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From ANON - ayachan on October 23, 2005
I AM READY FOR THE SECOND HALF!!!!! lol, but wow... that was great *stares in awe*.. i absolutely love how the characters change too, especially yue.. and to think, he was such a cold bastard a while ago.. meilin was AWESOME! very very funny.. glad to see someone now who has the balls to put up with ralen.. please please keep up w/ the good work!!!!
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From ANON - Lady Mo on October 23, 2005
Sorry, you made me feel bad for saying you didn't describe. I honestly dont know what I was thinking at the time.

This chapter was amazing. Seriously, the part with Touya and Yue in his Sanctuary was oddly beautiful. Poor Yue is falling hard, ne? I also like that you are using Sakura more. I understand how you had her in the first part, then the lead role went to Touya and all that. But she is so pretty in the story. I just want to see her more and more.

The chapters are all really long, which is really good. I watch the scroll bar like a hawk when it gets low, panicking that the chapter is about to end. Maybe that makes me a loser... ah screw it.

I am glad you updated so soon, its neat. Lets hope that Muse continues to kick your ass. You have a good day and all that jazz.
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From ANON - aleanach on October 23, 2005
Beautifully written. Pity you take so long to finish a chapter.
How long will it be before you post the next chapter? Another four months?
Even so, the story is well written and has a good plot.
I like the way you particularly portray Yue, showing how he slowly yet unknowingly
fall in love with Touya.
Hope you will continue writing.
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From ANON - neko-mew on October 23, 2005
someones gonna die! and his name is ralen. this story evokes a lot of emotions, thanks for the story. okay every story that's like all romantic and stuff makes me want to cry but still
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From umiko on October 23, 2005
I just found and finished this tonight; I enjoyed it immensely. I'm not the best at constructive criticism, so I'll just leave you with a plea for more. Please? I'll beg if I have to; I do't have Touya's pride.
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From ANON - anon on October 19, 2005
I love your story ^_^ I check for updates every few weeks, so it's all good.
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From ANON - KawaiiKaren88 on October 19, 2005
;=; Waaa. At least things were getting better before Touya panicked. X3 Man, ye're great at keeping everyone in character! @@; It disturbs me, in a good way of course! XD; SOO GOOD! Keep up writing! ;=;
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From ANON - JB on October 19, 2005
Awesome story! And finally getting to see some Li! I was starting to miss him. Keep up the good work. I wonder what Yue's secret is.
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From ANON - Elven Mischief on October 18, 2005
Oh, Poor Sakura! 0o That sucks.
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From ANON - Lady Mo on October 17, 2005
I feel terrible for never reviewing before, but you need to know how wonderful this story is. All of your characters are so deep and moving, I even think Ralen is a cool character. Is he the same age as Syoaran? Several questions keep rising in my head, like what is going to happen between Li and Sakura? If they practice making babies, won't that violate the treaty between Yue and Touya?

I really love it, and I know you hear that a lot but really- its a good story. This is the first man/man story that I have been able to read without clicking "back". Small steps I guess, but its really cool. Will Tomoyo be visiting soon?

Is the castle going to be attacked? SEems an awful lot of security for a castle to have for it to not ever get attacked. Surely Yue makes enemies, being of his personality's nature. Are there other beings as powerful as Yue floating around? Is Cerberus going to be in the story? You don't ever describe Yue's appearance, does he look like the same Yue in the anime? A human with long glorious silver hair?

If the castle were to get attaked, does Touya kick ass and take names in the name of Yue or does he take the opportunity to escape? What of Sakura, you have already stated that she has an uncanny ability with animals, and in the manga and the anime she has this unnatural spiritual power that takes over her and does neat stuff. She could have some kind of magical energy that Yue sees.

Remember when she gets trained by Tomoyo and she notices that Sakura has some sort of natural sexual tendencies? Does the girl ever get deep dicked? lol.

Anywho, got class now but if you are ever interested, I would like to be a proofreader or a beta tester. Your story is neat and I can't wait for the next chapter.

Seeya - Shea
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From ANON - Lady Mo on October 17, 2005
I feel terrible for never reviewing before, but you need to know how wonderful this story is. All of your characters are so deep and moving, I even think Ralen is a cool character. Is he the same age as Syoaran? Several questions keep rising in my head, like what is going to happen between Li and Sakura? If they practice making babies, won't that violate the treaty between Yue and Touya?

