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From MeyhamM2 on May 26, 2011
As tempted as I am to just slam my face on the keyboard and submit that as a review (it would be quite accurate in conveying how I feel about this chapter), I know you deserve something better... because THANK THE LORD everyone is still in-character! Although I had to stop reading twice and contemplate if where you were taking this was predictably over-sexualized and amateur-ish, it never went there. You seem to tease readers with that; that making it appear as though we're going to have some snuggly Sebastian/Ciel scene followed by a (uncalled for) round of post-molestation comfort sex, but never actually going there. You kept things reasonable.
I also applaud your coverage of Sebastian's inner struggle against his "devilish impulses". Again, as I said in my first review, it makes sense that he would be the first to notice something is different this time around in his relationship with Ciel.
Now let me make a pact with you, and tell you that I will keep reading this story for as many chapter as you can and want to write, as long as you keep it going as wonderfully strong as you have been these past 14 chapters! I am sure your other readers feel the same.

Sincerely,
Meyham
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From Sparrowhawk on May 26, 2011
Wonderful new chapter! The interaction between Sebastian and Ciel after the whole affair of the last chapter was spot on. And it was so cute! I really liked the ending when Ciel asks Sebastian to kiss him, and Sebastian's about to, but then stops when he notices the fever's back. That's totally my favorite part in this chapter, though I must say the little teasing Sebastian did after putting salve on the cut down on his nether regions is also another of my favorites. It comes a close second. Very nice! Please update again soon!!!
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From r0xbuddi on May 25, 2011
I love love LOVE this story. You craft the characters so well, and display a hint of what may be without turning a kiddish 13 year old into a swoooning strumpet, and the reader into a kid reading nothing more than PWP.

This last chapter was fabulous! Was that a Sebastian smile? Did Ciel imagine it so he could give himself an excuse to end his life? Sebastian is a bit possessive of those who seek to do his master harm ... or even make him curry : P I'm excited to see what happens next (Please, for the love of toasty nuts, no "Kiss away all those mean hands, Sebastian!" Please. I'll kill myself. And you'll be responsible for assisted suicide. Rly.), with the aftermath of the incident, who were the ones that knew Ciel hated cages, and who the strange demon and his master are. Thank you!
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From Sparrowhawk on May 23, 2011
First of all, let me say this is one of The Best Kuroshitsuji fanfics between Ciel and Sebastian that I have ever read. Throughout what has transpired of the plot they have remained perfectly believable according to their characters. I adore your writing style and the unhurried unfolding of your plot. It's at just the right pace to where one can really get a feel for the characters and story. Love the latest chapter! I am so excited to read what happens next, how their relationship developes further from this point on. Especially liked the part toward the end of the first section when Sebastian seems so surprised that he sounded like he really wanted to tear out the guy's tongue. Perfect. Can't wait for the next chapter!! Please update soon (:
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From PervyPenguin on May 21, 2011
I am a long-time lurker who created an account because I felt that this story was lacking in reviews. This fic is my absolute favorite, hands down. Contrary to what some of the reviewers say, I love the pace you've set and the fact that you focus on other things in the story other than just possible smut. This story has bother Sebastian and Ciel in character, a poetic writing style, character development and a plot that leaves you on the edge of your seat. Each chapter only leaves me wanting more and more, I absolutely love it.
Sometimes I am left disappointed when authors butcher the character's personalities, speed up the half-thought-out plot just to get to the smut. I have no problem with smut, but I want a real story, character interaction, subtlety, the little things that make a good story into a great one. Things that will leave one thinking about the story long after it's over.
This wonderful piece of work deserves more reviews, hence why I created this account. I will be eagerly anticipating your next chapter. I am a fan.
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From DryingVampires on May 20, 2011
I love you and all of your stories so very much ;w; The characterization in this is fabulous and just perfectly spot on. I can't get enough of this; lately all I do is prowl the Kuroshitsuji section waiting for updates x'D
guhh, I can't wait for more!

