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Oh My Goddess. I Love YOU.

This is my first time reviewing and I must say, whenever you update I stop all things and read the new chapter. I stop talking to friends, put my slow music CD [made especally FOR this fanfiction] and make sure nothing interrupts me and if something does, they have hell to pay and a Gojyo figurine imbedded into their skull.

I love how you write Gojyo and Hakkai, and your fic has made me cry more then once. This is my favorite pairing of all time, and their relationship is written so well by you and I really, really enjoy reading your Saiyuki work. It\'s perfect and flawless and the moments between them are just too cute for words. All of my friends support it from the bottom of their hearts, but my friends that support other pairings, have not converted me [I make it sound like a religion. XD] and I don\'t think it ever will. I have tried all these other Saiyuki pairings and nothing has fixated me like this pairing does and I love how you portray it and it\'s such a fun thing to read.

I will keep reading until you end it, but you need to update faster or you\'ll have a Gojyo figurine imbedded into your skin as well. Probably my bust figurine because I personally think Gojyo looks like a pug in the bust figurine set. And my Gensomaden Saiyuki 1/8th Scale Gojyo figurine is missing an arm and a foot. [Long story, let\'s just say my Gojyo and Hakkai figurines were having some rough sex.] And my Hakkai one is missing a foot too. So much for hot 58 foot sex.

Ha, I am just rambling. Anyway, I love you, your fanfictions and your kinky sex scenes. <3

Paisley

PS: Look me up on fanfiction.net as KawaiiLilMarron. It\'d be an honor if you read some of my 58 fanfiction. I suggest When The Roses Bleed. It\'s an AU but I think it\'s neglected.

You\'re the ONLY PERSON that can make me stay up so late ON A SCHOOL NIGHT! Well, you \'n Zil. BESIDES THAT, you have made me the happiest person in the world.

AH\'NESTY APPEARS. DUNDUNDUUUUUN! I don\'t know why, but she pisses me off. Probably my overly-obsessive yaoi mind taking over my thoughts. Damn ego...But, huzzah, Hakkai makes a sexy seme! Almost as sexy as a Goku seme! I\'m such a spazz. But dear GOD I love this fic. I was so, so happy to see it uploaded. I MISSED YOU~! (Clings and sobs, straightens up.)

But of course, you made up for it by far with a nice, long chapter and a SEXY AMV THAT I SHALL CHERISH AND LOVE AND GIGGLE AND BE KILLED IF I AM EVER CAUGHT VIEWING IT BY SOMEONE!

(Handcuffs to.) What? Obsessed? I know no this word!

Uh-Oh, Flaxen\'s baaaaack~. She scarily reminds me of my OC..But..Smarter. Freaky shiat, yo. Ni is a spazz. Screwin\' girls like that. Tsk, tsk. (Waves a DokugakujixGojyo flag and KougaijizSanzo one) >_> I like the oddest pairings. Just popped up in my head while reading the bits of Kougaiji-Ikkou in here. It\'s nice to see what they\'re up to.

Well, I better get to bed before I get my ass kicked. Clojaku, loggin\' off. You keep writing, I keep reviewing! (Blows kiss.)



~Clojaku

OH MY GOD! That\'s a terrible place to stop!!!!!!!!! You\'d better hurry up and update!!! Pretty pretty please with Hakkai on top? *gives her best puppy-dog face*

I totally love this chapter. I know I\'ve said it before but your Sanzo is just great. So many people peg him as a priest that they forget that he\'s a guy, too. That one line \'sometimes a stiff breeze turned him on\' was just perfect! I laughed so hard! You take these characters to a whole new level and make it believable. I\'m truly impressed with your writing. I\'m hooked! I can\'t wait for you to post again. Are you gonna break Hakkai and Gojyo up. Because if you do, I\'ll cry. Seriously. Although a threesome would be nice. Nudge, nudge. Finding this new post was the high light of my day. Thanks! Oh, and from the chapter before this one, the whole card game part, I laughed so hard I cried. And the sex scenes are just purr worthy. Keep going on this. You rock!

First, I just want to say that this is an excellent story and you\'re doing a wonderful job. That being said, I\'d like to share something with you. I was listening to the Gaelic Storm album \"Tree,\" and track two made me think of this story. It just fit so wonderfully that I had to give you the lyrics. You can hear a snippet of the song if you do a search for Gaelic Storm on Amazon.com.

\"Before the Night is Over\"

Some take their hope, and hide it away
It burns in the darkness, like gold in a grave
There\'s a spark inside, that can\'t be concealed
No hurt is so secret that it won\'t be healed

Chorus:
Before the night is over
Make your heart an open door
Then all we hold inside us
Won\'t divide us anymore
Before the night is over
And the time we have is done
Before our courage fades away
Let our hearts be bound as one

I\'ve lost my way, when nothing is clear
I\'ve been afraid to love, then I hurt what I fear
I can face the night, find strength in your eyes
not afraid to fall, not afraid to rise

