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From ANON - jishe on September 19, 2009
It make me desesperate to wait for your chapters...but i always know it wil be worth it because they are SSOOOOOO long!!! I love it!
Thanks for the new chapter. It was incredible, specially because my biggest fear (of Yui remembering and suffering his rape once again) didn't happen because...well...he was already dead...jijijij
I believe this is the most touching awakenig i've rad because the children in it...Children should always be spare from the hell of any war, but is sad to know that eventually they are the first ones to suffer, whrn their parent left to fight, when they died...anyway. All that is always really sad.
In some way i used to though that when the elders will take riki (because that was indeed obvious) there will be a huge fight and all that....but the point that it was almost silly..i kind of like it, so that wait your history focous on Yui. yes, i'm also worried for Riki but...he is a big guy who can turn people to ashes so...i think he will be alright!
See you letter on the next chapter!!!!
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From ANON - Blue2501 on September 14, 2009
*____* I LOVE this story. With evry new Chapter i love it more and i hope that it Continued soon...
I want to now wat will happen in Yuis Mind and wat Erin will do with The Elder Theo now she had discovered him
in der Mind
PRETTY PLEASE Post the next Chapter *Puppydogeyes*
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From barrie18 on September 01, 2009
Coffee as usual my lady?

Well this long awaited chapter really had to be read slowly to understand the full gist of what was going on. As a plot mover, it really pushed everything into full throttle.

As to the people involved. . .

You really do have to love Lady Erin don't you? Here she is just awakened, and the first time she saw a current Elder, just about fell to pieces, and here she is not only accepting the help of the modern day Arista ones easily, but goes off to confront a 'strange' one that catchers her attention, while everyone else is centered on Yui. And g-d help Elder Theo if she's not happy with his answer. As I said, she is a delight and I truly love her.

Now, poor Yui. . . well Iason's advise came a bit late in the piece didn't it? The poor boy.. .he really would have been just a child when the War broke out and he would have seen slaughters, not battles. No wonder he collapsed screaming at those memories. In a way I'm glad that we are only quickly hearing about them, rather than seeing them directly like we did with the other awakenings. Yui's reactions and Erins' brief discriptions to the others are enough to let us know that what ever happened has shook these battle hard men to the core. Our imaginations can shock us more than any intense details can.

The question now is, will we get to see a bit more of Yui's adult years and his death or will these only be touched upon before he goes for his swim to the present day?

And of course, what will he be like when awakened? How does he cope with all that he has just seen and reconcile it with his present. (between you and me, it wouldn't surprise me if he turns out to be a latent empath as well. . . .it seems somehow to be a Warrior trait to a certain regard and Yui always has seemed to be able to read people very well. . .a very good trait for a furniture to have, which is why he was probably so successful as one :) )

As to Raoul and Kai. . . yes I know (sips her coffee) but that little scene where Raoul rests his head on Yui's in a mode of comfort, which he did many many chapters ago to Kai and that Kai upon seeing this, remembers the gesture as well makes me feel, that somewhere along the line, there should be some 'closure' between these two and the past that they shared. Not as 'massive' as the one in the first book, where Riki just about blue Raoul to pieces, but a more gentler brief moment.

If I can be so bold. . . at the next Lord's Dance ( there will be one won't there?) Raoul and Kai go off for a quiet chat, and as Yui looks on Raiman just walk over and says something like, it's just two old friends, coming to terms with the present. And then each shortly returns at peace to his lovers arms.. . .

Sorry if I've overstepped any bounds, but sometimes stray thoughts can spark other thoughts as well.

Well, I guess the coffee has been finished for another day. . . .hope our next meeting is soon, as the poor boys have really been left on a cliff hanger this time around, and my nerves are very frayed :)

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From ANON - jishe on September 01, 2009
OMG!!! For a moment i actually thought Yui will wake up in theis chapter!!! T-T To bad he didn't...but at the same time i'm relived, cause that's the awakening i most likely DON'T want to see...or read about...
Anyway, each time i'm liking more and more Elder Theo (you see, i remember the name!!). He is just NOT an elder (i'm taking about the crazy ones), from his clothes to his behavior and feelings. Maybe because he is emphatic so he actually understant peoples feeling he is like that; no matter what i really like him.
I'm guessing the "final battle" is going to be one a hell out of a bettle, specially because not only they are going to fight, but (i'm guessing again) the people from Yasuo also will be, and aparently even their women can kick some asses...taht will be great!!!
i don't know what else to write, only that: PLEASE continue soon!! The next chapter is going to be epic!!!!!!!
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From KatzeRaoul on September 01, 2009
wow, just wow!! What can I say to that chappie.*smiles*
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From barrie18 on August 16, 2009
Whoops. .. in all my ramblings I forgot one thing. . .Your portrayal of Omaki and Yousi have given them a new depth and personality as the story develops. Yousi has a shyness and a loving heart that is becomes more apparent in each chapter. And Omi, although still a devil, has a depth that truly came across in the scene in the previous chapter where he tells Raoul that Yui has to tuck the children in and still watch over them. . . Who would have thought that the 'comic' had such depth of feeling.. . .

