Reviews for DxD Slut Girls - Revenge of an IncubusBy : animehentaiworks |
So where is update?
So where is the reptate? And I hope you show what is happening now in kuoh school? Is the orgy continuing there?
I'm sorry, but English is not my mother tongue, so I use the Google translator.
Thank you very much for the new chapter! I can't wait to see the next!
"Lucius and saji fucked all the female peerage ." It is sad that you did not detail this point, Sona female peerage rarely get any attention for themselves.
Needs a lot of work as it honestly reads like it's written like a 10-year-old. This is rude of me to say but honestly, I think it's needed. Please go back and reread chapters 1 and 2.
Literary excellence like " truth to be told raynare is his fav slut because she is extremly loyal to him " deserves a very special place in Hell and while, I have no doubt the author's first language isn't English. Frankly, that's no excuse if you can't write English well either don't, or try harder.
Use programs like Grammarly to check your work so you can remove the basic spelling mistakes. And for the love of god use Descriptions and actually decent dialog with Speech marks FOR FUCKS sake.
I don't expect a work of art but this is absolute gutter trash.
By the way, what happened with Gasper?
I'm sorry, but English is not my mother tongue, so I use the Google translator.
Amazing!!! I think it's your best story you've written here!!! I really hope that you will continue soon.
It is a pity that the last chapter was the shortest. But I hope that you will show more detailed orgies and debauchery in the future.
I have several requests and suggestions:
"Next Chapter : Sona and Grayfia" - Maybe better Sona and her peerage? I would like to see In detail how Lucius will break them all. And I think that Grafia deserves his personal chapter.
And I would like to see some POVs-chapter like Issei (a more detailed description of Lucius's personal dimension), Kiba and pervert duo (Does Lucius plan to make them his pawns?).
Can it be more logical to make Sonya a whore, like Rias, and not make part of Lucius' harem? She's from the family that killed his family.
Where is Kalawarner?
Anyway, I hope you will soon write the next chapter.
Have Lucius fuck Grayfia and Venelana Gremory as well in the future.
for the extra scenes, add muryama and katase, maybe even female teachers or some of sona's peerage
Awesome!
Finally fanfic where the Rias is transformed into a bitch and the jerk Issey dies.
Great idea for a story, although it's hard to read because of the grammar.
I look forward to the next chapter. Is every month you release the chapters?
You are, to put it bluntly, incredibly bad at this. Learn the proper grammar, structure, and spelling of the language you intend to write in.
I can't even tell what this is supposed to be because I literally cannot read whatever it is you've jizzed all over your keyboard and slapped online. This is literally the only advice I can give you.
Amazing! I can not wait to see the next chapter.
Really good, waiting for the next chapter, hope really soon
That was interesting. I hope you will soon continue.
Nice, this was a good read!!
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