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Okay, he's an idiot if he can't see that he hasn't left his reckless side behind him.

Hmmm, truly only Goku could manipulate Sanzo into giving him exactly what he wants. I think we've made a major breakthrough with Sanzo, I just hope it lasts.

[Nod] it can't be that easy to get Gojyo past this, it's going to take time. Pore bishi.

YOU UPDATED! YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY! Cliffie! Hakkai is sick! ARGH!

I love how you've written the Kougaji ikkou... Next to Hakkai and Gojyo, Kougaji is my favorite Saiyuki character.

And I just _ADORE_ your interpretation of the 58 dynamic!

Can't wait for your original fiction to become available.

Shit! I'd forgotten that the last Gojyo thought, Hakkai didn't want him any more.

The Underground is a brilliant idea, really adds to the gap of information about Gojyo. I'm glad Cayce was able to help him start mending finally. Poor Hakkai not only falls apart without Gojyo, he also starts loosing clothing. He's going to be in bed sick with a cold for days.

I'd put off reading this chapter because I was afraid that by the underground Gojyo meant someplace much worse like litter-strewn alleys and dark corners. I'm glad it wasn't like that and now we see how Gojyo got to be an amateur psychologist.

Ch. 13: Okay, now I'm curious to know what Gojyo's 'golden ratio' is. Something sexual I expect?

Hehe, we have the shoes *and* the rule breaking. Hakkai has no idea how much influence Tenpou's memories have over him. Oh boy, I hope this doesn't forebode bad happenings when Sanzo gives in and joins in for some fun. By the looks of things there's going to be some angst involved. It wouldn't be Sanzo if it didn't involve angst.

Oh my, the background you're adding for Hakkai is shaping up to be interesting. Was he a member of a gang? It'd explain the butterfly knife. Or maybe an assassin for hire? Hmm, that's a little grandiose.

The 'quiet' ones are of course the adrenaline junkies.

[Eyes bulge] Hakkai was part of a biker gang. That would make many things make more sense. This should be very interesting. Ah, I see where you're going. Gonou is still a split off part of Hakkai, and this is going to give him a chance to work on understanding him and reintegrating him.

I get the feeling this town we're coming to is going to be something like New Orleans. Or maybe I'm the only one who thinks Ah'Nesty sounds like a Creole drawl.

Wow, Goku's fear of the snow came totally out of left field, but makes complete sense.

It's amazing that Hakkai can cook so well in this life. So *that's* where the Harisen came from! Explains why it's unbreakable and hurts so much.

The main problem here is that Hakkai doesn't know *why* Gojyo's been going from woman to woman and that it shouldn't be part of his nature. And the lack of talking. That'll hurt a relationship faster than anything.

I skimmed the actual torture, just reading the interactions between Kenren and Gojyo, but damn girl, this is so well written. Thank you for Kougaiji to the rescue. He line "You have relinquished your right to breathe." I'm pretty sure I woke my roommate up when I screeched, 'cause that's the only answer to that situation. I'm really glad that this happened in the castle so Yaone is there to heal him.

Bunny is just creepy. Amend that: Bunny is just *fucking* creepy. We all know that Bunny is far worse than anything that humanity is capable of writing, we all know there is far worse in that unknown than we can fathom, and hope never to be able to.

Crap, I was afraid he'd make an association with the torture and Hakkai. I am so glad I'm reading this at a late date so I don't have to wait for the next chapter.

Chapter 10: 'It's weird when they do it' because they're not acknowledging that they care for each other. Love isn't weird no matter how you express it, but fucking without love is weird.

If Kenren and Tenpou had acknowledged to each other their mutual attraction to Konzen, things might not have gotten so bad. Goku wouldn't even think of it as sharing, it'd just be a natural expression of love.

Damn, so good. This is just so brilliantly written.

Wow. That's all I can say... Followed by a desperate cry for more. Because this was awesome. Awesome and cool and great and hot and cool and the hot and... Well the whole spectrum of praises really... I don't review often, but you deserve it. Definately. I had to review. It's so awesome... *is still in awe*
So anyway, the story's good, the smut's better, the dark parts had shivers running down my spine and made me want to stop reading even though I couldn't and kept readong on and... Well, yeah... Amazing. Really. My sincere compliments.

Chapter 11: Okay so all this weakness bullcrap Sanzo has is left over from the previous life because he felt powerless to change, but the ass doesn't even know his own strength.

Whahahaha! He gets in trouble without even having sex!

I don't even want to think about Goku from that time 'playing' with play-doh. And Princes of war and dragons.

Wow, this was a great break in the middle of the heaviness from the main story line. I still haven't figured out *why* they're waging a war of subversion. Something is obviously not right in heaven, but I haven't a clue what's causing it.

As ever, your metaphors are splendid and each chapter is so well integrated with the rest of the story. My brain's overloaded for the moment, so I'm going to take a break and daydream of golden-haired gods coming to life.

Chapter 8: I think we see the reason *why* they had to clean the office 3 weeks ago.

I just wanted to point out for continuity's sake that you had Tenpou moving his hand in the middle of the sex scene even though they were bound at the beginning and end:
'Tenpou stretch and arm out and tried to grab the sandals as they traveled through the air...' 'Tenpou tapped Kenren on the shoulder...' 'Tenpou’s fingers mindlessly trailed against his own stomach.'

Wow, one of the reasons they're fucking is to *hinder the army*!? Damn, sneaky SOBs. And they're *trying* to get thrown out of heaven. I really need to catch up on episodes I haven't seen yet.

Chapter 7: That's one hell of a summary. Well, now we have an idea what Goku was thinking about when he was lost in thought over games of cards a couple of chapters back. Go Goku! Good sneaky little monkey. Interesting and unexpected use of the Nyoi-bo, and I mean unexpected as in I never connected sex + nyoi-bo before the beginning of the sentence, by the end of it my brain was thinking 'dildo' and then you go one better by making it a restraint. I'm impressed with the whole set up there.

Oh my, that passion chi has an area effect. Hmm, wonder if we could drown a whole building with it...

That was a sweet and beautiful conclusion to Sanzo and Goku's love making. I am so glad you wrote that and now Sanzo can see just what it was he was searching for.

That was the fucking best chapter ever. It took me over three hours to read and and I had to keep stopping because I was braking down from laughing so hard. I thought my neighbors were gonna shoot me and I'm just glad my roommates weren't around 'cause they would have.