rate_review Reviews

Though your style is to the point, the pacing and choreography was very effective. More. Please!

I hate trying to be subtle about begging for reviews, but I’ve a naughty comedy of my own (the first I’ve done in a LONG time) and I’d love to get some feedback from someone of your ‘caliber’ (heh heh, get it? Guns? Sousuke’s weapon obsession). The first chapter explains the characters if you’re not familiar w the characters.

ah man, what Kurtz doesn't know, ey? LOL. that's great!! i love FMP, there just isn't enough fan fic out there for it!! very well done, great torture of poor Sagara! bravo.

Full Metal Fun! I liked his explanation of why it was wrong to desire either one of the girls. That's totally how I saw it. He seemed to really fall for Kaname, but couldn't do anything about it because of his mission. From the girl's perspective, a little force would be needed. Nicely thought out. Spelling errors and wrong words (like brake for break, etc) take away from the piece, but the lively writing makes up for it.

Yummy! More!

Hee-hee-hee! Wouldn't know what to do? *Insane giggles*

Oh please, update soon!!!