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From ANON - jishe on July 30, 2009
Hi there! Last time i wrote one review for two chapter and that was bad, you deserve ono for one, so here it goes.
Chapter 28: OMG!!! Riki and Guy are nuts!!! How the hell are tehy going to tanagura and kidnap "the important blondies" including iason ans raoul?!!! He was right (Raoul) Jupiter will get nuts!!! Anyway...if the kipnap them for making their fantasies true, i support them!!! Because that are my fantasies too!!!
What are they planing as a total picture, i have not the tinny clue...really....or maybe is my dream come true: Destroy Jupiter and all her bullshit!!!! (Sorry the bad words...jiijiji)
Next chapter!!!!
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From barrie18 on July 29, 2009
::in very small voice:: sorry, really very happy. . . love the thought you've given all this and the character development. .

enjoyed this chapter. . .very much....I like the idea of seducing the Blondies to get them on side. And since most Blondies here don't seem to be 'deviants' like our favorite two, I'm sure they'll come on side quickly.

As to our couples. .. rofl. . Well Riki and Iason are just being Riki and Iason. seems they've come to understand each other.

As to Raoul and Guy. . . like the idea of Raoul losing it. Now does Guy go to Riki for advice on what's wrong with his Blondie? Or will Iason be the voice of reason and tell him what the 'real' problem is?

till the next update :)
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From teenrachelsoon on July 29, 2009
Hi. I just found this story and read all your chapters. It's really good and I'm enjoying it very much! Oh dear, I just can't wait for what is to come next! It's exciting and something I couldn't stop reading. Especially how you left certain chapters at such cliffhangers. I wanted to kill you till I realized there was the next chapter. hehe.. You're awesome! And.. the whole banter between Iason and Riki is just plain sexy. lol.. I hope you keep writing and update soon! I can't wait! :D
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From LadyIkari on July 29, 2009
First of all, sorry for my silence over the past week or so. I been reading along but haven't had a chance to comment. Now on to the comments!! *bangs head against a wall* The suspense is killing me!! I don't whether to cry, cheer, scream, laugh, or jump off my roof of my house!!! Any hints on is going to happen. I got some ideas, but it is likely not to happen. (can't predict the future with you.) Anyways, keep it up!
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From barrie18 on July 28, 2009
Yes, quite surprised by the turn of events, burt all it does is raise more questions and thoughts. .

Forgive me, and I'm probably reading this all wrong, but I still get the feeling that Guy is 'settling' for Raoul. It's only now that he has been completely rejected by Riki that his thoughts turn exclusively to Raoul, a safe haven where he knew he was loved. Rather like when Riki turned to him as a pairing partner and he gave Riki that same security. He may have taken the 'pet' ring as a remembrance, and perhaps it is now meaning more, but still, until I see him put Raoul in front of Riki in his life, I (and probably Raoul too) will always have his doubts.

As to the kidnapping, well what are the Rebels trying to do? Equal Rights, Citizenship? Destruction of Jupiter? So far all we've heard of is damage done, but not the reason for the fighting.

As to Jupiter, she is not an idiot. She knows it is the mongrels who are behind this. She must have discovered by this time that Riki is no longer in the brothel, I can't imagine she would let him out of her sight so easily especially since he has that perfect DNA. So why hasn't she acted yet?

Ok so Raoul and Iason have been taken, but once again, Jupiter isn't too happy with Raoul, and surely she must be looking very cross eyed at Iason at this moment. Because without knowing the 'facts's' she can compute quite logically (and wrongly) that both Blondies were involved with this kidnapping and are now joining up with their lovers against her orders.

So what is to prevent her in saying, well he may have been my favorite 'son', but this is a bit too much. I'll just rid myself of those two, get out their genetic makeup again and re create them. Only this time I'll make sure to tweak out that deviant streak they both seem to have. End of story.

Love what you are doing, extremely curious to where you go next. Keeping my fingers crossed for that 'happy ending'