When characters grow like that, it truly makes a story worth the read :)
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From KatzeRaoul on August 16, 2009
This was a very good chappie, I liked it very much, I am really happy that they have all been found and soon they will return home.*smiles*
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From barrie18 on August 15, 2009
Coffee and scones my Lady?

First off thank you for the treat of this turning up when it was still my weekend, Whether it was intended or not, it brought a smile to my face as I settled down to enjoy the story.

Well to start at the beginning, I really enjoy how you answered my many quires as this part of their tale jumped leaps and bounds.

But these are 'men' my Lady and they are not thinking. . . (no wonder Jupiter is female) and we are dealing with a 'mother' who can only see so far because her son is involved.

To recap, so you can see what I'm on about. . .
We were all worried about Raoul's awakening and what he would suffer, even Yui. who by all accounts will suffer more than any of them.

The only ones who have a clue as to what Yui experienced are on a space ship that seems to be out of reach.

No one on Amoi has a 'strong' connection to Ancient Yui and Lady Erin can't link only feel the emotions that go on in his head.

Circumstances are now forcing her hand, and she has to try and contact Riki which could set Yui off.

Both sides seem to think that if contact is made with Riki and Yui awakens at that point he will be able to use the mind's eye and get Ancient Yui home.

If they can't reach Riki and ancient Yui starts to awake then Erin will put a mind block on him and knock him out until the others return.

The Elders on Amoi have stated that the message if contact is made must be made quickly because they won't be able to maintain the link for a great period of time.

So what happens if Yui is in the midst of awakening with Riki there and the link is cut off? They can't rightly put a clamp on him at that point can they?

Unless another empath (and not necessarily the one that has turned up on Yasuo) reveals powers that he is not even aware of. . . ( We really don't have a clue about Raoul. .. all we know is he has the most powerful mind around and is it my imagination or does he seem to be more aware of things, more in touch than he was before this all happened.) is able to maintain the link once the Elders drop out.

And why are we being pushed (very subtly mind you) to take note of Heiku, what's hiding in his little head?

(passes over more coffee and scones)

I really have to admit that who ever was grabbing at Riki in Raoul's mind is a puzzle. Good or evil? And it all ties in with these new set of Elders on Yasuo, that is a certainty. I think we all agree that confrontation will occur, but where? On the way home? On Amoi itself? Or do they head back into space after delivering the Maidens and get reinforcements. And who will be involved in what will be the final battle?

Oh Lady, your evil characters are truly that, and I love the way they twist a tale to make themselves innocent. . .the scary part is they really believe what they are saying. . . People who believe in the purity of their bloodline are to my mind the most dangerous people around. Isn't it ironic that just that belief would have been a Blondie's view before all this took place?

Well enough rambling. .. thank you for joining me for a cuppa, and I'll look forward to seeing where you take us next.

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From ANON - jishe on August 15, 2009
Great a new chapter!!! I cry a lot in this one...well i actually cry a lot in ALL of your chapters, but that's good, isn't? It mean your write call get to the hearth of your readers and...i'm just talking sh%&$)!!! Anyway, nice chapter. I love the fact the FINALLY made it to the planet and the girls...of course the other two nut also made it to the crazy Elders, but that make the history more and more interesting.
So, will Yui awake on the net chapter? I will like that, not because the suffering he is going to pass (my poor yui!!!) but that he'll became a real warrior...so cool!!!!
And Elder T...i forgot the name, but the one with the empathic gift...he is nut!!! I like him!!! XD
See you soon!
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From barrie18 on July 28, 2009
Coffee, milk, sugars and plenty of scones... Sit down my Lady, hope you have time to spare, because there's much to discuss :)

(sips her coffee ) Can you understand why Jupiter did what she did? I'm talking about Amoian Society in the present day pre awakenings. Why furniture, pets and sexual restrictions. Was she so worried about them going astray again that she became to over protective over her Blondies? And strict in punishing the Warriors who later are the mongrels for not giving her absolute power?

The 'men who've awakened including Kai and Raimen haven't even blinked at the current situation, and yet Erin who is newly awakened is already aware of what went on in modern times and is questioning it.

