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By : Teller

From ANON - Dark Saria on March 17, 2008
..."The Fantasy" is one card that has to show up sooner or later. I have an evil idea in mind for the form it would take, but it wouldn't be fair to Sakura. After all, she'd just gone through so much to get all her cards...and now that there's a 93% probability we're on the same page, I must away, before I get lynched.
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From ANON - Daichi Azure on March 16, 2008
Holy cow...can't wait for the next one...hmm..maybe...nawww..have to wait and see! Keep it up I love this story...now where did that bookmark for it get off to...
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From ANON - Taku on March 13, 2008
Thats what the Loli card is for, or you could use it on Tomoyo's mom or Sakura's dad... or both XP
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From Teller on March 12, 2008
Anon, this is speaker, and just so you know, the furry cards (yes cards, not just one) are a rather large set, if not the largest I can come up with. They're for later though, since Demoness and co. got around first. Sound good?
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From ANON - Anon on March 08, 2008
this is a cool story i hope there's a furry card
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From Teller on March 07, 2008
Falconeye - you seriously blew me away putting THAT much thought into this review (now that I noticed it)

We hadn't planned a huge hierarchy to the deck - just the four 'elements' of it (The Yuri, Yaoi, Slut, and Maiden). While we were thinking of something similar to light and dark, we hadn't decided on WHAT yet. We also didn't have an upper limit for cards in mind - just as long as we kept feeling pervy. We did have a couple of sets in mind (Such as the Relegion, Demoness, and Angel combo), but thats it.

For that matter, both of us are a bit stalled on this at the moment. Neither Speaker nor Myself seem to be able to write something that feels 'right'. Don't worry, we haven't forgotten this existed!

I can't speak for my partner, but I at least had planned to have Tomoyo and Sakura start using both decks, no worries there. I'd also seen the possibility of cards like the change, or mirror, or...oh, any of a dozen others really.

Also, no worries about it becoming nothing but smut. My partner is better at writing pure sex then I am - but I actually get somewhat EMBARRASSED writing that. Silly, eh? A Lemon author who gets embarrassed writing sex scenes? I'll make sure theres still some nice and fluffy romance going on. ^_^

The cards that WILL show up:

Demoness
Angel
Futa
Maiden
Slut
Yaoi (probably won't get a scene to himself though. Neither of us like yaoi much, we just agreed it was...right.)
Pet (from me if not my partner)
Romance (again, from me if not my partner)

My partner may have a couple other planned - don't know what.

We do welcome suggestions, though there is no promise we will get around to them. And, sorry, but neither of us is perverted enough to do a 'granny' card, Taku.
...
right, that about covers all of it for now I think. I'll try to actually get a new chapter up within a week.^_^

-Teller
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From ANON - I vote sex. on February 25, 2008
I vote sex.
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From ANON - Falconeye on February 25, 2008
Whichever you choose I�m sure it will be great. Given the stories here and elsewhere (and non-fiction sources elsewhere) I am curious to your innovative ideas vs. reader�s expectations while maintaining CCS-canon, as I doubt anything could be more �When Hell Freezes Over� than story with Fukitaka-san and Sonomi-san making out. 0_o In front of their kids *shutters*. Gave them (and me) nightmares!

My I offer several opinions?

1) Take your time! And please continue to focus on the story aspect, and the erotic moments will come naturally (just fearful/hoping Tomoyo's adventures doesn�t degrade into smut). Just as folks came to Capilist's for sakura's/touya's deflowing, it was the awesome narration that caused us to stay with the 50+ chapters. A simple kiss can and do speak with greater volume, elegance, erotica than even the basest sex scenes.
Also, to quote YuriChampion "additional details in the sex scenes themselves would elevate the story from 'sexy' to 'damn sexy'", some simple tricks such as avoiding the omnipresent "Sports Announcer" style of narration would work wonders; "Well ladies and gentlemen, if you are just tuning in, the atmosphere is really heating up between the lovely Tomoyo-chan and uber-kawaii Sakura-chan..."; in short describe the emotional/physical/ect from the characters perspectives! If you'd like more tips, let me know ^_^

2) This is quickly turning out to be a sequel/parody of Clamp's Card Captor Sakura (only without the 'PG') and it brings to the forefront of all the little "innocent winks" and innuendos;. (If Miyiuki-chan in Wonderland is any indication, I wonder if CLAMP would have/could have done something quite similar if they were inclined to create echi/erotic storylines.).
We all new Clow Reed was *eccentric-cough*, and first-hand accounts such as the sexy Yuko-san (xxxHolic) the Dimension Witch is proof of that! We all know that underneath Tomoyo�s perfect demeanor is a Women, one that is polite, refined, intelligent/intuitive, perceptive, caring, but yearning to take charge against Clamp�s unjust arbitration, a total pervert where Sakura is concerned� (Goes on a 3 page essay on Tomoyo�s virtues and vice)� and establish �5-freedom� against �any� who threatens her Sakura (as she demonstrated in TRC wielding firearms, deception, and killer deathtraps).
How about more extras (such as a title system, such as; �Tomoyo and the First of Belief Trio�; or, �Tomoyo, Sakura, and the Candid Camera�) in addition to "Leave It To Kistsu!"
In the good ol�Clamp Tradition, will there be minor crossovers/cameos from other clamp titles?

