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Yet again another moving chapter. You capture such raw depth and emotion of the Saiyuki guys. Well enough with the mushy stuff on with the review:

1. Charlie Brown is fucked. Do you ever have those days where you just can\'t win. They\'ll always be a Lucy or tree who eats your personal kite. Don\'t get me wrong, I love Charlie Brown, he just keeps plodding away. On that note:

2. Everyone should embrace their own inner Garfield. Be not fooled by the fatness. This cat kicks ass and takes no prisoners. Its ok to once in a while eat the lasagna, push the Odies of the world off the edge of the table, and pretty much just do what you want.

3. Much can be learned by reading comics, grasshopper.

I\'ll say it again, the characterizations are so yummy and soulful. What I like about your fic is the wonderful blend of the real, the now, and the surreal. The Saiyuki men bleed, they aren\'t perfect individuals, talk about mentally disturbed, these guys make Sybil look like a walk in the park (For those not in the know, Sybil was an actual person in the medical books who claimed to have 7 different personalities inside her) I\'m ever the optimist, I want the Happy Ending for the Saiyuki Men. However, this is your baby, and mind you I said Happy Ending, not mentally sane! I don\'t think they\'ll ever be 100% fine in the head. But I guess thats what makes us love these guys, sigh ;)

For the record your fic has got the funniest lines ever, good rendering of Sanzo\'s sarcasm, Hakkai\'s dry wit, Gojyo\'s sexy magnetism, and Goku\'s childish energy.

Keep up the great work!!! I\'m such an addict for your fics.

\"Obsession is great, Therapy is for quitters!\"

Much like Goku, I was very excited at the prospect of them all \"playing cards\" together.
Again, excellent writing. I can\'t wait for the next chapter.
Not to give you the big head (LOL) but I\'m currently in the middle of the Reload anime, and I\'ve found myself being more interested in your next chapter then the next episode. There\'s just more action in YOUR story!

Ok... I was all set for reviewing this great chapter, when you went and tried something fatally horrible on me... LOGIC! You made my head hurt! Therefore, I must comment on your logic games first.

You have a height miscalculation somewhere... I know that for height in cm I\'m 164... I also know that in feet I\'m exactly 5\'4 1/2\". You got 5\'7 1/2\" for Kanan somewhere, I\'m not sure... I\'m quite sure she\'s taller than I am.

The hair thing? My mother\'s a barber... I can tell you that everyone\'s grows at a different pace. My best friend\'s hair grows at an inch to inch and a half per month... I get less than a centimeter, maybe less than a half per month. It could simply be that Gonou\'s hair grows very quickly.

Prego thing? Again, a contrast for you closer to extremes. Again my best friend... she could practically tell you at what time the sperm entered the egg, for all three of her kids. My first I was clueless because my cycle skipped and prodded so bad that birth control pills were useless. I figured it out by the degree of heartburn. Therefore it was easier to tell with my second. The showing thing? I carried one at a time (thank the Goddess for that!) and by the end of my first trimester I looked like I was six months gone... I simply had big kids. Both were over 8 and a half pounds, and on schedule. I also envied those women that didn\'t show until they were nearly 7 months...

Now I have to go hunting through my Saiyuki anime... I don\'t know about the manga, haven\'t read it... but all the killings weren\'t all on one night. However, I could be misinterpreting what you had meant by this... the one castle was in one night, but the black crow clan was a few nights previous. I know it was mentioned in the anime, I\'ll have to get back to you on which episode. I can\'t remember if it was the Sambutshin telling Sanzo, or if it was Sanzo telling Goku... that information did get out in the anime though.

The reason why all this shit hurt? Let\'s just say that I can completely understand Goku logic! I think on more simple terms... I normally don\'t read the review responses authors make public like you have. I believe it\'s meant for those people, not me. It\'s rare for me... however this time I did catch one that wasn\'t mine. (thanks btw!) So many people seem to read so deep and catch all your symbolism, and I feel so simple... I know my subconscious catches it, I understand it, then my eyes move on to see what next little tidbit you have in store for me. I admit often I don\'t see the symbolism unless it\'s pointed out to me, yet at the same time I completely understand what it\'s meant to convey at the right moment. I at least catch the feelings it\'s meant to convey. This is why I can understand Goku so well the way you have him portrayed here!

