write down your dream! :) Good luck with your writing beyond PS and I'm sure I'll be back to read it again!
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