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By : Tairyn

From ANON - Deformography on January 01, 2005
Wow...I love this. I'm absolutely positive this is the best AU fic I've ever read. You're doing a great job. I've never really thought about Tohma and Hiro as a pairing...it actually sounds pretty hot. o.o Can't wait til you get them together...I'm looking forward to updates. =P
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From ANON - DivinePunishment on January 01, 2005
Woo! Glad you finally updated. I admit I liked this chapter, but it was short (yeah, I'm a complainer). Oh yeah, let's not forget that you left us with the image of a dead Uesugi and Yuki screwing Mikka(but hey, a man's gotta do what a man's gotta do). Oh welll, I still love you. Now...MORE!
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From ANON - ladygizarme on December 31, 2004
Wow... i guess i haven't checked for updates in awhile since i've been busy with my own fic... i come back and there's two whole chapters to read! awesomeness!!! i love that yuki and shuichi are both after each other now, and that they have that history of their first meeting and yuki has yet to realize! will he soon? when will something happen with hiro/tohma? is hiro gonna be a jerk some more about his conspiracy theories? what's his reaction gonna be to tohma once he realizes? will yuki get rid of mikka or will she leave him or what? maybe she'll find out about his obsession w/shu? god i have sooo many more questions, but i'm sure i'll just hafta wait for the chapters to answer them anyway... so i hope u update again soon!!!
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From ANON - TricksterGoddess on December 27, 2004
Oh my god, I am addicted. I cannot stop reading this wonderful fic. *is in heaven* please keep on writing ^__^
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From ANON - Dana on December 27, 2004
It's hard to say why but the scene in Yuki's office was hot!!
i even liked the sex scene with Mikka but i would love the future sex scene between Yuki and Shuichi!!
I can't wait for more this gets more and more interesting!!
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From ANON - Hitomi on December 27, 2004
(Ch. 7)
Yickes! Poor Yuki!
Actualy I don't think he was much of an asshole here, well.. we'll see what comes next, ne?

I'm a little annoyed that there are only updates once a week. 'cause see, you kinda got me really hooked here on your fic. I'm even daydreaming about it. -_-U

^_^

Hiro is so right, he doesn't know what hit him!
I'm dying to see what's gonna happen between him and Tohma!!^^

And Shuichi and Yuki! When will they meet?! Now Yuki knows that Shu works for Tohma; can't he just waltz over there and fuck Shu's litle brain's out?! :P
Well, maybe after the dead father part? Hehehe =^___^=

To your answer to my review:
I guess I can understand why you changed Shu, but it was such a drastic change in chapter 6, because no matter if you make him less silly or more, Shuichi is still Shuichi and that means that Hiro is held up high in his head, and I just couldn't imagin Shuichi barging out and calling him a "motherfucker" without being pushed into a corner.
But Shu still rocks my socks, and so do you.^^

Oh, and you didn't answer my question; Why is Yuki with Mikka?
I can't seem to recall the reason, and since she's such a pest to Yuki, I'm a little fustratied as to why he's still with her? [besides the fact that its for the plot^^]

Hope you had a wonderful christmas! I had!^^

Waiting for the next update,
Love,
Hitomi.

Ja ne~
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From ANON - clarichan on December 27, 2004
lol...yey! no more T/Y action. Wow Yuki is acting like a complete jerk. and you even gave a little hint of Hiro/Maiko...i like that pairing cuz u don't see it around much...*giggle* Shuichi said the same thing i said when one of my best friends told me she liked my brother...they even started dating...lol...oh well i'm getting off the subject....i hope you continue soon! :D
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From ANON - Haruna on December 27, 2004
yesh... we are over obsessive crazy over man (not just any man, sexy hot seme's) onna's ^ ~ ^. oh don't kill me yet. i promise i won't spill da beans ((cross fingers)) but then again if u rilli answer my question, it'll be spoiling da good part. u love mah reviews?? URESHI DESU ~ ~ ~ can i gif u uber-hugs?? ((big shiny eyes))