Chorus

Chorus repeat & fade

Okay, I was finally able to donate a little time to this lovely chapter. Get ready for a novel-length review ^_^ First off, loved the imagery of the sun and the clear parallels you drew to Sanzo. Very well done in both subtlety and the reverse. My god you had some really humorous lines mixed in this chappy, and I love how you always manage to balance it out wonderfully. Laughed my ass off: \'How bad was it when you deflected from yourself\'; \'No point in putting up bolts at every inn they stopped at\' ; \'He also liked making use of hyperbole in his own mind -- of course no honorable Dragon King would ever admit to something like that\'; \'olfactory gymnastics\'; \'do these feelers...\'; \'Homura, please take our monkey\'; Goku recognizing Sanzo as the Jane Goodall of the group (rflmao); the scene with Goku trying to speak and people interrupting him; \'brimming over with ‘gotcha’ half-breed\'...funny as hell.
The way you described Kanan\'s hair when she rested on Gonou\'s lap was really unusual, and conjured up visuals very nicely. I adore how you describe things like that in a manner that is both visually stunning and realistic; it was so easy to appreciate the imagery of the variations of color playing on her hair. I felt the bottom of MY stomach drop out when Gonou was guilting Hakkai with \'you lied to her\'; doesn\'t that just about sum up Hakkai\'s psychological motivation to a T? Plus, the foreboding that you interlaced between the \'happy\' bits made it that much more effective.
Moving on to other aspects that hit me really hard; once again your symbolism blows me away. That\'s one of the reasons why I always want to take my time reading this fic, because the intricate symbolism you blend into the story is just so...blissfully hidden in plain sight, I don\'t want to miss it. Onward, to when Hakkai notices that the pads of his ring fingers were numb and wishes the numbness would spread; you define so much with just that little, absently-sounding afterthought. \'Like a child, he’d been playing with a toy all the while not realizing the doll’s pain\'...great line, you have a knack for making me do a double take. The carrying theme of \'numbness\'; it was breathtaking how you managed to work it in on soooo many levels. Another big one was the aching sweetness in the exchange between Hakkai and Gojyo, where Gojyo scoops him up to help hide him; very well done, especially metaphor usage. Hakkai getting weirded out by having his mouth and chin covered by silk, and the implications of that also floored me a bit...so much to be drawn from that one little tidbit you give us. Loved the dragon windsurfing and the cute running inside joke Sanzo and Goku share during the card game. The increasing tilt to the rhythm was phenomenal, especially when Gojyo is searching for that bitch. As for the general unbalance of the chapter, it suited your purposes extremely well. That\'s it for this review of EPIC proportions. Outstanding job! I\'m always looking forward to more from you.

I have spent four days reading this masterpiece. The first two were in small, sporadic periods of time. I was hooked, utterly and completely, by the seductive opiates of your wordplay. The result was a 32 hour reading marathon of what is, in my opinion, the best Saiyuki fanfiction on the Web. I bow at your alter. You have taken a permanet spot as one of my living writing muses. Thank you for blessing us with this work, and please please please give us more. I can\'t hear the word \"relax\" without shivering because of you. ^_^

Wow. Now I know I\'m not very good at reviews (I mostly just praise) but let\'s see if I can do this without getting spazzy or something. It took me three days to read this fic, and I must say that it was worth every minute. I have found that there is always one really good fic that is just perfect for certain couples. I\'ve found about four now, this is one of them. I absolutely adore Hakkai/Gojyo, 5/8. You\'re fic amazes me. You\'ve put so much work into researching and writing and making sure its perfect that I\'m simply floored. The details... I don\'t think I\'ve read something that\'s so detailed (for fanfiction anyway). The plot is amazing. I just can\'t seem to get enough of this story. I just had to finish it, and now I\'m left wanting more and have to wait for an update. I must say that your story is amazing and aside from a few minor word things I can\'t find anything wrong with it. The characters spring to life off the pages and its like I\'m there in the story. The Kenren/Tenpou moments amuse me to no end. I can\'t help but find myself laughing at times, and at other times I get all nervous over what is to happen. This story is truly amazing. I respect your writing capabilities and I praise the ground you walk on for creating this story. This is one of the best fanfictions I\'ve read. Now that I\'ve put in my two sense (which was mostly praise, but less spazzy then I normally am) I think I\'ll bow out of this review. Thank you for writing this story, I love it to death. Wonderful. Absolutely wonderful.

Just wanted to drop a quickie on how much I adored the new chapter. Excellent, excellent job; as usual, you conjured up an intruiging, dischorded rhythm and atmosphere. I\'m a bit too pressed for time to give a suitable review at the moment, but I just couldn\'t turn away from leaving SOMETHING after reading the smashing chappie. Consider this my raincheck *lol*. Well-written chapter!

Ok guys, I just found it and didn’t want to wait for the next chapter. Manga five page FREAKING ONE!!

The answer is two months and a few days.

I am such an idiot. I’ve been racking my brain with these logic lines and the answer was there in plan sight -- in black and white. Can I get anymore STUPID?

Arrrggghhh!!!

Kanan was captured for two months and a few days, which means -- it could have very well been Gonou\'s child. Gods, that\'s tragic. Easily have been his child. This is getting in a fanfic of mine some where, some how, some way -- more so that I\'ve already used it. Oh yes... yes indeed.

Till next chapter!

Cupnjava c[~]~~~*sip*