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From ANON - huntee-x-hunte on September 26, 2015
I finished the whole story in two days, and needless to say, I LOVE it!! It's amazing how spot-on the characterizations are--like, it really feels like this could have happened in the actual story itself. I found it interesting how well you managed to write Raoul and Guy's dynamic, as well, despite having very little to go off of. This is definitely one of my favorite AnK fanfics of all time.
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From ANON - mariepattinson-snape on January 29, 2012
thank you for sending me the link to this amazing story :)
i can just picture it, riki shouting katzes name out while been taken by iason! lol
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From ANON - CYNAGA on October 17, 2009
You are a fantastic writer - this was wonderful~! Story and characterizations were delicious. Smut was sooooo nice. Thanks. :)
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From ANON - Lisse on September 06, 2009
Woah! I love this chapter and beginning to love this story itself more and more. ^^ I love Riki in this chapter. XD
I like how you connected this story with the original plot. ^^

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From ANON - Lisse on September 05, 2009
Up until this chapter, the plot is really good, smooth. One thing I don't like about is how Riki behaved to be submissive in some of the chapters. despite that, I love the story flow. Keep it up.
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From ANON - jishe on August 20, 2009
Hai there!!! Thanks for the epilogue. I also thought the same or al least i ask myself if you wouldn't write one...thanks God (and Barrie 18) for it!!!
Nice ending for this amazing fic. Maybe...the lemon part was missing (jiji) but the were so cute with each other, that it really doesn't matter.
See you soon!!!
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From barrie18 on August 20, 2009
Thank you so much for giving us all a look in the future to see how 'happy' everyone is. It was really a lovely epilogue, which had a nice twist at the end for Katze, and Riki a chance to mouth off in his own mongrel way XD

I know I was smiling, and I'm sure the others who followed this story also had big grins on their faces.

Thanks again.

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From ANON - jishe on August 14, 2009
TT-TT It's over, i can't believe it!!! It was so...suddent....T-T...it's over....
The ending was...unexpected i should say. It will never ocurred to me all that about jupiter's love, and riki, and katze...Maybe that's why you take a lot of time writing this last chapter (i almost get nuts waiting for this!!!)
I like it. Maybe i'm a little sad because like i already say it was to quickly and sudden, but it's was a nice and very romantic and...tender (in certain way) ending, specially because my Raould was happy!!!!! XD
The most "liking" part for me, was that Riki turns out to be the "bad-cool gay of the movie"!!!! Buajajajajajajjajajaajaja (evil laugh), that was the best!!!!
So, in the end: Your fic was a great and interesting fic. The history had a lot of content and the relationships between the characters, the complexity of the feelings...all made it just unforgetable!
Congrats!!!!!
See you latter!!!!

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From barrie18 on August 14, 2009
Glad to hear that you're fine. .

To the 'last' chapter. ..

I have to admit I'm shocked that it is the last chapter, as I really thought there was more to go, but hey its your story. . have fun with it.

As to the chapter itself, well it came out completely from left field, so yes you did surprise me in the end :)

I think you tried to show that Guy felt something for Raoul by protecting him from Jupiter so to speak, but it was a very quick moment and even though they were their on the spot they really didn't play a role in the end and it was very easy to forget that they were even there.

Jupiter's revelations was a highlight though. . although I've never understood the concept of 'androids' as artificial humans, it was a nice touch that they were all human, based on a dead lover (how tragically romantic. ..mind you she was and is a bitch to the end) and that Riki was an experiment gone wrong.

Of course Katze turning out to be an Elite scientist was a shock. . .but with a name like Rogue.. what else can you expect. . . rofl absolute genius there.

As to the ending, I agree with you. . . a story should end with an "I love you". . . but I think you cut the ending very abruptly.

It was just a quick I love you and a kiss (like the way you took canon again and made it the 'first' deep kiss unlike the 'last' one we all look cross eyed at.

However, it might be an idea, just to tag on an epilogue a couple of months down the track, just to hear how things have developed on Amoi without Jupiter and of course to have a more indepth look into what has happened with our 2 couples and one ex Furniture.

But whatever you do. . . just know I enjoyed going on this adventure with you :)

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From barrie18 on August 13, 2009
Don't know if you'll ever see this, but you've spoiled us all with your constant updates and now that you've 'disappeared' I'm just dropping this line (because I can't work out any other way to reach you, and I've gone into 'mother' mode) to hope that you are alright and that the only reason you haven't updated is because you are having a wonderful time doing something and enjoying yourself completely.
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From barrie18 on August 03, 2009
Oh Hespera, what can I say. ... Iason and Riki are just so. .. volatile. .. will they ever have a kind word to say to each other, and get past all the tough guy 'shit' and say how they really feel. . .(they do show it in the bed, but sometimes things have to be said out loud)

As to Raoul and Guy, I loved that bit and Guy's explanation. It still leaves the big question. . .. but you can sense that at least for the moment they are growing in 'some' direction. It really will be a question of not whether Guy is in love with Riki or Raoul, but who comes first in his heart.. . .

