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And please don't worry about the false Anon hun ^~ I just read his review, and of course --even though we hate it -- everyone has their own opinion. Of course though, I'm quite sure you allready know that.

I think your characterization of Sanzo is the worst I’ve ever read. You have him making jokes and being a sub. You have totally broken cannon. I mean why don’t you just have him dance or something. Next will you have him submit to Goku? And, then you use the characters to defend how you broke characterization. Horrid. What’s the point of writing fan fiction if you’re just going to disregard the characters.

This story is repetitive and predictable. How many chapters and no plot? PWP is one chapter … one chapter. You are trying to just cram as much in here as possible. You must really need a sex life.

Why don’t you ever post any of your bad reviews? I’m sure you get them. I know I won’t be seeing this one there, because I’m not going toreadreading anymore.

You write long narratives like we actually give a shit about what you say and what you think. You pretend like you care. Whatever! Your just trying to get readers. You are insulting your readers with the vocabulary shit. I fucking know what those words mean and if someone else doesn’t then they can just look it up.

Give the story some plot not just sex and maybe just maybe I might read your crap again.

Don’t think I’m posting as as anon because I’m hiding or anything. I’m posting this anon because I don’t want your friends -- who are your only readers I’m sure -- flaming my shit …because I know they will.

My, my! A wonderous lemon...and it was even het. Nicely done, I think that is probably one of the only believable ways I can see Sanzo having sex (oh, I've TRIED to realistically envision other way,ieveieve me ^_^). I vehemently agree that he needs to come to some realizations before he will let himself have sex that isn't a bit on the punishing/non-conish side...say...sex with Goku *snickers*? I'm usually a bit hard on OC, but I wound up liking this take-charge dominatrix...so you get an OC medal *hands you naked bishie medal*. I also thought you did a smashing job with Goku, his behavior, and what's going through that wonderfully ernest little mind of his. As always, looking forward to more!

First let me tell you how much I enjoy your fics. Cause I a w a whole lot! You have a great sense of humor, that bit of conversation in the jeep a few chappies back had me howling. And I love Sanzos' sense of humor, sick and twisted as it is. And the way Sanzo and Gojyo always seem to overhear something they shouldn't...and then using it. I can't wait for Hakkais' revenge against Sanzo. And I've learned some new words! But I have a teeny tiny complaint. Well, not a complaint but a correction. It's rigid, not ridged. Pe doe don't hate me! I've seen this mistake in other fics too and I always snicker at the mental imaI meI mean, I know Trojans are 'ridged for her pleasure' but if I saw an uncovered one that already had ridges on it, I'd run away screaming. ^_^ So, please write more, you're awesome!

Lovely Chapter. Lovely Story.

That was the most sex I've ever read straight for 3.2 hours.

I have no life.

But - anyway, beautiful characterization, it's like you could actually imagine this happening in the series. Please update soon.

SQUEE!!! you are my hero. Have I told you that before? I should have. If not, let me tell you again. You are my hero. :) You are amazing and wonderful and brilliant and OH dear I can't even imagine. ...Can I have your autograph? ^^

Ok ok ok so in sequential order: The fragile/strong thing... that was amazing, and a very astute observation. I think that that is one of his main problems... well, not problem really, but misunderstanding. You phrased it nicely :) and it definately opens doors. Like my lit teacher says, "Good stories don't answer questions, they ask them."

Sanzo is gorgeous. I would have that man in an instant. You made him sound just godly (Konzen XD) in your description... XD I want. Definately want.

That one part of suspense before that last blow with the belt... VERY well done! Definately had me holding my breath ;).

The part with Kanzeon Bosatsu telling Jiroshin about how strong people can be free when they're weak... (badly paraphrasing your argument/thesis)... that was beautiful. I've actually been thinking about that today, and then I read this and it all came together. You really have an amazing eye for detail and slight observations that most people might miss... and then you're able to organize your findings in such an all-encompassing way... it's amazing. It's also very hard to do, so applause for doing it so well.

...Eight... ::snicker:: That actually wasn't in the story, but I had to. Just cuz. You understand.

Goku and the freedom of thought... NICE! It never really occured to me, but it makes sense when you mention it. Goku is really open minded... and it's not cuz he's stupid (like those meanies always tell him ;)) but it's because he can't find anything wrong with it. That could be expanded onto a whole nother philisoph deb debate... :) NICE!!! WAI you have me asking all these questions and thinking AND it's even at 11:00 and I'm tired! :) Major Kudos. I think you've broken a few laws of nature.

The part about Hakkai and the child... terrible. Terribleterribleterrible. My heart broke for him. I've also wondered that too though... ... oooooooooh! so sad.

Kenren and the plot against heaven (hey, sounds like the title to a Harry Potter book!) was hilarious. I must have laughed about a minute straight. All that displaced energy cuz the rest was so sad. :) But that line was hilarious. ... O.o when does Kenren ever keep his mouth shut? Let poor Gojyo have it. Just once. ...For me? ^^

Forward... *snicker* I have definately wanted to say "Relax and Hang On" in my car when I have people just to see what would happen... *snicker snicker* Maybe I'll just say "Forward" and laugh at my own inside jokes.

To wrap i ((T ((The chapter before was BEAUTIFUL too... oh dear with the nails thing? *shudder* I have really long nails and whenever things get stuck like that... or it rips or... *shudder* oh that's terrible... and looking for his fear? Definately. I've worked with animals long enough... they can smell it. Horses will run away, but if you get a predatory animal... ooh it's all over. ... and Gojyo gets turned ON?!? lol)) this was another WELL WRITTEN and ABSOLUTELY AMAZING chapter. I was sooooo excited for it's release... and now it's here! FANTASTIC!!!! Keep it up, I cannot wait for the next one. I'm on the edge of my rolling desk chair.

- Hakuryuu (gyu!)

Fantastic! This particular chapter fed my Sanzo fetish in such a glorious way I had to read it TWICE! Thank you for an excellent fic. Just enough humor and angst to keep it lively, but not so much of either that the story gets bogged down, perfect characterizations, wonderfully vivid narration. What more could a girl ask for? I gush…

I really liked this chapter. Especially the way yharaharacterized Hakkai's youkai side. There is so little shown of it throughout the series that I have seen. Also, Very creative name for that part of Hakkai.

Also, thank you for making Hakuryuu more than just the dragon who peeps every so often. I've loved reading his internal reactions to everything that has been going on.

Hurray! An update; and oh my this was a violent one *pats you on the head*. Goodness. I loved it, and I appreciated the lengths you went to for the accy. cy. And, I'm not even going to pout that their was no lemon ^_^ I think my stomach would've failed me for sure in cas case *grins*. Excellent job, again looking forward to more!

I love Gojyo. The way you write hims is exactly how I always saw him in the manga. I especially love the lines 'what he wants, we give'. not many people can write Gojyo's character with the kind of insight that you do. He manages to stay the irrisponsible older brother, but at the same time he's the gentle understanding lover.

Hakkai is just as well written of course, but I thought since everyone told you that, you already knew. Hakkai and Gojyo belong together for more than just their pasts and their friendship though. They have an inate understanding of eachother that is expressed all over the manga, and that you have managed to portray quite well in your writing. Plus the sex is hot, but that is secondary to me. Still hot though. Can't wait to read the next installment.