Since the Queen is far from reticent wouldn't you th;ink at some stage these issues would be discussed with Jupiter? Especially the 'pet' issue. And would she still look so kindly on Iason when she finds out about Riki's 'past'? It is a worry. . .

Another scone?

And what was this about Erin saying the boys need to find 'true' brides so they can get them some heirs. . . I know, I know. . . you can love more than one person, but there is 'love' and being 'in love' and I'm romantic enough to believe there is a great difference between the two. Erin and Yuri, perhaps settled for a better term. Erin was already betrothed to Kai when he fell 'in love' with Raiman, and I would accept that Kai came to 'love' Erin and the same would hold true for the Intellect couple. But I imagine Erin didn't just throw things for the fun of it and must have spent many nights alone while Kai was out 'doing his thing' (I'm sure I've said this before, but I think it worth repeating XD)

Iason and Riki are so tightly 'in love' that any women who became involved with them would really feel out of it. So it is either a loveless union to save their sanity or these girls have to realize they only come second place, if that. I imagine the boys would be kind and polite and do their duty, but lets face it, their eyes are really only for each other, and alot of guilt would be flying around in all directions.

So surely Jupiter must have an idea or two how to produce heirs, still have a family unit, but keep the boys traditionally 'unmarried'?

More coffee?

Remember earlier I said I was a romantic at heart. . . well I've always believed that 'in love' always meant faithful to the one. Now I know that Kai and Raimen are definitely exceptions to that rule (I keep remembering a movie who's name escapes me, where the line goes. .. What's the word for a male slut? Reply.. there isn't one) and not that I disparage what they have. If it works for them, well good on them, but. . . You wouldn't expect to see this behaviour in Iason and Riki, which brings me to my other problem couple. . .Raoul and Yui.

Right now I have 4 Raoul's in my mind. There is the Raoul who is the Ancient, who pre the War, happily participated in many a 'romp' with the merry duo. There is the Raoul, who loved and lost the Warrior Yui. Thirdly the Raoul who had his mind wiped and became Kai's lover after Warrior Yui's death. And Fourthly the modern day version who had plenty of current day issues to contend with and now has to put all 4 versions together.

So at the moment, it looks like modern Raoul is out of the picture, because he was quite happy to fall in Kai's arms upon being awakened, fair enough. His last thoughts about possibly being stripped naked by Raimen before the evenings end. . .well .. .what can I say. . ..trying to understand, but. . . .

Yui is still on Amoi and I guess, what happens in Space, stays in Space, but would Raoul be happy with that (the one who loved a Warrior and lost him? or the current version?)

Do you think that before they come home there is a chance of some sort of communication with Yui? Perhaps that would help Raoul combine these separate parts quickly and forewarn Yui about what has taken place, Raoul has awakened and emotions from the past are running in all directions.

Another scone?

As to Yui's awakening, it just hit me, and perhaps you aren't aware of it yourself, but he is the only Ancient so far who was raped, tortured and then murdered. Everyone else, except for Yuri who died in her bed, died a quick death.

So I imagine even though we all worried over Raoul's awakening, Yui's one is really going to be painful, as he faces his death.

It would be 'nice' for a better word if Raoul was there for his awakening, but it would make life easier if Yui was already awakened when Raoul returns planet side.

And of course it would be nice if once all these personalities combine, Yui and Raoul decide that they will follow Riki and Iason's lead. But then again that is the 'romantic' in me believing that being 'in love' means being faithful to the one and not jumping in bed with the many :)

Well, I see we've emptied the coffee pot and the scone plate only has a few crumbs on it. So I guess it's time we go our separate ways until next time. XD

Look forward to another reason to chat with you soon. . hope the coffee was hot enough for you XD

