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September 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Please keep going!
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December 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
that was really really good. It flowed pretty well and i have never seen that story line before great job update soon later.
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August 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You do realize this puppy would have peed a dozen times and pooped half a dozen by now? [grin]
(Or has Daryl been at work unseen??)
Hope you continue this.
FWIW - I like your story AND Kira\'s...
(Or has Daryl been at work unseen??)
Hope you continue this.
FWIW - I like your story AND Kira\'s...
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June 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
MORE!!! This is sooooo good!!! I want to rad more!
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October 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Heheee..This is actually really cute XDD
Sure, it needs editing, and from what I read in Kira's review, it's only your first draft. Here's a thought though, just to make it interesting: Add a bit more descriptions and such. Makes a fic a happy fic ^__^
But yea, I wanna know what happens next ^_________________^ *giggle*
~Sephykoi
Sure, it needs editing, and from what I read in Kira's review, it's only your first draft. Here's a thought though, just to make it interesting: Add a bit more descriptions and such. Makes a fic a happy fic ^__^
But yea, I wanna know what happens next ^_________________^ *giggle*
~Sephykoi
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September 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Love it. You have to go on, have to write more. Drop me a line when you do, I look forward to reading it.
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September 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I think you might have a good story, but your style is confusing and quickly bores the reader. Try to use a little more mix of discriping and actuall diolog.
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July 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Well, I love that little dose of almost-humor in this story. you didn\'t put there jokes, but this humour is in your style of writing. And it\'s great. Only one thing is wrong - the story looks as if it was incompleted. (but who cares? ^-^)
And BTW (now I\'m talking to EVERYONE visiting or publishing ai no kusabi fics here) if you want to see how *good* ai no kusab fic look like, you sholud read Wasteland or Cup of Desire (both at http://www.geocities.com/dbrrk/ai.html). None of us (authors) is HALF that good (sorry, Nova, Sorry, Kira -_-\").
And BTW (now I\'m talking to EVERYONE visiting or publishing ai no kusabi fics here) if you want to see how *good* ai no kusab fic look like, you sholud read Wasteland or Cup of Desire (both at http://www.geocities.com/dbrrk/ai.html). None of us (authors) is HALF that good (sorry, Nova, Sorry, Kira -_-\").
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July 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Morgiana...thanks for insulting both Nova and me by suggesting we don\'t know what *good* Ai no Kusabi fics look like. I\'ve read Wasteland and Cup and while they\'re good, I certainly think I can hold my own. At any rate, I\'ll leave that up to my readers. *bristles, hurt* P.S. You\'re the first person ever to insult my work.
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July 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I dodn\'t mean insulting, Kira (I\'m sure you aren\'t one of these people who are totally unable to bear with little critical voice, ya?). Forgive me if that sounded like that. I just think that a man should always try to make his works BETTER, no matter how GOOD they already are. And sorry Nova, this is Your place in net, I didn\'t mean to bring any disscussion here. This is end of it, from my side.