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Reviews for Bobbing for Apples

By : PureFluff
  • From PlantangelJchan on April 18, 2008
    Yes another good chapter. Maybe if you plan on putting the sex at the end you could get in some limeish scenes along the way. You can do other things before doing the actual act that's what makes it so fun. ^_^ keep it up.

    -L
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  • From animekid on April 16, 2008
    O_o

    most strange plot mix ever

    I like it though; it's hilarous that raito doesn't know that L is a guy fufufufu.

    the lemonly parts and situations fit and this is a treat to read *look at it again*
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  • From Ampicillin on April 16, 2008
    Sorry I sounded so harsh! I come from corners of the internet where one gets used to harshness, so I forget sometimes that a lot of people aren't.

    Anyway, on the bright side, the story reads a lot better now, and I'm very interrested to see what happens, so I'll keep reading. :)
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  • From PlantangelJchan on April 16, 2008
    Ohhhhh very nice story I quite like it. You have a good way with your wording and it flows well. Please do update soon and maybe they can actually get around to the sex part that would be entertaining.Keep up the good work.

    -L
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  • From ScentedAvocado on April 15, 2008
    Hahaha, so L is pansexual too, eh? Don't find too many of those around. I thought I was one of the few, actually. Stupid, stupid me.
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  • From spoon10488 on April 15, 2008
    Ouch I hope you didn't get hurt. Anyway, I loved this chapter. They seem to be trying to sort out there feelings. I can't wait for more.
    =)
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  • From KatzeRaoul on April 15, 2008
    Love this can't wait for more*smiles*
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  • From KatzeRaoul on April 14, 2008
    Love this can't wait to read more. Even though I sware I read this at one point, it's just revised with more to it this time.*sheepish grin* Anyway, good story don't wait to long ta update.
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  • From Ampicillin on April 13, 2008
    Alright, sorry, but I had to stop half-way through this first chapter because this was annoying me so much.

    Why is Ryuzaki referring to himself as "Ryuzaki-sama"? Why is he referring to Misa as "Misa-Misa" and "Misa-chan"? He never did either of these in the Manga or Anime and it seem quite OOC. First of all, in Japanese, a person doesn't give themself an honorific, it would be considered rude and self-centred, especially "sama". In fact, Ryuzaki was never given an honorific by anyone, not even the common "san", or "kun". He was always just "Ryuzaki" or "L" and he never referred to himself in third person. Secondly, he always called Misa "Amane-san" or "Misa-san". He never used any friendly honorifics like "chan" as a sign of endearment. He was always rather formal. The friendliest his language got was using "kun" with Light, as a sign of their mock-friendship.

    I just HAD to get that off my chest, because it was annoying me really bad and will make an otherwise good story seem out-of-character and unprofessional. If you don't like honorifics, you don't have to write them at all. No one will blame you for dropping them. This is an English-language story, and adding Japanese to it won't make it seem smarter, or more professional (In my opinion, it has the opposite effect).

    Anyway, I'm not dissing your story, lyke. It's just this one little thing. I couldn't actually get myself to continue reading it with Ryuzaki calling himself "Ryuzaki-sama". It's just wrong. Like I said, it will make a potentially good story seem OOC.
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