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April 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 4
Really nice chapter, too. I really liked how you got Shuichi\'s fatho beo be a bit of a paternal figure to Yuki. Most people would have probably written them on the same footing, but they forget Yuki, as mature as he may be, is only 23. That\'s the first time I see that so well and simply portrayed (it\'s nt expressed explicitly but htat\'s the feeling I got). I\'m seeing many new things in this fic, I love it when that happens! Next one now!
Really nice chapter, too. I really liked how you got Shuichi\'s fatho beo be a bit of a paternal figure to Yuki. Most people would have probably written them on the same footing, but they forget Yuki, as mature as he may be, is only 23. That\'s the first time I see that so well and simply portrayed (it\'s nt expressed explicitly but htat\'s the feeling I got). I\'m seeing many new things in this fic, I love it when that happens! Next one now!
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April 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 5
Nice touch at the end. I wouldn\'t have thought of it. It\'s not something that people tend to include, I thought it was good that you did, adds maturity to the writing and the feeling of reality is stronger, too. My only complaint os the time he spent in hospital, it seemed to short after surgery, collapsed lungs and broken legs. But it\'s ok, I\'ll overlook it for the sake of the story ^_^ This is extremly good so far. I\'m hooked so badly! Next chapter!
Nice touch at the end. I wouldn\'t have thought of it. It\'s not something that people tend to include, I thought it was good that you did, adds maturity to the writing and the feeling of reality is stronger, too. My only complaint os the time he spent in hospital, it seemed to short after surgery, collapsed lungs and broken legs. But it\'s ok, I\'ll overlook it for the sake of the story ^_^ This is extremly good so far. I\'m hooked so badly! Next chapter!
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April 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Well, well. Mirai Aira placed a rec for this fic over at a Gravi community dedicated solely to the search of good quality Gravi fanfics. I must say she chose wisely. What a aonderful start. I loved it, it was very powerful, well written and filled woth more emotion than any other \'angsty\' fic I\'ve read in a long time. I\'m loving every minute of it. The thoughts, the actions, the lemon, everything was wonderful. I shall now go and check the links she placed at the site to get more chapters of this incredible story. I hope the quality stays up with the following chapters and I shall review every single one. Ver y nice job. One of the best starts to a fic I\'ve read in a long time. Lovely.
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April 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I\'m so glad you are sharing this \"ficcy\" with a greater community of readers! I\'ve told you before on the ML how much I enjoyed this, but I wanted to tell you again, here. I\'m glad you finally named it! This is, honestly, one of the best Gravitation fanfic stories I\'ve read. I don\'t say that lightly and I\'ve read... thousands. Literally. I love this story. I hope that this posting encourages you to write and post many more Gravitation stories because your writing is SO worth reading.
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April 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Anyway, I\'ve seen the later chapters to this and you know I loved it :-D I just have to write a review for the rest of the chapters. I\'ve been a bad girl. *emails*