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From MeyhamM2 on May 19, 2011
I apologize for not reviewing chapter 12 when it came out; I read it, loved it, but didn't know what I could say that hadn't already been said. For chapter 13 though, I've got something to say.

I'm really glad that Sebastian was as angry as he was over the way Ciel was treated. I was looking forward to seeing his reaction, and predicted that he'd respond the way he did. I guess that means you got the characterization spot on again! I'm curious to see if Ciel will let his guard down in the next chapter, now that he's got some time alone after everything (and that everything, by the way, was very believable), and how he does so.

Can't wait for the next update!
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From MelissaO44 on May 17, 2011
This is a great story. I love it. Thank you.
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From MeyhamM2 on May 03, 2011
Glad to see such frequent updates! I also like where this story is going; it's a very believable plot --more detailed than any others I've seen and even less predictable than the actual manga. Very entertaining altogether. I can't say I'm disappointed about the lack of, or anxious for any of the lemons your summary promised. Just knowing that they'll happen (but haven't yet) only makes me believe that they will be even more fantastic than what I can imagine (which, after reading what you've written so far, is nothing). As usual, everyone is in-character to a T and your grammar and spelling are flawless! I still must say, that I am personally looking forward to the prospect of Ciel aging (as in years, not just weeks) over the course of this story; but whether or not that happens is, of course, ultimately up to you and I cannot say that I think I would be disappointed if things did not turn out that way.

-Meyham
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From Jenmoon1 on April 27, 2011
great is it gonna turn m soon
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From MeyhamM2 on April 15, 2011
At first I was wary about reading this fic; I'm not a big fan of shota and, admittedly, the Kuroshitsuji fandom has proven to be a breeding ground for bad shota fanfic. I was pleasantly surprised with you, though. Let me first say that your characterization, especially for Ciel, is spot on. It is always important for writers to remember that he DOES NOT act like other 13 year olds, that he is much more mature and sullen. I love his cynicism and wit. He is not some sobby, submissive child. I am intrigued by the possibility that you may have him age significantly, as it has been decided that Sebastian will stay with him for five more years.

As far as your portrayal of Sebastian and Ciel's relationship, it is also excellent. In canon, there has never been any sort of love between them, in fact, I doubt Sebastian is capable of true love. However, by the second season of the anime I too sensed some affection from him towards Ciel (at least when compared to the relationship between Claude and Alois). I am glad that you are portraying Sebastian the way you are, and that it is him and not Ciel that first realizes something might have changed in their relationship (as opposed to Ciel suddenly realizing that he is in twu wuv with Sebastian). I also heartily appreciate your delay of any real citrus scenes up until this point so that you can flesh out the characters and relationships more... not to mention the plot.

And oh, what a plot it is! As a total Victorian-Edwardian era geek, I appreciate all of the attention to detail that you have poured into this story. I have even learned several new things I hadn't before. However, just between two sticklers for historical accuracy: In chapter four when Sebastian is taking Ciel to find the incubus, it says that he slowed the horses down to a trot, suggesting that the horses were travelling at a speed faster beforehand. Allowing or making carriage horses canter or gallop while pulling a vehicle is, among the equestian community, generally seen as a bad idea. Bumpy ride, wear and tear on the carriage and so on. Also, according to the first speed limit introduced in Britain in 1861, carriage speed was not permitted to exceed 10 mph. At a trot, most carriage horses would already be at that pace, so it seems unlikely that Sebastian would have urged them faster, especially if he was trying to be inconspicuous.

I absolutely cannot wait to read more of this... once I am done writing my final papers.

-Meyham
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From ANON - Anon on March 11, 2011
This is very well written, in a very accessible and yet almost poetic style. Very nice! Also, I love how you have perfectly captured the tone of Kuroshitsuji, and in particular the two main characters. Most people seem to have trouble keeping them in character, especially Ciel, who usually turns out to be more needy then in canon: but you write him just as he is, irritable and arrogant, with only the slightest hint of vulnerability showing through his tough veneer. Also, I quite like how you spun the plot to work for you-- I can't wait to see how it all turns out! Thanks for updating so quickly as well!
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