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April 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
For a fluffy fic this is good. Though for a second I thought it was going to be a Hawkmon + Yolei in the beginning lol.
You did great with grammar and spelling. The only mistake I found was near the end:
\"He Groaned as she rubbed his hard meat between her feathered digits.\"
There\'s really no reason to capitalize groaned.
Anyways good luck with the next chapter.
You did great with grammar and spelling. The only mistake I found was near the end:
\"He Groaned as she rubbed his hard meat between her feathered digits.\"
There\'s really no reason to capitalize groaned.
Anyways good luck with the next chapter.