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for Death Juice: It'll Be The End Of You

by griDkitty

person Alojla
schedule February 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really laughed my ass off when I read this fic!!! Inui´s mental notes are just PERFECT!
And in the second chapter you wrote some super hot GP, and Fuji is great!
I really enjoy this story! You mix humor and sexiness so it never gets dull.
I´m so looking forward to Atobes party!!!! YAY!
Keep it up!
person Digi
schedule February 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ahah! This is awesome! So many times in this story I have found myself almost dieing trying to control my laughter. I really love Inui's notes on everything that happens. Brilliant.

Continue~! Update~! I can't wait~! ::Flail::
schedule February 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
yatta! chapter 2!! ROFL, it's just getting better! heehee this is so great... of course all of Inui's italic "notes" were the highlight, adding even more humor to the funny/suggestive/sexy situations... ESPECIALLY all the comments on fuji.. nyahaa i love that sadistic boy..

A few of my favorite lines concerning Fuji:

Fuji’s penis is at the very least, 1.5 times larger than any other Regular’s. Mental note: must find out whether or not the strange food Fuji eats promotes hormonal growth...

Everyone at Seigaku knew Fuji had it bad for Tezuka Correction: Everyone EVERYWHERE knows Fuji wants Tezuka. It has now been so firmly entrenched in their minds that I have found that even Wikipedia classes Tezuka Kunimitsu as the ’property’ of Fuji Syuusuke. Conclusion: Fuji is scary.
(haha Wikipedia..)

Probability that Fuji will try and remove my head from my body if he finds out: 87.4% The other 12.6% is the probability of Fuji trying to remove my entire soul from my body and devour it so he can keep smiling all the time without his face hurting.

he was glad that Inui hadn’t made a move on Tezuka or vice versa. There would have been hell to pay Like locusts, fireballs and a 45% chance of it raining the blood of the innocent... if that had happened. But, since all was well, he decided to move on and get to the fun part – dress ups!

Mental note: Get Kikumaru to stop hanging around Fuji. Their contact should be limited as over exposure to Fuji may cause adverse reactions in the team – not to mention the universal equilibrium.


Oh, and of course these:

Oishi’s blush count increases by over 73% around Kikumaru. Sexual tension between doubles partners is unacceptable. Must add a new item to Oishi’s training menu: masturbation.

Tezuka’s frustration level increases almost ten fold thanks to Fuji prodding him in all the wrong places. Mental note: Ask Fuji to prod Tezuka in the right places for the benefit of the team. Sexually frustrated Tezuka equates to more laps than is physically possible. If Fuji refuses to prod Tezuka, add masturbation to his training menu also. Must investigate if lack of self service only runs in captains and vice captains.


seriously, like i said, just gets better and better.. and wow! oishi was awfully BOLD on that bus *giggles* and then he got caught!! lmao can't wait to see what happens next..

(btw, ryoma gettin hot and bothered over fuji is too great, only made greater by the sadist's nonchalant taunting muwahahaha)

can't wait for the next one.. hopefully it'll be ready by the time aff re-enables the edit options..

~ LG
person adri
schedule February 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow lol. that was soo yummy!!!!
person susaku
schedule February 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
**lol this fis is awsm!!! i cant wait to read the next chappie!
btw, is it fuji/tezuka or tez/fuji??? oo well, anywhoo update as soon as u can ;)
person fei-chan
schedule February 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!!!!!!! LMAO, i'm sitting here trying my best to supress my laughter enought to not wake up my room mate. I can't wait till you write more, this is the best crack fic ever!!!!!
person Kat
schedule February 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
~dies laughing~ Oh god, so good. Fuji's such a *tease*. I'd have pinned him to the wall dammit. And the sex with GP was *HOT*!
person gods aneurysm
schedule February 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like how you write Inui ^_^ and Fuji is very scary.. Write more!
person Nanaka
schedule February 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I totally LOVE this story, i won't say update soon since alot of people don't like hearing that, personally i don't care when you update, as long as you update i'm happy
person Houseki
schedule February 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*cough* ....... *silence* ....... *cough* ....... *hysterical laughing thus follows*

HOOOOOOOOLLLLLLLLLYYYYYYYYY FUUUUUUUUUCKING SHIt dood ROFLMMFAO!!! yeah..so, that was a pretty fucking CRAXKalicious fic right there if i do say so myself ^__^ i said "HOLY SHIT DOOD!" a good 3-4x throughout it lol

Inui grinned at the thought of how much money the genius would give him for an instant captain in heat formula. ( yeah...i'd pay money for that too ^__^ )

the fashion sense of a mentally ill pigmi from Hawaii who is colourblind and on steriods...” (dead on right lmao...green sweats and white loose shirt...not a hot look let me tell ya! poor inui and his incapability of dressing himself in the light *smirks*)

yeah so that was fucking great dood...the chibi bits had me rolling too....i can't wait to see what happens at the party...pure random and crackaliciousness i'm sure ^__^

great job! loved it! Motto motto onegai!!!

`General O'Chibi Nicaru Houseki

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