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Reviews for Loss and Redemption

By : hawker748
  • From ANON - meowmix on August 06, 2004
    I must bow to the master! Your story is great! I think you dictate really well and I like how you keep everyone within character even while all these events make it so easy to do otherwise. I haven't finished it yet, but I'm sure I'll like it.

    meommix
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  • From ANON - josh on July 30, 2004
    Great story, I always wondered what it would be like if keitaro fell for Motoko. But, in the manga, Motoko does fall for him. He doesn't feel the same for her and tells her that he loves Naru. This is a very interesting alternate reality fanfic. I somehow know he will pick Naru before I read the final chapter. Either that, or I hope wholeheartedly that he picks Naru. It just seems like destiny.
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  • From ANON - Ken on July 23, 2004
    Hey man i just got done with your story and all i can say is .. wow its the best love hina fic i have read and with any of your future works or what ever the case is i would love to read them. your a truly good author and your stories are well worth the wait to read.. keep on writing man .

    Long Live Motoko & Keitaro - Ken -
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  • From ANON - Tammy Miller on July 21, 2004
    I really loved your story and I think that you got the pairing of Motoko and Keitaro just perfectly, I always thought that Motoko would be better for him than Naru would be. I hope that you do write a sequal 'cause I will gladly read it.


    From,

    Tammy Miller
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  • From ANON - Ian on July 01, 2004
    Damn good story!!! I want another one!!!!
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  • From ANON - Ian on July 01, 2004
    KICKASS!!!! Please continue! oh wait! There's more chapters! hahahahahahaha I'm gonna go read them right now. BUT! If you haven't compleeted the story by now please do so!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Narciso Adiaz on June 17, 2004
    Wonderfully written piece of work! Thanks the to excellent grammad chd choice of words, reading it was light and yablyable. I wish to see more of your work soon.

    I always thought that a Keitaro love-fanfic would eventually end up with him with either Mutsumi or Naru, but this fanfic highlights Motoko very well.
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  • From ANON - Kylaran on May 28, 2004
    Well written, I have to say. The style was nice, an informal way of png sng something so serious into the reader's hands. I myself am a Motoko fan, and I couldn't help but love the ending. I have one bit of criticism though. Although your story was well played from beginning to end, it was a bit too American in the quotes. They were effective, nonetheless, in bringing out the story, but may I suggest that something similar to quotes from Japanese history? I'm merely suging ing it, don't hurt me. XD Anyways, it is a deliciously great story, the sad parts well written. The emotion could've been played more, although it is definetaly enough to emphasize your point. If there is a sequel, I'd be happy to pre-read it if I could. Anyways, enough with my blabbering. The time spent reading this was well worth it. Keep writing, you will be able to make some awsome fanf



    ~Ja Ne
    ~Ky
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  • From migele on May 25, 2004
    great story.
    I will borrow the Idea with the marriege.
    but there will be a different story first.

    funny hardly anybody thought about that idea.

    oh yes, I would love to read some more from you. About love Hina/evangelion... I already thought about that too. there are slight problems but it could work out....

    migi
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  • From ANON - mr_!ce on May 25, 2004
    dis was an awesome story. its a shamed dat it ended. i say u make a sequel. *sigh* luved da story T.T js sad dat it ended T.T
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  • From migele on May 13, 2004
    a nice try.
    well motoko is really good looking.
    but poor kei between the two of them....

    will it go on?

    migi
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  • From ANON - mr_1ce on May 12, 2004
    well, love dis fic. is dis a wats da couple here. i hope he goes wif motoko. well, update soon.
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  • From ANON - Magicman on May 05, 2004
    You know what's funny? I haven't seen Love Hina or read any of it's mangas. The only clue to the world, the characters, and the way they interact together is from a dating sim on newgrounds.com. Despite some dicrepencies (In the game Mutsumi is obsessed with watermelons and Motoko smokes a LOT), it's pretty accurate. It's all really good, though I don't know who Kitsune and Sarah are. Is Kitsune Mitsune from the game?
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  • From ANON - CKeffer on May 03, 2004
    Wonderful story! Please update soon.
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  • From ANON - Gunner on May 01, 2004
    this is an amazing story i couldnt pull away from it.....i love it
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