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From KatzeRaoul on July 28, 2009
Wow, that was a long one, very long but very good. I am very pleased that Raoul is now awake this is a huge step in the right direction.*smiles* Now we just need Yui to wake up and then let them see each other, to seal that last little bit of fear that they no doubt will have and all will be good for them. Now we just need Iason's mother to awaken then we will have the whole gang back together.*smiles again* I do wonder though who were those men that were reaching out to Riki and Iason, and how did they reach out 'cause it wasn't part of Raouls memories(makes one wonder if this isn't some sort of trap). And who is this other Elder that is helping Lord Bastard,(you know you SHOULD change his name to that, 'cause that is the only thing I will address him with)and what injuries did he get and how? Many questions, that will have to wait to be answered of the story or should I say their JOURNEY has only just begun.
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From ANON - jishe on July 19, 2009
Hello!!! Finally a new chapter! A lot of time pass for you to let us enjoy this new chapter that, by the way, it incredible from beginig to end.
The sex-party of the start...OMG!!! That was mind blowing and the hell of a goog lemon scene. You are really good for that ones!!! Congratulations! You make soooooo happy! XD
An the last part...well, then a talk about Eiri, it was great and frithening... and soo anguish for Raoul. I've come to like him a lot, and what he is about to experiment...really bad thing, specially because Yui isn't with him...and also, i don't think me...myself, will like the way he dies (Yui).
Anyway i just hope you continue soon, beacuse next chapter it's going to be and explosive one (literally)!!!! See you!
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From KatzeRaoul on July 19, 2009
Thanx for the update, this chappie was very good. The threesome was so DROOL worthy!! MAN some times I wish I was one of them, ok ALL the time I wish.*wink* The whole part with the Queen was informative, she had learned a lot since her awakening, but she DOES need to listen to what everyone is TELLING her and that is STAY IN BED!!*man how 'bout I put her over my knee, instead of Kai* The interaction between her and Jupiter was interesting, it was like watching the Great Debate them going back and forth with their veiws neither one wanting to relent. To tell you the truth I think Jupiter won that battle. And poor Iason I think he is being pushed out unfairly, Riki would in MY opinion be better off if he HAD Iason there from the start instead of keeping him out and then when it's the last resort and Raoul is so far gone in his greif tag Iason in and say help me keep Raoul grounded.(as you can see I am also really MAD at Riki right now, not just for leaving Iason out knowing that he could help, but for HURTING Iason...even if it was NOT Riki's intention)*huffs* Oh well Riki IS stubborn, and he does not know the meaning of the phrase *get help when needed* no he just takes it all on his own. Then what will he do when he gets Raoul and himself hurt and Iason wont be able to help 'cause the deed is already done, thank GOD that it has NOT come to that yet but it could and he will have no one to blame but himself and his stubbornness. Though Iason will blame himself as well 'cause he then would feel he should have pushed more to get to Riki and not allowed him to keep him from his mind.*sighs* Oh well, thanks again for the update, at lets hope that Riki can hold Raoul in check until they land or this whole thing would be for not.*smiles*
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From barrie18 on July 19, 2009
My dear 'lady' if I got down on bended knee and asked oh so nicely for you to get out the next chapter as soon as possible, to put me out of my misery, would that be asking too much XD

This chapter was very plot driven, quite different from the usual character development of previous chapters. And it proved a very powerful chapter.

But before that, lets look at Erin and Jupiter.

Erin and Jupiter seem to have very different views on government control. And although they seem to have a 'peace' between them at the moment, it might not last because they both come from different political arenas. Jupiter to maintain peace has always maintained control, Erin it seems believes in individual rights. And yet as an empath unless she was able to turn it 'off' and people knew it was off. . .isn't this also an invasion of privacy? Is it so different from Jupiter in stealth mode? One would never know what Erin is 'reading', but there have been instances, when I think it was Raiman, knew that Jupiter was nearby because he sensed her. So surely others would have that ability as well. Whereas no one would know what Erin is 'picking' up.

Both ladies, will need to find a balance between them as a new Amoi develops. I would hate to see Jupiter give up her current personality to revert back to Living Text mode because she is no longer needed in this new world. Perhaps Yuri is needed, to give both their political ideas /agendas the balance that at the moment is missing.

As to what is happening on the ship. .

I really liked the imagery of the storm that is Raoul's mind at the moment and that Riki is dealing with it on his own. And of course the angry words between Kai and Iason. . . one a lover and the other a father, each seeing things from a different point of view when it comes to Riki, although Iason has more 'right' on his side just because he has more knowledge of who Riki actually is in this lifetime.

Kai of course, is defensive over dealing with so much death, and yet I don't think Iason meant it as a walk in the park.. He was just stating a fact.. .Riki is scared of dead bodies, and that is what he would be dealing with in Raoul's memories. Kai's attitude as far as Iason was concerned was "Riki can deal with it", where as the truth is Kai never knew of this fear.

My guess is though that Riki didn't spare Iason because he needs an anchor, but rather he doesn't want Iason to suffer because of what is going on in Raoul's mind. After all he and Raoul do have a history and a friendship. Even though Riki would suffer to see and feel Raoul's 'pain', how much more so would it be for Iason considering his history with Raoul.

So when they land on this planet, Raould will finally be allowed to let loose the emotions that Kai locked away all those centuries ago, and poor Yui won't be there physically (pehaps mentally. . that minds eye seems to come in pretty handy at times XD)

Once again a great chapter.

Looking forward to the next chapter
:)

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From KatzeRaoul on July 04, 2009
Thanks for the update, even though I am little sad that Iason was not in this. It was still really good, can't wait to see what happen next.
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