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Reviews for Suffer the Pain for True Happiness

By : JasmineSword227
  • From sesshy13 on July 25, 2008
    Hello jasmine this is vampgirl i have been reading your story and was wondering when you are going to update the next chapter cuase i would really like to know what happens to seras and what alucard will do when he catches up with his rival and what will happen between seras and alucard after he rescues her please i'm dying to know what will happen next and ireally like your story i can't wait to read what happens nesxt in chapter 6 and on. please update soon.

    sent by
    vampgirl.
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  • From ametomoe on July 12, 2008
    i think it's good and well written so far, but i can't really give you any feedback until the plot starts going. i'd like some more description in the battle scenes, though. please update soon!
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  • From ShadowedDragon on March 28, 2008
    I have to agree, the chapters are a bit short, but either way this is intriguing. I look forward to see what kind of pain Seras goes through and how everyone takes it. Overall it's well written. I can't think of anything off of the top of my head to help you with though. Sorry about that. But if in the future you need some help, i'll be more than willing to :)
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  • From AyaFujimiya on March 27, 2008
    I really love your fic but could you please make longer chapters.
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  • From DavidsGirl841444 on March 27, 2008
    That was really good can't wait to see what alucard has in store for that vamp. Or what happens to seras.

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  • From JasmineSword227 on February 17, 2008
    thank you for the comments everyone, the first chapter is supposed to be a kind of lay off and ooc for the characters and its a alucard and seras romance fic but very bad
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  • From nimblnymph on February 16, 2008
    Hmmm... it's certainly not the WORST Hellsing fic I've ever read.... but it's not the greatest either. The GOOD thing about it is that it has the POTENTIAL to be really good. So, on that note... here's some constructive criticism.

    The first chapter that's nothing but you role playing with Alucard and Seras: Please cut that out completely. I'm all for author's notes when necessary. That wasn't necessary, not in the least. Try to keep in mind that, while we ALL appreciate a good bit of humor, we're not particularly interested in YOUR interaction with the characters. We, the readers, want the characters to interact with each other... and we want smut! That last was kind of a 'well, duuuuh,' statement considering it's AFF, but you get what I mean. In the future, remember that author's notes are ONLY supposed to be short communications that either a) warn of questionable content, b) provide some sort of information the reader needs to know (such as "this is an a/u fic" or the likes), or c) inform the reader of something that will affect THEM, like a long lapse in postings and what-not. Anything other than that is needless and, to be perfectly blunt, a waste of our time.

    Next, there were several small, SMALL typing/grammar errors scattered throughout the chapters. The spelling looks more like your fingers might have slipped due to typing too fast, so that's not a huge concern. The grammar involves such things as being a little repetative with words, not using transition/joining words (and, but, however, etc.) properly and a few dropped commas. Again, this isn't a MAJOR concern, just read back through the chapters a little before posting. Otherwise, in this department... THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR WRITING SOMETHING THAT DOESN'T MAKE MY EYES BLEED TO READ! Really, I've begun to think that people who knew what paragraphs and quotation marks are had vanished from the face of the earth! I was so HAPPY to see that I could understand what exactly you were trying to convey here. *applauds wildly*

    On another note... everyone felt a little ooc. Even during your little role playing stints in the a/n's, the characters were off. It's not by much, but it's definitely noticible. Seras comes across as too high school angsty/whiny. While she IS young, she's not the angsty/complaining sort. If she screwed up during a mission, she would accept responsibility for her actions and would be sad because she let everyone down. I'm not sure if you're more Hellsing Anime fan than manga, but Seras is a LOT stronger in the manga. The anime unfortunately DOES paint her out to be a bit of a wuss, but she's really not. She would accept whatever punishment Alucard AND Integra saw fit and she'd do it without complaining about it. After all, SHE was the one to screw up. Alucard, from what you've written of him... Yes, Alucard is one twisted son of a bitch, and you've captured his sadistic side very well. However, I think (especially in the first chapter) you're focusing TOO much on that. Alucard is probably one of the most complex characters in any manga or anime I've ever had the pleasure of drooling on. He's definitely not a nice guy, but he DOES have his moments where he's almost human. Plus, and again this is more manga than anime, he tends to ignore Seras completely when it comes to things like her almost dying on a mission. He wouldn't be happy about his little draculina biting it for good, but he'd be more inclined to say it was her own pathetic fault for getting caught in that situation. Alucard DOES care about her, but it's more of a tough love scenario than tender caring. You should definitely work on incorporating that a little more.

    The LAST bit I have actually concerns a rather silly detail in the first chapter; that damned "magic spell" on the door. Hellsing is more the classic horror movies villains and a LOT less Hogwarts. There wouldn't be a "magic locking spell" on the door. There MIGHT be some kind of seal to contain her, but even that's pushing it just a little bit. Integra wouldn't do that unless Seras became a danger to others, i.e. a maaaaad blood lust or something. Magic spells and such are NOT part of the Hellsing Verse. It's more about the occult and classic movie monsters than that. If you REALLY want to keep Seras inside, stick with perhaps a door that's been sealed up with silver or create your own kind of holy relic that vampires don't like. Like a bit of the Cross was secured to the door... whatever. But no more magic, please? Harry Potter wouldn't last two minutes in the Hellsing world. Alucard would strangle him with his own entrails before devouring him, and there isn't a Patronus charm in the world that would save him. Remember: Hellsing = Occultish sounding stuff.

    Anyway, that's all I have for you. I do hope you continue this and TRULY wish that you don't take this review as me bashing on you. I'm just trying to help you turn this from an okay fic into a ZOMGSOGOOD! one. Thank you for posting it!
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  • From JasmineSword227 on February 11, 2008
    Ok thanks for the reveiws but I was kinda hoping more people would tell me what they thought so if you could go ahead and be honest id love to hear yout thoughts
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  • From HarasMent3012 on January 11, 2008
    this story is kool. sick, i know but i cant wait for what happens to Seras and to see how Alucard takes it!

    lol, i guess tomorrow, for the next chapter, didnt quite make it. =D

    keep writing!! cant wait for the next part!!

    luv Haras
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  • From PervyYaoiFancier on December 19, 2007
    Very interesting. I wonder, what shall happen our kitten? And how will Alucard react to his property being damaged and stolen?
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  • From CountryWhoDunnit on December 17, 2007
    Now I'm interested, so...keep it going! It's a good story plot, yay for that :)
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  • From Sexgoddess2110 on December 15, 2007
    once again another great chappie I love the frequent updates but at the same time I wish you took alittle longer so that the chappies we're longer. your fic is one of my favs I hope you update when you can its freaking awesome love the action, just hope we found out more I'm a tad confused.

    Arry
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  • From Sexgoddess2110 on December 12, 2007
    I really like the story so far I hope you update more so than everybody esle in the hellsing area.
    B/c it'd be a shame to wait months for the next installment


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