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September 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, I really loved this. It\'s really great, the way you depict their relationship! Both mugen and jin are in characters, in my opinion, and this is what makes this fic especially great! Good job. I also like how mugen really really really wants Jin. I liked how you used specific physical characteristics of Jin to explain/describe his desire. It\'s sweet, how Jin is able to change mugen, and how mugen welcomes these changes. I am really looking forward to reading moreof this great story!!! Good luck!
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September 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You write the most accurate and genuinely beautiful accounts from both Mugen and Jin\'s persepctives. I\'ve never seen a fanfiction so eloquently written. A lovely balance between the sexual bits and the more deep, profound, and almost philosophical portions. The effort you so obviously poured into the first two chapters is so blantantly laced throughout the words. You are a lovely writer. This is one of the best fictional and \"freelance\" pieces I\'ve ever read.
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September 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Jin\'s language in the second part comes across as rather OOC... but one could argue that it\'s just Mugen rubbing off on him.
Oh, my. That came out all wrong. Or did it?
Anyway, very good job. I look forward to reading more.
Oh, my. That came out all wrong. Or did it?
Anyway, very good job. I look forward to reading more.
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September 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love this story. A gem. You write their POVs and voices so well. While I\'m not really looking forward to Mugen/Fuu, I still hope you\'ll write more soon :). And I like the way Mugen and Jin have such different perspectives on their relationship... I hope Jin manages to make Mugen understand it\'s not some kind of D/s thing...
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September 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow that was angsty lol. Poor Fuu poor...er all of em. I hope you explain why Jin wanted to be more uke lol.
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September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
mmm! great writing! please post more soon!
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September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
LOL, i love that last line. im loving this, keep up the good work
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September 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OoOO I like this fic. And lmao that part Where Jin finally kissed him first. Mugen\'s reaction was so funny. I loved it ^^.
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August 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very descriptive and in character.
I love the way you write!
Nice job, I enjoyed this one aswell.
I love the way you write!
Nice job, I enjoyed this one aswell.
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August 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
omg that was beautiful. I love this. The way you portrayed all the characters just seemed so right