As to the seduced Blondies. . . . I'm going to throw a few questions at you, do what you want with them.

We know that Raoul and Iason were lovers, Iason is 'shocked' at what the Blondies are now doing (rather do as I say not as I do eh?) but surely there must have been other deviant Blondies out there, that no one knew about?

And no matter how clever mongrels are with sex, . . seduction can work both ways.. . .So is there a Blondie who can play the game in reverse and 'rescuse Jupiter' and destroy the rebelllion?

Evil thoughts I know, sorry, can't help it :)

As to Katze, once again I love the way you played on your knowledge of the books. ..because I don't think many realize where "Furniture come from"

looking forward to the next chapter. . .

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From ANON - jishe on August 03, 2009
Hello there! As you say, i like the chapter, specially because of my favorite couple, mean RAOUL and Guy...jijiji, interprete that.
The "voice" al alone and calling...that's Jupiter, right? It's the only one who comes to my mind, so i just suppose she feels alone because her blondies get "kidnaped" (I put that on "..." because at this time of the game, they are ovbliously very happy of the situation XD ).
To bad you just show one of the many couples form by Blondie+Mongrel...yea, i know. Showing them all, will be to much of a pain in the ass or just, to long...but...OMG!!! Just imagine all that sexy couples together....(nose bleed....)...cof, cof...sorry...
Againg with my favorite guy...Raoul. I'm happy, because he is happy :P He deserve it!
And...i don't know what else to write...i'm watching tv...jiji. Bye!!!

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From barrie18 on August 01, 2009
:)

All's fair in Love and War, and I would say that whatever is taking place between Yani and Pelias is happening behind the other closed doors in Dana Bahn between the mongrels and their Blondie captives. Jupiter really wasn't too smart in making sure her Blondies were so sexually innocent in that respect. Really the oldest trick in the book :)

As to our boys. . . well Iason might not be able to say the "L" word, but by working along side Riki to overthrow Jupiter is taramount to shouting it out loud in a public forum.

As to Guy and Raoul. . . ooooh. . .I like the fact that Iason told Guy the truth, and I'm sure that in Blondie terms he was saying it very straight forward (ie he fucked you, you fucked him) but Guy really doesn't get the fact that Raoul gave him power over him by letting him do the 'fucking'.

As to Iason still being jealous over Guy I can understand that because no one (including Guy) knows what he is really feeling at this stage.

Guy might now think it is because he broke his promise to Raoul about hurting Iason, but its probably more Raoul's interpretation of the events. Raoul doesn't know that Guy didn't know until afterwards who he actually shot. As far as Raoul is concerned Guy shot Iason to get Riki out of there. And Guy thinking his shot was deadly allowed Riki to ring Katze to appease Riki.

So these two have alot to disucss before they come to an understanding. But even then, I still think other events have to take place for Raoul to really believe that Guy loves him.

But who is the mysterious contact helping the rebels? It would really be sneaky of you if it was someone who we haven't met with yet. So my guess is its either Jupiter, setting a trap, because I can't believe she is sitting there as hopeless as they think she is. I'm sure she must have a back up disc somewhere that keeps her going until her blondies or new administrators come into being.

Or it's Katze. Always delving and finding out things he shouldn't, computer savey and from what I've seen so far, happy to help Iason and Riki when he can.

Looking forward to where your mind goes next :)

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From ANON - jishe on August 01, 2009
Hai!!! I still have work but not so much...and you publish the new chapter so quickly! I'll always love you for that! (The fastes writer on the west)
Nice chapter...dirty (PxY)...sweet (RxI) and...funny? The fact that Raould is mad with Guy isn't funny but the part of "Iason's help" to Guy, who by the way it's really dense, that was funny...he just sound like a mother taking care of her child...XD
Other thing...so they are really thinking of taking down Jupiter?Mmmmmm, or maybe something else...I don't know. At this time of the day my brain just won't work right...it's dead...poor brain, poor brain... (as you can see i'm going nut sooooooo...see you soon!!!!)
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From ANON - jishe on July 30, 2009
Sorry for the late, i had to work....T-T
I just read the last chapter...OMG! That was intense...in a sexual way. I see how the thing are moving...like they want to "inverse" de society or maybe just stop the crazy Jupiter and star a new society were they will be the same or something....i like the idea of Blondies-pets...jajajajajajajajajajaja!!! But eventually, that will end bad just, because it's foundation in slavery.
It doesn't matter, i0ll just wait to see what are you planing and enjoy it.
The other couple (i'm sorry i didn't learn their names) jijiji, i see the future and see a lot of sex!!!! Buajajajajajajaja (evil laugh)...Riki and Iason...they where already in it (good for them!) and Guy and Raoul...definitively good things don't last for ever and their problems start. Will be good if Guy just say "i love you"...hard because he doesn't know it...
See you soon!!! (more like read you soon?)
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