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Reviews for Breaking Point

By : HitomiBrighteyes
  • From ANON - Aronim on February 19, 2011
    Really, one of the best pieces of smut i've read in a long time. Brilliant writing which shows tenderness, eagerness and the slight awkwardness of this first encounter, even though they seem rather skilled at that. Great job.

    I'd like to point out though, that you have a tendency to write sentences like "His mouth TRAVELLING up from her breast to close over her shoulder and sharp teeth nipped just hard enough to sting, marking her pale skin with a bright splash of pink." It should be written "
    His mouth TRAVELLED up from her breast to close over her shoulder and sharp teeth nipped just hard enough to sting, marking her pale skin with a bright splash of pink." You have a lot of sentences like this, where you write a verb with the -ing ending, where you should just write the past tense.

    I hope this critisism made sense, fantastic work overall.

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  • From AngelKayohisura on December 12, 2010
    I love Soul and Maka, and this was good! :]
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  • From emeraldxinfectiion on September 29, 2010
    Dear GOD, y'gotta love the kink memes. xD
    I absolutely love finding literal works of pr0nz written with this kind of detail; it's almost like reading an actual, published short story book. So, all I can say is that I enjoyed reading this and that it was extremely well written. :3
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  • From ANON - K. Yaslana on July 17, 2010
    Just wanted to note that this was THE best adult-material fanfic I've read in the Soul Eater category. You got character personalities right and I absolutely LOVED how you utilized that piano! I really hope to see more from you in this area. You're realism is straight-forward but not crude. A true rarity. *5 +*
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  • From ANON - ShadouRyoushi on July 15, 2010
    Please, please, please Make a second chapter! Or maybe even a series similar to this one? It's one of the best Soka that I've read XD
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 16, 2009
    great story
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  • From ANON - red on February 11, 2009
    This was AWESOME. I think my favorite bit was Soul muttering sweet- nothings at the end, but honestly the whole set-up with the piano bench was FANTASTIC.
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  • From ANON - Fuzzy Eared (not signed in) on December 24, 2008
    *Nice* Though I've got to say that that would hurt!
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 20, 2008
    I like it.
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  • From nikki7716 on November 07, 2008
    oh so so good! loved it. i'm just kind of giddy and speechless now so i don't have much more to say except wonderful job! great details and i do hope you continue to write!
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  • From ANON - Darthmermer on November 07, 2008
    Ooooh, loved it. Great and to the point...as it should be with those two.
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  • From ANON - Cookie on October 13, 2008
    A little while before reading this I had the misfortune of reading a horrible translated doujinshi that centered around Maka and Tsubaki being drugged and their minds/souls broken until they were nothing more than brainless sex slaves. It got worse the further I read and my hopes that Soul or Black Star would save the girls were dashed completely by the end. In fact Soul was killed and had his soul devoured, leaving the ending with the girls being sex slaves forever. This left me very irritable for many an hour afterward and looking for something to calm me down.

    In my search for a reminder that it was just someone's atrocious fan fiction that was illustrated, I looked for other fanfics. I fully expected subpar stories with drastic OOC situations or terrible grammar, spelling, and/or writing skills. But I figured even a tepid fanfic would at least ease the agitation I felt.

    Your story was beyond what I expected and I thank you for it. Maka and Soul felt in character and the story, though short, was charged with a delicious sense of sexuality that was had an underscore of awkward innocence and love. I gave it 5 stars and it deserves every one. The only down side is that there isn't more to read and savor. I feel a lot better now after having read this and hope that you write more in the future.
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  • From toonmissy on October 11, 2008
    I like! I like! Nice descriptions without making them seem out of character. I would like to see more of your Soul Eater ideas on here! What would have been bad for Maka and Soul is if Deathscythe walked in right after they finished. Of course I'm certain that Soul wouldn't object to Blair joining in with him and Maka next time.
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  • From ANON - Mikki on September 16, 2008
    Hot DAMN! that was a steamy fic and i LOVED it!!!!! I really do hope you write more Soul x Maka stuff i would definitely look forward to them. :) Thanks for the smex ;) Bravo on the whole thing. F**k it was awesome!
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  • From ANON - MasterC on September 05, 2008
    Love it
    Write more MakaXsoul!!!
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