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From ANON - jishe on July 27, 2009
Hello!!! Sorry, sorry, sorry, sorry, sorry, sorry, sorry!!! It's not that a forget you, it's more like a have LOTS...TONS of work, because it's the last week of the academic year and well...you know... In fact, i should be working but i just take 5 minutes to read you (because there's OBVIOUSLY two more chapters!!!) and review...
Well, the chapter 26...i don't know if a want to say...aaaaa, poor Guy or idiot Guy. When will he understand that Riki...just doesn't fell anything for him except friendship? And more important, when he will actually SEE the incredible man just waiting for him? Of course, it's love, and it doesn't understant any of that reasons but...
Chapter 27: Hot sex!!!! >///< XDXDXDXDXDXDXDXDXDXDXD I need it...yes, call me a pervert but, i need it. My diary dosis of fic-sex!!! @-@''' Anyway. My sweet and poor Raoul tormented by the other idiot!!! The doesn't deserve it! Riki and Sexy-Iason (riki say it, firsth!!!)...you always say to keep my hope but, i can't avoid to wonder...where will they end...? It's just that not only Jupiter it's in their way but themselfs, thy are to much proud and stubborn and...there's also the thing with Riki's freedom. I always say that what the hell! Go with Iason, but of course been a pet isn't actually something pretty nice. So, i understand him.
In the end, the only thing left, it's wait for your amazing imagination to surprise us!!!
PD: Daryl!!! I can't imagine what he saw when he enter that room....or meybe a can picture it a little.... (nose bleeding...)
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From barrie18 on July 27, 2009
Well, if my unending questions keeps you motivated. . my next question is tantrums? what tantrums?

As to the chapter, has everyone gone nuts? And I'm not saying that as critical. . .but everyone (except Guy who was missing from this chapter) is running on high emotions and thinking has gone out the window.

Raoul is on edge because he is protecting Iason, Jupiter has lost a few sprockets especially in her attitude towards Raoul. Iason is trying to piece together his life and failing miserably. And Katze, well he is the last bastion of common sense. The narrator no one will listen to.

As to Riki, he is totally lost isn't he. Apparently the leader of the rebellion, and yet he needs to seek Iason out. And Iason, well if he could only bring himself to actually say the "L" word a lot of problems might be solved.

Once again though I've noted that you've taken dialogue from the book and twisted in here giving it an entire new dimension. I really enjoy those little touches

So where to now? Does Riki coming sneaking back to Iason's apartment, and get caught out by Jupiter? Or does Iason go into Ceres to claim his 'lover'. . note I said lover not pet at this point, because somewhere along the line, if this story is going to move to the next stage, besides admitting he has emotions and feelings for Riki, he can no longer think of him as just a 'pet'. . Yes Iason in a dominating force in Riki's life, but the fact is Iason is also dominated by Riki. It really isn't a case of one bending to the other, but each of them moving in rhythm to the other.

And where is Guy in all this? Can he really be sitting there accepting that Riki is no longer his. Does Raoul even cross his mind at all?

To where ever you go next, even if it's back to Dana Bahn for further confrontation. . .I look forward to it

Till the next chapter :)

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From barrie18 on July 26, 2009
Besides driving you crazy with questions. . . I just realized I never did say what I thought about the actual chapter XD so here goes. . .

I like the way you are incorporating canon from the book into your tale. The part where Riki tells Guy about holding on to things is a perfect example of it. Although, the problem with Riki's example here is he let go of his pride to save Guy and still 'lost' him because of Iason's manipulations. There was no way he was ever going to win that one.

But by choosing Freedom over Iason, you've changed a very important part of the story around. In the canon Riki is kidnapped and it is Iason who is worried sick.. " Who took him, is he well, does he miss me etc etc."

However, Iason , at the moment has been shot and is unconscious. Riki knows he's been shot, but now he is left wondering "Is he alive? Is he alright? etc"

Because I can't this story making the airwaves just because Raoul would want to keep it quiet and out of Jupiters way. She would want to tear Ceres down for one of them shooting her favorite son.

Once again sorry I didn't say any of this earlier, I just got carried away with it all XD
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From ANON - barrie18 on July 24, 2009
Very nice chapter indeed. Glad to see that Riki is showing some regret, although at the end he seems to be able to put it all behind him and become Riki the Dark again. You would think though, he would be ripping his hair out trying to figure out a way to discover if Iason is alive or dead.

As for Guy, well his actions prove what I've been 'screaming' the entire time. He might love Raoul, but is 'in love' with Riki. . .

Well, until Iason recovers or at least is able to talk, Raoul is left on his own. Will he leave it be? Try to find Riki, avenge Iason? Confront Guy?

Personally, I think he is going to sit back and do nothing. He himself is too shell shocked over the events that just happened. But what will be the telling point is Iason.

How far will his obsession with Riki now take him. Will he try and find him, or let him have his freedom? Will he retreat once more in himself through the pain of losing Riki, or lose the plot completely and try to hunt down who took him. And will Raoul help or hinder if that is the case.

Yes, I know a lot of questions. But I want your thinking cap out to see as many possibilties as you can, as you write the next chapter. .

Good luck and waiting impatiently
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From barrie18 on July 23, 2009
So all roads lead to Dana Bahn .. .

However, "But Guy already broke a promise." Did I miss something.. Did Guy make a promise to someone and what was it?

