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December 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hello,
you have a good story line so far, but i'm sorry to say, not trying to be mean, your chapters are a little short and the plot is kind o completely screwed up, but other then that, i hope you update soon
Cheers
Crmy
you have a good story line so far, but i'm sorry to say, not trying to be mean, your chapters are a little short and the plot is kind o completely screwed up, but other then that, i hope you update soon
Cheers
Crmy
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October 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
this story is great, please update soon!
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September 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Aah.. such a nice fic, un ^^ You should update! i was browsing through old fics for Gravitation and I saw this one, un.. Did you just give up on it? Because it has a LOT of potential! I love it <33 Please update soon ^^
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January 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Not bad, though a bit OOC for my liking.
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October 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
whoa! I hate yuki so bad, well from the first time read it I hated him and Tohma,anyways update soon
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October 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey. this was really dark, I didn\'t expect that. It almost looks the one I am writing under FanFiction.net (Bloody Kisses) look pretty light. -mental note I must work on that.- I think you have a masterful idea of the inner workings of Eiri Yuki. I really do. So. Keep pn keeping on and I hope to see more of you soon. ;-)
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August 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Konnichiwa!
I enjoyed reading your story so far, it was nicely written. There are some grammatical and puncuation mistakes, as well as some spelling mistakes that should be corrected. If you do not know which I am talking about, I will glady tell you. Just IM me at Shadowgirl84525@Hotmail.Com (I\'ll most-likely IM you instead, because I usually get in touch with authors of stories I like ^^).
Now, secondly, you have \"onegai\" twice in the chapter that should be \"kudosai,\" since Shuichi is requesting something of Eiri.
Other than that, it\'s fine. Nice work.
-Youkai Dreams
PS- By the way, I don\'t review every chapter of any story unless it\'s short. Expect reviews from me every five or so chapters.
I enjoyed reading your story so far, it was nicely written. There are some grammatical and puncuation mistakes, as well as some spelling mistakes that should be corrected. If you do not know which I am talking about, I will glady tell you. Just IM me at Shadowgirl84525@Hotmail.Com (I\'ll most-likely IM you instead, because I usually get in touch with authors of stories I like ^^).
Now, secondly, you have \"onegai\" twice in the chapter that should be \"kudosai,\" since Shuichi is requesting something of Eiri.
Other than that, it\'s fine. Nice work.
-Youkai Dreams
PS- By the way, I don\'t review every chapter of any story unless it\'s short. Expect reviews from me every five or so chapters.
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July 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
MORE PLEASE!!! GO ON! I now you can do it! You want to, right? RIGHT?
You HAVE to! Pretty pleeeeeaase!!!! *makespuppyeyes*
You HAVE to! Pretty pleeeeeaase!!!! *makespuppyeyes*
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May 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
HURRY UP WITH THE NEXT CHAPPIE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! IM SO BORED AND I WANNA READ MORE!!!
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February 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
MORE MORE MORE!!!!! must have more *twitchs convosivly* it\'s February more!!!! *squeals* please it\'s good really good