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Reviews for From the top, to no where.

By : AniueCastiro
  • From Revu on December 02, 2008
    OK for this chapter I have to say it feels a little forced. I mean the information is essential, I'm not quite sure where the story is going yet or where the focus will revolve around, but now we know where the champ is and what she's been doing... From the summary I had the feeling the story was going to go in a bit of a different direction, and if that were the case I would have left this information out for a while longer, but that just might have been a misinterpretation on my part.

    The reason I say it feels forced... Well it's short for one thing, especially compared to chapter 1 which tells me it didn't really have your heart in it as much as it really didn't flow naturally. Maybe it was the word choice too just gives this aura of being pushed along.

    In any case the scene with Lance was great. You managed to fill in the readers as to what is going on and what's been happening in both the character's position and relationship without coming out and actually saying it. Now I want to see the next chapter so I can figure out where we're headed!

    Hope to see more soon!
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  • From daveb on November 25, 2008
    Great story. Please continue.
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  • From Revu on November 17, 2008
    Many mysteries to be sorted out at the end here... Where has the champ been, how was she cheated out of her title, what's been going on???

    I like how you summarize your battles out and give the reader a good sense of the excitement behind them without making them drag out for pages on end, I haven't been able to figure that out yet lol.

    From the summary of the story I get the feeling that the story is about to make a major turn from where the Prologue left us standing, so I can't wait to see where the story is really going to be headed. Hope it will be soon! 'Til then!
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