And now Katze has been called, so I reckon he'll get hold of Raoul, who just happens to be a doctor.

And this mess all took place, because Iason didn't tell Raoul what he was doing and put on a Robot suit. ..

Now the next big question is what does happen in Dana Bahn? Does Riki confront Guy over what happened? Do Riki and Guy confront their past. . . or does it all come to a blow up and Guy loses it. Here he thought he was being a hero and instead might be looked upon as the villan for shooting Iason. And why the hell did Riki go with him in the first place? Iason has just been shot, he admits he loves Iason. . .so does freedom mean that much more to him, that he can just run like that?

And Iason, well he doesn't have a clue as to who shot him. . .yet, but I bet Raoul does. . . .and would he tell Iason who did this. . .because only one person would.

And more importantly when the hell will Iason say the "L" word XD You would think after Riki finally said it, Iason would have caved as well

Looking forward to the next update

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From KotoriSensei on July 23, 2009
OMG!!! I knew it!!! Iason didn't tell Raoul a bit, and so...this happen...T-T
Poor Iason, with the shoot and all, but well, he is a blondie...he will heel soon...right?
Anyway, i get scared, not because all the action and the guns and that stuff, but for the place where they end...dana burn....gives me the creeps!!! So, i'm starting to think of the end of the anime (ovas) and...i whant to cry!!! But as i say before (and you support me) there's always hope...
Please tell me you have this incredible and crazy idea for ending with Jupiter or i don't know, she get mad and starts to love Riki and Guy...XD I don't think so but, hei! I can dream whatever i whant!!!
See you soon...please...SOONNNNNN!!!! (Like, in two hours or something...better just one...jijijiji)
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From ElegantPaws on July 22, 2009
My apologies for invading your space, but there is absolutely nowhere on this site to say THANK YOU for your ongoing support. So am doing so here. Not really the right place to do so, but no other options, like on other sites.

Cheers...I always smile when I see your reviews. Again,I apologies, in your case I was left with no other choice. LOL! Hugs

EP
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From ANON - jishe on July 20, 2009
Jajajajajajajajajajajajajajajajjajajjajajjajjajajajajajajajajajajajajajajajajajajajajajajajajajajajajaja!!!!! I new it!!! Aja! aja! aja! aja! Who is your mommy?!!! Aja, aja, aja!!!! XD
You have no idea how much i laugh!!! Thanks honey! I'm a genius!!!!
So i suppous that Katze was the one who get the robot suit for Iason, yes? That doesn't matter actually, but is the most probable. So, what next...Guy is going to "rescue" Riki...please, don't let something bad happen to him!!! Raoul will get insane! And Iason and Riki...what about Jupiter? A bomb will be a good strategy or a computer virus (but somehow i don't believe that work with her...she is something serious) or the ninja turtles!!! Jijijiji. Kiding.
I'm happy, thank's for that.
Please next chapter soon!!!
PD: i keep smiling and with my victory dance!!!
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From barrie18 on July 20, 2009
Rofl. .. I really can't decide whether to applaud you or yell at you, because this chapter certainly throws everything off balance.

And it does make Iason's angsty behavior in the previous chapter a farce of sorts. There he is moping away in the dark, and meanwhile he got himself a robot suit and is still banging Riki. He hasn't told this little side story to Raoul, who because of all the chaos, Iason caused by sending Riki off to the brothel in the first place, has now sent Guy away, and Guy, as he told Raoul before leaving, is going to break Riki out of there. . . kinda messy isn't it. . . rather like a black comedy at the moment, where you know no one is going to come out in one piece. And all because Iason has put on a robot suit.

So how many schemes are going to clash in trying to get Riki out of there. Does Iason ever tell Raoul what he's done now? And if he does, does Raoul find Guy in time to stop him before he gets himself killed?

As to Katze. . .what role will he now play in this game?

Somehow, my mind keeps turning to Shakespear's A Midsummers Night Dream, where everyone runs around muddling everything up because all those emotions were running riot, until the Fairy King took control. Well the only one who's emotions are not in play here are Katze's. . and a cool head is needed here. . .

Other than that, the fact that Riki spilled his guts to the 'robot' was a nice touch. The fact that the robot turned out to be Iason. . . well it depends so much on what happens next.

As I said earlier, don't know whether ot applaud or yell, but it was entertaining :)

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From LadyIkari on July 20, 2009
*bows deeply* I must bow to the master of suspense!! I would never guessed that Iason was the one!!! I was expected a large fight with Guy beig involved but this was much better!!!BTW, thanks for the link!! I found the translations of the book! Cant wait until the next update!!
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