3) Exactly how many �Tomoyo Cards� are there? Are there exactly 53 (as in the anime series) an amount identical to Royal Card Deck, or the original 19 (as in manga series), or will there be more such as 72-81? akin to Tarot Deck?
Since �The "Primal Elemental" cards are The Yuri, Yaoi, Slut, and Maiden.�, do any of the other cards logically correspond to an from Sakura Cards? What are the other �Lesser Elemental� cards? What about Light-sama/Dark-sama, or Mirror-chan? Will there be a �Fifth Element� (whatever that would be)?
Will there be cards based on the Seven Holy Virtues or the Seven Deadly Sins? Will there be Emotional cards such as Fear or Jealousy or Love, or Lust, or Sorrow, or Fury.

4) If, lets say, Yaoi got a hold of Yukito/Touya, will it be a turn on to only the Male-sex and/or those with the Y-chromosome? Or does it merely have an affect on any ones� sexual orientation (it be hilarious for Tomoyo & company to walk in on them and be �turned-on�, with Tomoyo getting a �glance� and understanding all the fuss other girls made about �Hot Guys� that she could never understood before, now with an urge to retrieve her camera).

5) If there are no patterns or Hierarchy, then here is my theory. Light and Dark are the Monarchs of the Sakura Deck and the most powerful of the elementals (and indeed they speak on their behalf when Sakura consults with them). Each Card has its own personality, ranging from good-natured to violent, and its own powers that are mostly centered around an elemental force or performing a specific task, and each very greatly in power.

Elemental Cards (probably 18-20 in all�) Light-sama = Sex // Dark-sama = Gender

Yuri = Watery Lightning? Snow Flower? Storm
Yaoi = Firey Wood? Cloed Rain? Song
Slut = Earthy Metal? Shadow? Mist Sweet
Maiden = Windy Void/the Hope? Glow? Sand? Wave

Attribute/Combat Cards
Fight? Fly? Big
Dash? Sword? Little
Jump? Shield? Float
Power? Arrow? Shot

�Reality Cards�
Illusion Time Dream Through
Create Return Loop Lock
Libra Erase Maze
Mirror Change Move

Utility/Unknown/Domestic Cards
Bubble? Sleep? Voice Silence Twin

Could you list �ALL� the �it�s-a-keeper� cards�? It could give the rest of us something to fuss over and ponder about, as the original series did?

Here�s an Idea! Why not use Tomoyo Cards and Sakura Cards together more often? As the story progresses, Sakura could discover some innovative/truly kinky ways to use her cards, just as easily as Tomoyo learns to use her cards in non-deviant/PG manners. Such as using The Change (witch swaps mind/soul of a person) Sakura Card in conjunction with The Sex (which changes the physical appearance/anatomy of a person) Tomoyo Card, and throw in The Gender (which alters how a person identifies with themselves) Tomoyo Card for good measure.
Anyone who�s read �The Shape of Things� by Amazoness Duo would know this.

Wow, am I tired!

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From ANON - Taku on February 25, 2008
Sex
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From Teller on February 24, 2008
Okay guys, I know I've been falling behind, but I AM working on the next chapter, sorry if I'm late, but as we've said before- I have a life.
Anyways, the next chapter has quite a few new characters in it, so do you want me to just have it to let you "meet" them, or should I take longer on it and make there be sex in it?
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From ANON - Anon on February 16, 2008
Well I'm all for a Foot card but of the three you listed Demoness or Nurse sound fine, anything but Futa, just as bad as a Granny card *shudder*
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From ANON - Taku on February 08, 2008
I think you should do the demoness, since the title of the last one kinda suggests an ark...
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From Teller on February 08, 2008
The Loli card will basically make grown women lolis, and if I have a say in the matter there will not be a granny card. Clow was a perv, not a complete freak. Teller's having trouble (life and all that), and I can't decide on what card to do next, any suggestions from the fans?
I was thinking either the Futa, the Demoness, or the Nurse...
(the Catgirl and her kin are for later)
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From ANON - Anon on January 07, 2008
hm, how would loli card work? since tomo and sakura is already lolis
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From Teller on January 02, 2008
The "Elemental" cards are The Yuri, Yaoi, Slut, and Maiden. Every last one of the cards is at least a little bi, most are lesbians because the current Cardcaptor is female...and Clow Reid was a huge perv that liked to watch...
Slut, as you might recall, was the first card we met, and the reason all the other cards are loose. Yuri and Yaoi are obvious as to what they're about, and as for the Maiden...wait & see.
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