I just love how Sanzo decides that comics can convey more than sutras... damn near peed my pants I was laughing so hard!

And despite how serious the situation is between Hakkai and Gojyo, you managed to put in the humor to keep it from being too nasty. Thank you. Tempou and Kenren are hilarious when they want to be. I have been known to get so drawn into a story that I\'ve had anxiety attacks from scenes like those. Yes, I really do lose myself in the stories I read... but that\'s when I know it\'s a good story! Of course our wonderful, and oh so serious *sneezebullshit* Dragon King... his pla-- I mean perimiter checks, so serious as to not be construed as play... *snickers*

I didn\'t truely realize how unbalanced Hakkai was until this chapter. It\'s hard for me to keep up with his thought process! I can understand it, just not the depth I guess... I can kind of relate to that self sacrifice thing. I\'m still learning how to say \'no\' myself. However I can say I\'m much further along than he is! *chuckles*

Ack! Now you\'ve got me thinking deep... Damn, now I need some Tylenol. Until next time... Update soon!

You updated~! Yaaaaaay~!

Fic Review: Laugh. My. Ass. OFF. When Goku mistook the \"card game\" as a sexual innuendo, I couldn\'t stop laughing. Hell, I IMed Zil and started mocking it. That is such a damn kodak moment. Funniest shit EVER. Next to the Rudolph parody. WHICH I FINALLY FIGURED OUT SANZO DOES LIKE MAYONAISE IN HIS RAMEN! NASTY. And Goku is afraid of snow! Wow, I never knew this. AHEM, anywhoo... Sanzo\'s knoweledge for comics..Wow. He\'s such an in-the-closet-nerd. I love it. Hell, I love Sanzo period. \'Specially your Sanzo. He\'s fun. (Hearts.) Whoo~! Bath scene was so nosebleedable! Gojyo is so damn sexy. He can touch me with a sponge any day~! ..Scratch that. He can touch Hakkai with a sponge anyday, and let me watch! Better. I was waiting for Kenren and Tenpou to finally take control. But aww, no screwing. Poor guys. And dear God, Hakuryuu cracks me up. His personality is PRICELESS.

Review towards Reply: Waaaah~! I\'m serious, I WANT a shirt like that. That\'d be the most awesome thing ever. Tenpou\'s spiffin\'! And you met a reader by chance? Wow! I\'d probably glomp and fawn over you like you were a God. I\'m so childish. And yes, there should be a sign up sheet for that! I\'D SIGN UP! Whoo, Sanzo is one sexy, sexy man. And yes, now Gonou doesn\'t piss me off as much.

Aww, you\'re typing. Good girl. (Pats.) This be Clojaku, signing off. You keep writing, I keep reviewing~.

---Clojaku

Damn, that was one hell of a story! Even better, it looks like it\'s not done yet? (Yes, a question, not a statement... you never know with half the authors out there these days) I started reading this story around 12 hours ago... I think it\'s safe for me to say that I\'m hooked! I hope you plan on updating this soon... this is just too good to leave alone you know! This is so deep... how you have all the characters developing, and still managing to keep them in character according to all that I\'ve watched in the anime, which is all but the last series... Gun something or other. I only just recently learned of it\'s existence and now have to hunt!

Considering I\'ve managed to read all 14 chapters in relatively one sitting, it\'s really too much for me to comment on in detail... I have to say that you have an excellent writing form! You have excellent attention to detail, and to me that\'s important. I\'ve already directed a few of my friends to this story, and at that time I\'d only read the first 4 chapters... You manage to wring all the various emotions out of me with this! Now I\'m going to have to create an accout with affnet... have with mmorg, but not here, and I do need a way to keep up with this story! Please update soon... Ja matte!

Oh my God, you can write a thesis on Saiyuki!!
You even do the research on the shoe size for Goddess sake.
And you actually find out which page that the vcds and videos are to prove there is actually civilization....
I have been an avid follower who only opens the Saiyuki link for RAHO...
I especially like the Pavlov reaction of Hakkai to those four little words...
This is my first time reviewing cause I usually cannot resist reading first the new chapter than after that I am such a pile of mush and tingling all over my brain isn\'t even coherent...
Goddess, you are the best Saiyuki Author out there I tell you... And you updaate so regularly...I love you *Hugs*
Oh yeah, I like how you portray Gojun and Hakuryu...his son eats PlayDoh...hehehe
Gambatte...\\^o^/ write on.

