rate_review Reviews

Good work! I thought the writing was good, spelling and punctuation excellent, and I thought this was a unique pairing and angle.

I do have a few nitpicks, though. First of all, I felt this was out of character for Spinel. Even if he is frightened, he would fight anyone who attacked him, especially your common gang of thugs. And I really don't think he'd cut himself just because he thinks Yue doesn't love him.

Secondly, this is a small thing, but you mentioned in the story that Syaoran and Eriol were lovers. I thought that was going to be an important point in the story, but it wasn't. There wasn't any sort of romance or even very much interaction between them.

Finally, "I love you" is "Aishiteru," and "koi" isn't used as an honorific.

But I really enjoyed the sex scene! It was very sweet and descriptive without being pornographic. I look forward to reading more of your stories!

i really didn\'t like the lemon but i like the happy ending cause Yue like Spinel and it was a happy ending.

A very rare pairing. I like the idea of Spinel having a human form. I think Kero should have one too, and the other two have beast forms would be nice. The ability toft bft between forms would be wonderful for all four of them. Great fic!