next up is "Tearless"?? why dun u use Daisuke Asakura's & NG's songs like "Be There", "High Drive" etc. or Kotani Kinya's + Mad Soldiers (Bad Luck) other songs like "anti-nostalgic", "Rockin' Station", "No! Virtual", "easy action", "masking pleasure around" etc. ((i'm kind of a rilli big fan over these arists espcially Kotani Kinya-san who never fails to remind me dat his voice sounds like Shuichi's. actually Kotani-san is Shuichi's singing voice)) it doesn't matter if da song doesn't suit ur chapter story but at least if Gravitation material. i'm sure Kuma-chan will agree wif me ^o^.

((on Eiri fucking Mikka)) :-
hmmm... normal sex fic (male/female) in Gravitation sounds kinda... new--- uh, wierd, no no, strange. oh welll, i hope u write Eiri raping Shu1fic and post soon in da near future. having da mood and fuck (not having sex or making love) dat woman after hearing his father past away? well... i know Eiri always acts cold and heartless and mean to da ppl around him but i think dats just his 'weapon' for him not to get emotionally attach/involve with a person. he does have... uh... `love trauma`, fear of falling in love again.

((on Eiri's reaction with papa Uesugi))
is dat it?? after da call from Mika and finish/continue fucking dat woman?? shouldn't he... i dunno, we all know dat Eiri and Uesugi papa aren't rilli going along very well as u see in da manga (i've never seen da anime series) but c'mon. dis is da dad. da guy who Eiri live with eversince he was born, there must be some more emotion in Eiri's reaction right? right? but then again dis is ur version of Eiri, i haf no right to change ur Eiri Yuki.

((on Eiri's reaction to Shu1))
oh yeah about Eiri earlier.... HOW COME HIS REACTION WAS JUST "Yuki perked a brow, Shuichi� Shindou, for some reason that name sounded strangely familiar, but then again he�d heard so many names..." DID EIRI BONK HIS HEAD SOMWHERE N DIDN'T REMEMBER DA BUBBLEGUM HEAD SHU1? AMNESIA? ANETHESIA? WHUT HAPPEN FEW YEARS AGO? HOW COME SHU STILL REMEMBER EIRI WHILE EIRI JUST THOUGHT " for some reason that name sounded strangely familiar" HUH?? WHUT HAPPEN~ ~ ~
((on Hiro's secret feeling over Maiko))
WHAT??!! Hiro? on Maiko?? now dats new. da gravi fics out there are typically Hiro X Ayaka, Hiro Tatsuha, Hiro Fujisaki, Hiro Eiri (o_O), Hiro Mika //O_o\\, and again Hiro Ayaka! honestly i dun like Ayaka! (but i kinda like da managa version of Ayaka) i think Hiro thought of Maiko, like Shu1, as a younger sister and one of his good friends. I don't think Hiro have much friends since he's the genuise, da *brain* in their skool. he is pretty popular among da girls though.
it's kinda sad dat Maiko havent have much of an appearance in dose numerous fics out there. i'm happie dat she's taking a kinda major role in ur fic, did u get whut i mean? Hiro is one of da major characters and he have da hots over Maiko! isn't dat great? oh no!! whut about Tohma??
isn't it sad for da CEO of da NG Corps. dat Hiro already have a special someone in his heart? oh yes, i'm kinda confuse on whut Tohma wants over Hiro-kun. does he want to be da bottom (uke) or da upper (seme)one where he gets to pound in senselessly into da guitarist of Bad Luck?

((on Hiro's thoughts over Tohma's "motive"))
i can't blame da poor guy. he tot there's some evil motive dat Tohma is soing but da actual reality is Tohma is just head over heels lustfully in love with da sexy guitarist of Bad Luck. i wonder when will Tohma make his move...