Hey my dear,
What can I say? I loved it. The things between Gojyo and Hakkai were deliciously kinky (gave me some ideas most cerainly) and I can\'t wait for more of it, even the end bit where we see Hakkai\'s justifications for everything which included allowing Gojyo to rape him (he didn\'t, I can safely say I breathed a sigh of relief) - poor Hakkai, everything has to have the reason and justification in his world. However I felt that the gem of this was the love-making between Goku and Sanzo, hidden within the kinkiness. It was tender and warming and reminded us that there are many ways to have sex (fuck, make love, sex) and it compared really well. Hakkai slipping too, is this another fracture mending? We don\'t hear from little Gonou much anymore because as I recall him and Hakkai became one earlier on. I liked the fact to that you establish that Sanguinans isn\'t the bad one; he isn\'t bad he is the final resort and his intentions are usually good, but he only knows how to do this one way. It was a lovely time-out and I can\'t wait for the next installment because Hakkai infringed on the rules, another person is arriving and I want to read more of the lovely writing. Sorry I didn\'t reply sooner I\'ve had a rough week. Keep writing honey xxx

*lol* Silly girl, apologizing for the chappy being too long...don\'t you know that\'s a pleasure for your readers? Great chapter, a very smooth and easy read. The character that stuck out the most to me was probably Goku; you did a smashing job with him. Throughout the anime, he always displays that kind of hidden wisdom/maturity that only reveals itself in a desperate situation, and you did a fantastic job bringing that to the surface without letting it override the dominent aspects of his personality. The Hakkai and Gojyo sex was really well done in this chapter. I always love how inventive your lemons are, as well as how underlying psychology comes into play, clarifying couple dynamics bit by bit. The calculus added a lot, it was so easy for me to picture Hakkai going through these internal calculations and getting a \'system error\' message *lol*.

Okay, my chappy favorites: For some reason, the phrase \'crystaline water\' really struck me...I can\'t really explain it, but the boundless symbolism in that one little phrase made me pause and re-read. \"A scarred cheek rested against a scarred abdomen\" also just struck me as being a very sweet and more subtley symbolic description. And, finally, two words: Kappa rolls. RFLMAO. The imagery of Hakkai trying to hold in a snicker every time someone took a bite...gods *wipes tears from face*. Anyway, I know there were many, many more components that struck me as brilliant, but these stuck in my mind the most. I love how every chapter you write manages to be a bit different; for instance, I\'d have to say that this chapter screamed sensuality and subtlety, whereas an earlier chapter like the Gaiden \'stamp/flip\' chapter had a wonderfully strong rhythm. I adore how you keep us on our toes! Wonderful chapter, do I even have to mention that I\'m looking forward to more?

testing to see if this works (Shadowfox_13)

Hey CJ! I\'m sorry I didn\'t get in earlier to review. I\'m here now. :D Anyway, I just wanted to say how interesting and involved this chapter has been and what a pleasure it\'s been to read it. It was quite fascinating to see the developments that took place, not just between Hakkai and Gojyo but also Goku and Sanzo. That and the growth and perceptiveness that Goku himself shows. It was a tad bit disturbing to watch the self destructive turn Hakkai\'s need to help Gojyo took but also interesting in that it gives us an inside peek into what the couple will have to deal with, aside from Gojyo\'s current dilemma. And I\'m am very curious to find out what will happen next. I do hope that they do find a way to work through it. *LOL* The first time I read it, my thought was a bit harsher btw. I\'d felt Gojyo should smack Hakkai for being such a welcome mat or tattoo welcome on his forehead :P But with each re-reading, I found myself seeing also Hakkai\'s (albeit kind of twisted) side. In his mind, Gojyo\'s wellbeing and happiness is his. It seems he has transfrred his internal need to \'give love\' to Gojyo without balancing it. Hehe, then again, it also doesn\'t help that Tenpou is keeping such a tight hold on those \'papers.\' I\'m thinking it might help him to balance if he could fully remember but then, I am seeing the story through the lenses of the author, and it is merely my own side thought to it. As usual, you have out and out done yourself as a writer and I am in awe. I hope to read more. Keep it up. ^.^V