I really love it, and I know you hear that a lot but really- its a good story. This is the first man/man story that I have been able to read without clicking "back". Small steps I guess, but its really cool. Will Tomoyo be visiting soon?

Is the castle going to be attacked? SEems an awful lot of security for a castle to have for it to not ever get attacked. Surely Yue makes enemies, being of his personality's nature. Are there other beings as powerful as Yue floating around? Is Cerberus going to be in the story? You don't ever describe Yue's appearance, does he look like the same Yue in the anime? A human with long glorious silver hair?

If the castle were to get attaked, does Touya kick ass and take names in the name of Yue or does he take the opportunity to escape? What of Sakura, you have already stated that she has an uncanny ability with animals, and in the manga and the anime she has this unnatural spiritual power that takes over her and does neat stuff. She could have some kind of magical energy that Yue sees.

Remember when she gets trained by Tomoyo and she notices that Sakura has some sort of natural sexual tendencies? Does the girl ever get deep dicked? lol.

Anywho, got class now but if you are ever interested, I would like to be a proofreader or a beta tester. Your story is neat and I can't wait for the next chapter.

Seeya - Shea
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From ANON - Emeraldwolf on October 16, 2005
aww. poor Touya. ^_^ and yay for Li being such an awesome badass. hehe. hey man, as long as you keep updating, we'll keep reading. ^_~
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From ANON - DarklessVasion on October 15, 2005
I have to tell you how flabbergasted I am over this story. I have been riveted since the first chapter and am in awe of your storytelling capabilities. Reviews are for sharing thoughts and ideas, from reader to writer, to critique and give constructive critisizm to help the writer advance and better develop those all-important skills. As far as I can see, you ply your trade so well that I can offer nothing but applause and encouragement (and maybe a little begging that you not abandon this story as happens to so many fanfics) I praise your characters, your plot, your amazing interactions and complexity, and the tasteful yet intense scenes of intimacy; relying heavily on how the parties think and feel, how it effects them, and molds their growing relationships. Fanfiction or original, this story can stand on it's own. Absolutely Fantastic! I will definitely be following this...just try to keep me away. Thank you so much; I love finding new authors and then spreading the word.
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From ANON - Fria on October 13, 2005
Yay! You updated! xD, Nice chapter you updated there. Keep up the good work.
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From ANON - lili on October 13, 2005
Usually when I read a good story, I try to think up feedback that's useful and relates to the content somehow. However, I've found that I am not good at thinking too hard about things and in the end I don't end up reviewing at all; which is bad, because I honestly appreciate this story. @%#$!!

Anyways, the last chapter with Touya and his relationship with Yue was great (*waves the girly M/M flag here*) although it seemed just a bit rushed. (towards a more intimate thing, is the vibe I'm getting...? And example is Touya suddenly wondering if "Yue might have something to do with" his uneasiness after he left.) I know that it's up to 19 chapters already, that this is a fanwork and the only compensation are these reviews (yet it still turns out damn interesting), but I think something like those thoughts with Touya, in the way that you're writing him, would be somewhat more subtle.

However, otherwise, his characterization and his DIALOGUE and actions with Yue, in my opinion, is gorgeous.

And this last chapter was a real insight into the way Li and Sakura have a relationship. There was just this happy feeling going on while I was reading it, and when Li spills to her it really clears up a few things for me (...it never occurred to me that his tack had been stolen ;;) and shows her what kind of a person he is. They never really talk-talked before.

The way Sakura babbles to Touya about Li is adorable too. When Touya finally realizes she has a crush on him, I can't imagine what he'll do. :D Also, I love Sakura's character, especially when she stands up for herself against Yue when Touya collapses.

The Touya breakdown and how he talks to Yue afterwards is actually what I meant about the advance in their subtle relationship.

Ha. I think that means I'm more of a dialogue-and-action person in general, actually.

Still. Enjoying the story IMMENSELY. Too much for words, often. And after five days of no Internet (...Comcast...) this was very refreshing.

(Random: When it comes to this story, I check every day, but sometimes I just get this zingy feeling (it used to be I counted the weeks..."Okay, today's Thursday--should be about one more week then"...eh heh ;) and I check and it's here. Show's how much I'm obsessed. Urfgh.)

Glad to hear the next update should be up in just a little while! LOOKING FORWARD TO IT, HOPE TO SEEE MORE SOON [PLZ]

-lili

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