((re-reads review)) o-oh... i think dis is my longest review for a while. oops, sorrie about dat. HIRO WILL TAKE OVER DA WORLD MUAH AH AH AH~ ~ ~ ((worship Hiro plushieand stolen stuffs in da secret basement together with other Hiro followers))
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From ANON - clarichan on December 20, 2004
aww man! i cannot believe i missed chapter 5 update....*sniff* when i got the email about chapter six i was like 'wait! i haven't read five yet!' oh well....i am really enjoying this fic. but please no more Eiri and Tohma....*shudders* i don't really like that pairing...and to tell you the truth i am pretty surprised about it and all...i actually like the idea of Tohma/Hiro. *grin* Please continue soon! i want more interaction with Yuki and Shu! Please! i'll be waiting :D
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From ANON - Haruna on December 20, 2004
((re-reads chapter)) whoops!! ((hides embarrased face behind da chair)) only god know why... actually i missed reading the paragraph Mikka watching Bad Luck. n kept reading to the next next paragraph where Eiri went obsessive over da singer-with-gargoyled-wings. for a sec i tot Eiri was love struck over Ryu1!! ((dodge sharp objects from BlueSiren-san)) so dat's why my reveiw sounded kinda out-of-topic. honto ni gomen!
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From ANON - Haruna on December 20, 2004
sunday morning is alright with me. just simply i got nothin' to do on a sunday morning so having to read ur latest chappie is a good start for the rest of mai day!! ^o^ ah~ BlueSiren-san promise me there's no more "mind_blowing_sex" between Eiri and Tohma, whew! ((wipes forehead))... WHO WILL HAF DA LEMON NEXT CHAPTER?? i rilli wonder who will b da couple... ai ya! ai ya! ai ya ya!! is Eiri falling for sum1 other than Shu1??!?!? is he?? is he?? oh! i dunno if i cud stand dis any longer~ whut is manipulative-deeply-obsessive-over-Hiro Tohma gonna do to Eiri?? whut? whut?! whuts gonna happen? whuts gonna happen?? man, i never fail to have my panic_infected_by_sakano whenever i finish reading ur latest chapter! and dun bother reading mah lame boring fic, it's nothin' compare to urs. u, mah lovely writer, is capable of manipulating da gravi characters in ur fic just in da last minute where many doesn't expect. i dare say, among numerous gravi fics i read, ur one of da few best gravi writer. ((gravi plushies - pocky's - Tohma's lingerie thrown to BlueSiren-san oh ho ho ho~ ~)) m i sick or whut?

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From ANON - DivinePunishment on December 19, 2004
I love the way you write. Figurative language and all that jazz is great.
Gahaha...stupid women. They're either blind or (i think in Mika's case) in denial. What a shame their "lover's" don't want them.
Lol, kinda crazy the way Eiri just fell for Shuichi so suddenly. I guess it's kinda like what happened to Shuichi in the anime, eh?

To answer that question, I'd prefer that you update Sunday mornings. They're unbelievably borrring.

Thanks!

-DP

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From ANON - dntfckwifme on December 19, 2004
hi-mi-tsu? whhhha? An I say update on Sunday Mornings!! :D this chapter was great. Love how Yuki is obsessed with Shuichi now. *gots to go cause she needs to pack her hang-lugage for tomorrow* ADORE this story.. need a Yuki/Shuichi lemon sooon! x-P
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From ANON - Hecate18 on December 19, 2004
I really liked the opening, Yuki's true colours are really showing... but then again I'm thinking Onizuka deserved it! ^_^
Hiro's hesitency is almost understandable, overnight stardom is rather rare, but I also agree with Shuichi cause there's no way they can let this go; though Shuichi's answer was harsh: -

**�You would throw away our friendship over a music contract?� Hiro asked shocked, Shuichi looked at him intently, then looked away towards the window.

�Yes,� he responded barely above a whisper.** -

Yuki's obsessed... and so is Tohma, this is jus' seems to be leading to a build up of sexual fustration... (that they can take out on each other) *hentai grin*

I'm looking forward to the next chap!!! ^_^

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From AkumaKawa on December 19, 2004
Coolsa.
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