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May i first point out, i appreciate your review of Pygmy.

Second, it is hard to drop you a line if your email is hidden.

Thirdity, The sequel, Pygmies, is right here: http://original.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=544203521

You're more than welcome, my ideas are yours to command...

that is, as long as you have my permission, otherwise I might have to come a knockin, if you know what I mean.

Now, as for your wedding dilema, I'm afraid I can be of no help here, that stuff is way outside my jurisdiction. So, you're on your own for now.

I'll be looking forward to more updates, and hopefully I'll get around to updating and uploading my own stuff.

Well, this is CrazyIvan, signing off for now, sepher phi, carry on.....

Well, what you may want to do, is, well depending on if this is the last part of the previous chapter, or the beginning of a new chapter, you'll want to place it acordingly, if it is the start of a new chapter, remember just to add on directly to the chapter, not put it in a whole new one. A good idea is to type everything up on word processer, spell check, then cut and paste, I've done that ever sense I kept getting ticked off at aff for auto logging me out while i typed the chapter up.

And as for permission on my idea? Well it was a suggestion, meaning you're free to use it with no obligations. Although make sure you don't use Rhett from my other fic, he isn't a truck driver, I'm not looking for a guest staring either... Hold on...

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Eh hem, yeah anyways, I look foreward to seeing the updates, as for me, well I'm starting my senior year next week, so all my updates will be even further spread out, not that I care, it's not like anyone is depending on me writing to survive... and if they are, tough shit for them.
Holy crap this is a long review, (must be the ad), Oh well, this is CrazyIvan, signing off for now.....

Um, well, uh, sure.... This is kinda I dunno, half assed? I suppose it is better then nothing though, but it's definatly half assed. I feel sorry for the trucks :( poor poor trucks. So how exactly are they gonna get together and deliver the food? I have an idea.
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Eh hem, anyways, just thought you might wanna know an idea, totaly up to you if you use it or not, but i love it. Anyways, this is CrazyIvan, hoping the next chapter is better and the love will be great! Ivan out!

Hey well I haven't read this one in a while but hope to see a long chapter up and shows them all going on with there journey and hope to see them all get along but can u tell me what goes on when you decide to write a story for any show. JTB8834@aol.com

Definatly needs a little more work, great effort though, continue on.

Hey great story but what happend to 10 it had something else but whatever u do keep up the story and hope to see an update soon

Wow, i like, it the reformating is much much better, spank you very much, wait, no don't, but you get the idea. untill next time, this is CrazyIvan signing off for now....

I have a complaint. The chater structure and format. Um, it\'s extremely fucked up very very very bad. I think instead of spreading out a shit load of two paragraph sections, you should rehash this mother, and combine several together. That way you would be putting more on a chapter, and you could do it fast then be lazy later. Just take a section, copy it, then paste it below the text of the previous chater, and vwala! Anyways, nice premise, few errors, fucked up formating, and funny machoke scence, I give it a 5 or 6 out of 10. Alrighty then, this is CrazyIvan, signing off for now.......

la ded a de da do ma. wow, that is quite odd, can you say mafia disregardations? No? I thought so, any ways, nicely done well executed.... heh heh, executed heh heh, mafia. Er herm, well, uh, looking foreward to enxt chapters, later.